Sunset Shimmer thinks Adagio Dazzle is, shall we say, really hot. But Adagio has no interest in friendship or redemption. Fortunately, though, Sunset has figured out what she does enjoy: Being adored.
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I feel like what happened in this chapter is way too big to be solved in less than 2k words.
edit: and now it hit me that Adagio agreed to have sex with Sunset just to get to the notes.
I see where Dbz is coming from. I get the effect of what happened here, and really dig it. But it was a whirlwind. The sort of thing I'll need to re-read it a time or two to really get the full deal.
Oh dear.
*sigh*
HAH!
I think so.
YouR friend. Also, nice.
Best pLAce. Also, hopefully, yes.
Also, WHAT just happened?
No, Adagio, what have you done :...(
(just kidding)
"Adagio came to an abrupt." - an abrupt halt?
"caught in some moment of Adagio" - would 'adagio' need to be capitalized?
"Adagio was kneeling beside her her" - double "her"
"Them gems thumped" - the
"A paused, then she pulled" - Adagio/She
"Sunset moved froward" - forward
"standing on her own feel" - feet
"I don't think either of wanna drag this out. Just – I can't say I'm you friend" - missing "us", your
"Best palce for them" - place
(take your time, you don't need to do edits if you're not up to it - it's entirely coherent. life things should take precedence and it's good to hear you're not neglecting it)
troll Adagio that's not funny (but it kind of is)
You know, I was thinking about why Aria's always gone and this totally makes sense. I'd gotten really sad for a second, too entranced with the scene to think it was totally be a double-cross. I love that intense set up you've done, with Adagio's curiosity in Sunset's notebook, that passing comment about Sonata being good with magic. I wonder if Adagio suspect Sunset's ability in magic to be able to help this whole time and that colored her decision to keep seeing her, if not accept her proposition to begin with. So much layers. It hurts, I can't dig deep enough.
Oh god, and that must've seriously fueled Adagio's guilt after they actually got closer, and that's probably a lot of that 3 week soul search and random Catweasel show.
Why were RD and AJ with Sonata - I'm guessing they were with her when Aria messaged here? That resolution Adagio has with them (and then with Aria/Sonata) is nice.
Everything is so perfect. Part of the rushedness comes through as frantic action and though I'd've liked to see more (because I greedily want more), this is very nice. sonata has a cute car and that brief thing about Sunset fitting with a motorcycle is awesome
edit: I love that the two the rainbooms trusted this whole time 'because they apologized' were actually biding their time while the unapologetic one saved their sorry asses
. . . you know, if Sonota could tinker with the gems and make them run on good energies (happiness, love, primal animalistic lust, ect.) then the Sirens could stop feeling so beaten but also not be such a worry for the Rainbooms.
At first I thought you meant Adagio's eyes, since it was her face that was the subject
I'm actually pretty bad at grammar stuff, so I might be technically incorrectbut I think if you said "her own eyes" it would clarify that shift back to Sunset.I can't stop thinking about this story. I can't stop replaying this scene and rereading this chapter. And then every other chapter before, making little connections. I'm going to cry when it's marked 'Complete'.
The Morris Minor is a distinctly British car. That is all.
6343517 This makes me want an Adagio cover of "Awesome As I Wanna Be" for some reason.
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