After a fistfight, Diamond Tiara has finally realises that she is madly in love with Applebloom, and wants to make up for all of those years of bullying. Even if it means serving the young Apple
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This... was actually really good. Absolutely shameless, but good. I'm glad I'm following this story.
DEAR GOD SCOOTS IS A BIGGER PERVERT THAN ME and what was that porno i must know
ps this is still amazing and beyond ridiculous you hell bound mad being are brilliant
Makes actual sense. Although vore isn't my thing lol
This is good I cant believe I forgot to fav it well it better then the other one I read which makes my skin crawl
Wow. The first chap was ok, but the mechanics of this one were messed up. To put it bluntly, it's like you threw stuff at the wall until something stuck. At the very least you had proper grammar, so there's that.
I honestly don't think a kick to the ribs would knock someone out, the wind from them definitely, but unconsciousness is unlikely. Also, Why would DT straight up tell her about that humiliating dream? It just seems really odd to me. Some of the characters are OOC and their dialogue is just... random.
I'd suggest seriously revising this and getting a possible proof reader
i can actually see scoots being a porn director very easily
Whoa Scoots, you're total perv. Holy shit! that was some the dirtiest comedy I've read in my life. Just damn man, I gotta recommend this to a friend of mine, I think he'll like it.
I have no idea what's going on....AND I LOVE IT
5584385 Absolutely shameless... describes Scootaloo pretty well, and thanks for the watch!
5584493 That porno was something I made up off the top of my head, but the basic synopsis is that an alien ball of slime captures a passing woman and devours her, taking her basic form but also takes her lusting nature. after devouring the woman's husband, it grows parts and goes on a lust/ hunger fueled hunt for days, enveloping men and women, raping them, leaving just a trail of sex fluids in its wake. the police finally, after listening to a homeless person who saw what happened to a couple in an alley. They track down the alien and open fire before the homeless man throws what kept him from being attacked at it, a bottle of alcohol, which melts the alien into a puddle of water and undisolved bits of flesh. but the screen faders out, one of the victims groaning in her bathroom before passing a small blob of goo... (Wow, I just made that all of that up just now)
5584541 I used to enjoy it but then I grew bored of it
5584545 Thanks! And what story would that be?
5585523 5584550 Thanks, I'll try and fix that now
5585220 Well she hangs with one of the most literally and figuratively colorful people. Who knows what depraved materials dwell in her cloud mansion? And what friend may that be?
5586220 Aye, and poor Sweetie She has to put up with Scootaloo and keep the peace in her own way (I also get a miniature diabetes attack when I write her)
5587339 Well when you find out what is going on, could you tell me? and thanks!
5587486 it was a scootaloo rape story
Yup, still good!
5587626 ... just the description made my skin crawl
5587639 Thanks!
5587942 I gave the story the benefit of the doubt and I never regretted anything more then that.
5587978 Oi, I have done that several times
Things may be heating up for Diamond. I'm waiting for the moment when my suggestion comes into play xD
I'm mentally adding regular proclamations of "HOO!" to Scootaloo's dialogue. Please tell me I'm not the only one?
5587978
5588001 This has happened to me as well, so I know what you two are saying.
5590347 Good to know that it happens to all of us...
5591257 It's just one of those things, it can get anyone.
5592424 Yah, (The worst was "Unto this white poison" I have it faved as well as the sequel but... Every time I see it, I stand, walk away from my tablet or computer, and have a full body shiver, pointing at the screen "NO! NEVER AGAIN! [Probably an over reaction but... I cannot tell you how many showers I took until I felt clean again])
5595466 That bad huh? I've seen it of course, but whenever I looked at the description I just couldn't feel the desire to read that one, it just stood out as too much to me.
5596057 Understandable, some put me off too much to consider it
5598737 I know what you're saying.
5599510 But... all stories are good in their own way, some may be rough but if you can endure the crude beginning, the story may turn out to be great (Although incredibly disturbing)
5602766 Yes you had a rough start, but you smoothed it out rather nicely afterward, not everyone bothers to do that. That being said not all stories are good at all, some are just bad. This one is another matter though, you have a sound premise, and I can sympathies with Silver Spoon on this one, I am often right about certain things and get annoyed by it.
5603303 Same here, I have also learned over the years "I told you so" is followed by considerable pain
I also try, with every story I do, with each chapter I post, To improve, that is why I love it when people point out mistakes or even better make suggestions!
I need to be told how to improve, but also to do my own thing. I do try and improve and I see some changes for the better when I go back to what I wrote and what I have now.
Scoots umm DAMN I uhh don't know what to say Nope now I do you are one freaky woman.
This is the perfect amount of disturbing, it's intriguing but not so much to be repulsing.
I loled at this, this scootaloo is the anthro embodiment of a very fun version of scootaloo that all us youtubers know..
Still reading it
Good work so far
It's pretty amusing and is making me smile which is always a plus
STILL
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The beginning of the chchapter was good, then it went downwards...
The formatting is unclear and chaotic, the pacing is too fast, too much happens in too little text, we are getting some completely out-of-the-blue events, inadequate reactions...
I usually don't expect much from clop. But seeing that it is something more than "they've met and fucked", I can't go too easy on it.
I only hope further chapters are better written. And maybe that you'll get an editor and rewrite it in a spare moment.
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Wasn't sure if i wanted to post this but i love werid things