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The five are obviously the 'gods and goddesses', but from the way they were reacting in previous chapters I doubt that they'd not be afraid of him. As nice as this story could be, you might want to find an Editor before posting the chapters. It's to difficult to read with all of those grammatical errors. You're best bet, if you can't find one, is to go to the group Looking For Editors. There's not really a way for him to react in a bad way to the so-called 5 gods/goddesses unless you change the previous chapters considering they were horrified to find out what he was, I'd imagine that it'd only get worse when he woke up, they also reacted rather calmly introducing themselves to one of the Harbringers of Death/Embodiments of War/Spirits of Revenge/Old Gods of Avalon.
Also, you might want to delete the Chapter 2 The Awakening Preview chapter, it's rather redundant now that Chapter 2 The Awakening is up.
5481620 I keep forgetting about the preview chapter I too notice the calmest they have...I'll need to fix that how you think they should act while the introductions
5481660 Honestly I'm probably not the best to ask that. I can find and point out issues in a story with relative ease most of the time, but I'm not one to ask on how to fix it unless it's a grammatical issue, sorry.
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5481718 hahhaah
Noticed its flowing a bit better, but I think you should find an editor you, cause plants need water, sunlight and a little tender lovin care to grow.
5479654 no problem bro.
5482737 I know I'm looking for a editor today
yes it does flow better
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Awww, how cute! They think that being powerful mages makes them deities! So adorable...
How can you be valorous without opportunities to have proven your valor in the first place?
it was at that moment shining armor knew what the wraith of discord and spike fans was
7162377 and it was at this moment that Shining Armor knew he had fucked up
Right. This is too tattered for me to continue, and too... sue-ish for me to enjoy in the first place.
Excuse me? Care to repeat?
Shining is the god of valor.
Pfffffff AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH
Estos nombres son más complicados que en el señor de los anillos, la montaña solitaria
Who the f**k is Geinzah the ruler of Concordia?!