One of the most cliche, unoriginal and uninspired stories I've read.

I'll be archiving this with my other examples of "Avoid making stories like these".

6223313 Well, I have one question for you then: if you don't like it, then why did your bother reading it on the first place?

Saves the rest of us having to listen to your griping and derogatory comments.

Have a nice day.

6223423 How was he supposed to know if it was good or not? Unless you think he should have judged a story simply by its cover.

6223444 when the title involes the word caribou in it. It will most likely be part of the whole "Fall of Equestria" universe. Anything caribou related in this fandom will probably be that. I get the feeling he knew what he was getting into after reading the summary.

6223681 But he wasn't upset about the universe set in, he was mad about all the cliches in the story.

6223684 point.
It's just When it comes to this universe. People either really like it, or they really hate it. Cliches included.

There is a major question to be had, what of the alicorns? The former Elements? Because they would likely be key sources of strength once they recover, true they would likely have some form of trauma but who wouldn't? The children especially would need care, but The alicorns would likely be able to recover to help healing. Though who or what would have been keeping the celestial bodies moving when the two responsible for it are disabled? Lacking their skill even to not destroy the planet's life cycles.

To the author: your story is coming along nicely, albeit with a fair dose of grammatical errors. Other than that, the concept still piques my interest, so I shall wait for the next chapter. Carry on!

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Good. You know how to voice your opinion. Maybe you could try explaining what you find disagreeable, instead of coming up with "one of the most cliche, unoriginal and uninspired" insults.

Just commenting to insult someone's work serves no point, and is really rude. Just because you don't like it, doesn't mean it needs to be the target of flaming. There's a difference between insults and criticism.

I have nothing more to say on the matter, so don't bother replying to my comment.

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Are you saying that Displaced fics are usually filled with cliches which are the norm for that genre?

6224448 hmm. I wouldn't say all of them (which doesn't bother me either way). And when I say that, I mean in this universe, not displaced fics in general.
To be blunt with it, ChasingResonance's comment to you is how I felt. And i'll leave it at that.

Needs a line break. Fair amount of grammatical errors but that's to be expected.
Also needs timeline specification, I saw nine months, but he says a year.

I hate destiny.

This talk about destiny and war...reminds me of a saying: "War, war never changes...Unless you change the People."

6223872 dainn using magic? Idk I haven't read the actual fall of equestria yet. Just the side stories

Again, I wasn't getting any sick fantasies in my head about holding a naked mare.

The daedra doth protest too much, methinks.

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I am going to give you some advice in hopes to be able to come back one day and read this story. You should sit in a privet place and speak out loud your writing. The parts of your mind that deal with writing and speaking are different. If your reading this out loud and you find yourself stumbling over a sentence then it is likely written wrong. You have too many sentences missing entire words. Your tenses are all over the place ( past, present, future). Your not going to find many editors who want to completely rewrite every chapter for you.