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Second I think anyway ILOVEIT
the pacing reminds me of a soap opera, its kinda nice
Then obviously they are not gods. Astral plane presence or no astral plane presence. Besides, the mistyness of their vague forms there implies they do not actually have an existence in the astral plane but are simply using magic to push some small form of their spirit into a minute presence in the astral plane. Which still means they aren't gods and supports that they are just powerful mages. Even then, not all that powerful after all given they are considered godly powerful to ponies yet to human master wizards in this fic they are...weak.
Well... that scalated quickly
Una reacción exagerada por faltar a un desayuno
I can't do it. I tried giving this fic a proper read, but between the horrendous grammar, the use of words you clearly don't know what they mean, and Alkeyore being an unlikable dunce asshole it is just too much. I'm goin to have to drop this one, despite me liking the concept.
If I had any advice to give it would be to get someone to edit your writing for you, and to stop using a thesaurus. You use a lot of words that really doesn't make any sense in context. Like calling a nickname a pseudonym, or derogatory. It doesn't make much sense. You COULD use those words in other contexts, but not the way you're using them here.
I know English is not your first language, that much is clear just from reading these past few chapters.