This shits getting juicy

They- they were supposed to be destroyed, hunted down to the last.

If someone as powerful as Discord is so terrified of a single human, then I'm sure the hunt went incredibly badly for the wanna-be hunters. Oh, and failed miserably.

Right now let’s hope that our human guest is not like his ancestors.

Some spirit of chaos. Pussy.

I was wrong… but…but I’m never wrong

Actually, you are frequently wrong and the episodes tend to involve you learning a lesson from it.

Please get another editor working with your current editor or get a better editor.

The mispells are killing me...help

"They- they were supposed to be destroyed, hunted down to the last."
"Humans"
'‘’Harbingers of Death’’
‘’Embodiments of war, spirits of revenge.”

... Really? Fine, only one thing left to do in this case.
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Perfect

’’and that lizard is no more than servant; only a slave to whip around.”

Is it just me, or is Shining Armor just a tad bit very ooc here? He should know how much Spike means to Twilight, aside from the romantic part.

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Right now let’s hope that our human guest is not like his ancestors.

Oh, and I'm sure that whatever we did, you deserved it.

Most likely the ponies are terrified of humans and tried to kill us all because we are warriors and apex predators whereas the ponies and Discord are herbivores. And prey. Now, while we wouldn't eat them we would hunt and eat the things that hunt and eat them. Which is definitely more terrifying from their wimpy perspective.

So. It just looks like Shining Armor is racist because you need an antagonist rather than something that gives depth to his character. Your grammar is also awful.

Here's an example: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1PjY79eeJmaRepCFIAULdzqXwPwtLiRQOsxn12m_fKkU/edit?usp=sharing

Just the number of edits for the first two pages alone is too much for an "edited" chapter. You get one more chapter to have this story make sense.

Twilight, you fucking idiot.

“Thank you private, you may return to your post” Shining Armor commanded who also ascended to the alicorn form months after his wedding with the princess Mi Amore Cadenza, the alicorn of love. But she asked to be called simply Cadance.

WHAAAAAAAAAAAAAT

“Oh Spiky-Wikey that was so sweet from you…” Rarity said while she fluttered her eyelashes at him, however at seeing this Spike’s minds started to silently insult her with his thoughts, but he pushed those thoughts aside because he was taught better to never hold a grudge against somepony.

Go buck yourselfe rares, you had your chance

‘But he need to learn his place, even if this sounds arrogant we are his superiors and he is nothing to the other gods.’

Now that i think about it, what is shining armor? The alicorn of shields?

Blueblood appeared to be offended as he left the room but secretly he talked to the princess through the mental link. ‘Be careful Auntie I noticed that this magic has resemblance to the Alicorn magic to some degree and that it can create small explosion.’

YES!! Finally a blueblood who's not a total prick

“Just put a horn-lock on it, or you can’t carry out something that simple‘’ said Shining with disdain for his replacement, but seeing in the other said he is much better positioned than Fleetfoot.

Sorry prince prick armor. But in theory, a horn-lock would need a HORN to work

“B-But humans are a myth, their existence would defy so many things‘’ exclaimed Princess Twilight “You must have a decent proof to claim such a thing.”

Do not defy your elders knowledge twilight

‘’Embodiments of war, spirits of revenge.” added Shinning Armor reverently. “Old gods of Avalon.”

Uuuuuuh, i like those titles

“Oh by all that's Chaotic and misfortune in the multiverse, Twilight get away from him!” Discord shouted with all his lungs.

Oh for the love of

“I was wrong… but…but I’m never wrong”

Yeah this is life for ya

To relief to somebody in specifically and complete shock or surprise to the others, Twilight was silenced by a hand clenched into a fist.

Shut up bitch, i'm trying to sleep here

Me gusta que Shining Armor sea un idiota. Significa Mi Amore Cadenza soltera, harem Alicorn

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YES!! Finally a blueblood who's not a total prick

if you want a competent / heroick blueblood
try Cultural Artifacts by Dan_s Comments (competent, not much "screen time")
or Gold and Brimstone : The Ultimate Team of Destiny by WiseFireCracker ("hero blueblood" about 95% "screen time" but not the main character)

‘But he need to learn his place, even if this sounds arrogant we are his superiors and he is nothing to the other gods.’

These horse-fuckwits are not gids!