This is where I stop reading. The story presented feels like I'm reading something from Frank Miller who I despise.
Unlike Fall of Equestria or Slavery is Magic, both of which bothered to give reasons why the characters were acting in a similar manner, this story used moon logic. It states that you can demean a woman all you want and she will willingly become your sexual property. That rape has no consequences. Worst of all, its depiction of 'strong' and 'intelligent' women. It's simply vile
I wish to lodge a complaint. The description claims, and I quote:
An all-female college group populated by members of the My Little Pony cast is targeted by naughty boys.
This is false advertising. So far, there has been one boy, Klein, and only that one. You should consider changing the description to reflect it's really only about that one dude, or introduce someone other than a guy for Klein to walk over.
9078637 This is where you stop? I mean, that's fine, this is certainly for a narrow audience, but like, why now?
you can demean a woman all you want and she will willingly become your sexual property. That rape has no consequences.
These were just as true before too, in fact they are kind of the whole crux of the story. At the same time though, it's kind of the point that they do want this. Klein is portrayed with some strong "animal magnetism" but it's not like he's actually mind controlling or drugging them, the girls are willingly doing all of this. (Their willingness is what makes it good cuckolding)
To be fair, Flutters was a little on the sketchy side, because she may not have understood what was going on (at least at first). but if anything, the story is actually becoming less and less non-con in nature. Flutters may not have understood (therefore potential non-con), and Gilda was basically just willing to go along with the circumstances she was placed in, but Twilight is the first to be doing all of this entirely of her own free will. Twi knows full well what's happening but she's deciding to do it anyway.
This is also relevant for it's portrayal of Twi, the self described 'strong' and 'intelligent' women, as she clearly and explicitly thinks she's better than that, but that's the irony.
Yeah, everyone is acting unrealistically, but it's a fetish clopfic.
9079450 Normally I will finished a story or movie that I start. However this chapter and the logic Twilight is using...
I will admit that Fluttershy was being naive at first, but there is a difference between being naive and what she is in this story. That asshole stripped her in a parking lot without her realizing what was going on, didn't understand what was going on with the pictures, and that art scene. There is only so much i can take before naive becomes retarded.
As for Gilda, so much for the strong lesbian who would kick their ashes if they tried anything. She just kept letting them do whatever and only issued hollow threats.
Twilight, despite the author claiming Twilight to be a rival, is written with the same intelligence as Fluutershy and the same willing as Gilda.
Look, I don't mind this sort of fetish from time to time. HOWEVER, if the author wants to write it were a man dominates strong women THEN MAKE THEM STRONG WOMEN! Do not create a world that allows one asshole to do whatever he wants with ease but otherwise follows the same rules as our own.
9079643 I get where you are coming from. I think the issue is in the difference of where we expected the story to go. I've been reading with the expectation that the NTR and the creative situations that the characters fall into were the focus, but if you came for the domination aspect of the girls I can see where the narrative would be more lackluster compared to a more realistic setting (where they would be trying to fight back more, or just not be so easily swayed). The difference of focus is important because it is really hard to do NTR in a realistic setting, this unnaturally easy compliance by the girls is the most effective way (that I've seen) of getting around the issues that would arise while trying to do NTR in a more realistic setting.
I'm glad you think so about the willingness angle! It's made the story a lot more difficult to write so I've been hoping it scratches that itch for people.
Sorry! I totally understand your frustration, I set out to write a story where the sex wasn't the focus while still being a constant thing on all the character's minds. I hope you find my other stories deliver on the sexual content with much less faffing about.
Comment posted by Bahamut Omega deleted Jul 31st, 2018
9366199 Honestly some stories are just better when the bad guys win They make more interesting what if scenarios sometimes it gets boring keep hearing the hero save the day Predictable Mandane .Preferably the main story and all the spinoffs will finish it all one big what if scenario With none of the stores really crossing over
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What is the satire being presented here?
I'm learning more about spotting satire btw.
This is where I stop reading. The story presented feels like I'm reading something from Frank Miller who I despise.
Unlike Fall of Equestria or Slavery is Magic, both of which bothered to give reasons why the characters were acting in a similar manner, this story used moon logic. It states that you can demean a woman all you want and she will willingly become your sexual property. That rape has no consequences. Worst of all, its depiction of 'strong' and 'intelligent' women. It's simply vile
..... dear lord, she's dating a guy who gets off on getting cucold... Facet actually enjoys the idea of watching Twilight have sex with Klien....
That is exactly the twist this section needed...
I wish to lodge a complaint. The description claims, and I quote:
This is false advertising. So far, there has been one boy, Klein, and only that one. You should consider changing the description to reflect it's really only about that one dude, or introduce someone other than a guy for Klein to walk over.
This has been a enjoyable story, I just really wished you included more actually straight out lemons.
9078637
This is where you stop? I mean, that's fine, this is certainly for a narrow audience, but like, why now?
These were just as true before too, in fact they are kind of the whole crux of the story. At the same time though, it's kind of the point that they do want this. Klein is portrayed with some strong "animal magnetism" but it's not like he's actually mind controlling or drugging them, the girls are willingly doing all of this.
(Their willingness is what makes it good cuckolding)To be fair, Flutters was a little on the sketchy side, because she may not have understood what was going on (at least at first). but if anything, the story is actually becoming less and less non-con in nature. Flutters may not have understood (therefore potential non-con), and Gilda was basically just willing to go along with the circumstances she was placed in, but Twilight is the first to be doing all of this entirely of her own free will. Twi knows full well what's happening but she's deciding to do it anyway.
This is also relevant for it's portrayal of Twi, the self described 'strong' and 'intelligent' women, as she clearly and explicitly thinks she's better than that, but that's the irony.
Yeah, everyone is acting unrealistically, but it's a fetish clopfic.9078898
I mean, I think there were some other background guys involved with the Gilda arc... so it's kind of correct? Maybe?
9079450
Normally I will finished a story or movie that I start. However this chapter and the logic Twilight is using...
I will admit that Fluttershy was being naive at first, but there is a difference between being naive and what she is in this story. That asshole stripped her in a parking lot without her realizing what was going on, didn't understand what was going on with the pictures, and that art scene. There is only so much i can take before naive becomes retarded.
As for Gilda, so much for the strong lesbian who would kick their ashes if they tried anything. She just kept letting them do whatever and only issued hollow threats.
Twilight, despite the author claiming Twilight to be a rival, is written with the same intelligence as Fluutershy and the same willing as Gilda.
Look, I don't mind this sort of fetish from time to time. HOWEVER, if the author wants to write it were a man dominates strong women THEN MAKE THEM STRONG WOMEN! Do not create a world that allows one asshole to do whatever he wants with ease but otherwise follows the same rules as our own.
9079643
I get where you are coming from. I think the issue is in the difference of where we expected the story to go. I've been reading with the expectation that the NTR and the creative situations that the characters fall into were the focus, but if you came for the domination aspect of the girls I can see where the narrative would be more lackluster compared to a more realistic setting (where they would be trying to fight back more, or just not be so easily swayed). The difference of focus is important because it is really hard to do NTR in a realistic setting, this unnaturally easy compliance by the girls is the most effective way (that I've seen) of getting around the issues that would arise while trying to do NTR in a more realistic setting.
9079450
I'm glad you think so about the willingness angle! It's made the story a lot more difficult to write so I've been hoping it scratches that itch for people.
9079313
Sorry! I totally understand your frustration, I set out to write a story where the sex wasn't the focus while still being a constant thing on all the character's minds. I hope you find my other stories deliver on the sexual content with much less faffing about.
9366199
Honestly some stories are just better when the bad guys win They make more interesting what if scenarios sometimes it gets boring keep hearing the hero save the day Predictable Mandane .Preferably the main story and all the spinoffs will finish it all one big what if scenario With none of the stores really crossing over