You must be a brave one, you know? Keep up the good work here...

Surprisingly I'm finding this quite interesting, and Fall of Equestria stuff usually bores me. Good job. Plus you'rewriting about Spike being a fucking badass, so yay for that.

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Join the club...

Hell yes, good sir!

If you need some help with editing, I'll try for the next chapter! PM me, dude.

Also, I place this song on every Anti-Fall story. I fele it sums up the entire world and feel perfectly. The verses speak of the Caribou control, and the chorus the howling cry of the rebels.

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There's a club?
Ooh ooh ooh, do you have cookies and t-shirts?

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That is not what I had meant....

Oh my [beep]ing goodness, such Gore, so much dark emotions with a little spilight on top this is awesome

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Damn it. Now I want cookies.

Talk about gruesome my friend.

So far I don't see a crime other than blood madness.

You know what this remind me of?

Ekhidna somehow I don't like this fic really I dislike it, I love your work but well... you know... this ....yea

Your syntax is all over the place, you use commas where periods should go (a common punctuation problem that messes up the aforementioned syntax), and you overuse "as".

Here's a hint: when you're gonna write an "as", see if it can be replaced by "while". If it does, great, now alternate between the two. If not, you write "then" or "and" because "as" is wrong.

This story is interessting I mean the caribu are mostly shown to be rapists and warmongers. Is that a justification to kill them all? I will read on and see where this leads us.

5242986 Thanks dude!

5242994 Yay indeed.

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5243064 There's more to come.

5243236 Believe me, it's going to get worse.

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5243855 Maybe, but I see that song to be based more in the ignorance of two cultures and the greed of one man.

5244071 That's alright. I knew right from the start this isn't for everyone. Still glad you like my other work though

5244340 Yeah, a problem I can't seem to get rid off. I'll follow your advice and fix it up a bit.

5244367 Glad to see it caught your attention

5244430 I do find vigilantism is sometimes better than justice........ Sometimes

Usually not a fan of this verse, but... this one I will admit has peaked my interest so I shall see where the rabbit hole takes me.

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Indeed, it is...

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Yeah, I'm sorry about it...

5244455 in a world where liars protect other sinners in a 'court of justice' yeah who would think of it.....

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Exactly...!

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More like crimes against the regime rather than morality that Spike committed.

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By definition, yes...

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The world has changed in there; let's give some time for chapter two.

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You're welcome...!

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Only because this world, Equestria has changed...

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So will I; come, let's walk together down inside...

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Yeah... who exactly? Speaking of which, this reminds of a song here:

YAY! Someone who want's to show all the blood and death to these horrible fuckers! HUZZAH TO YOU MY FRIEND

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But... but I want it now!

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Have patience first; virtue alone will be rewarding enough.
All that will be need for the next of the other stuff.

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Hear hear...

5244744 This entire idea of Fall is just...what the fuck man? Am I right?

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I know right? The sheer existence of that concept nearly robbed me of my sleep.

How do they move the sun and the moon in this universe? I mean all Alicorns lost their horns as well as all the unicorn mares. In the diary of the two sisters it's said that it needed groups of unicorns to move one celestial body. And it drained them of their magic. How does King Dainn do it?

5244792 Yeah pretty much. I hated it so much and yelled at the people who made it.
5244836 There's a tumblr of it sadly and it said 'Gravity'. By red collared Twilight

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That is ... booooorring.
In a magical land of talking ponies there could have been a better explanation.

5244934 When it's a magical land of women being raped(or rapped I don't know) by a bunch of guys thinking 'men are better'...I think it's story telling is pretty stupid to say the least.

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Perhaps that gravity is a codeword for auxillary power, that or unicorn stallions...

5245027 Probably...or maybe they are just that bored that they don't want to do anything

5244476 to me Spike went mad, a berzerker even and all to avenge his friends and family. Yes, Genocide is a warcrime, but is it the price to pay for slavery and abuse? And are the ones judging Spike his peers? They stood and watched as those crimes were commited and did nothing. By definition Spike did what they cannot or would not. He freed his friends, family, and country from invaders and occupiers. The Griffins, Dragons, Minotours, etc stood and watched and may even have aided the Caribou. Spike admits his guilt, he admits lollygagging because he failed to act sooner. The Caribou deserved to die, and Spike and Equeustria deserved there revenge.

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We will see what Ekhidna has planed. Only he knows how the story will play out.

Caribous getting what they deserve? I'm so looking forward to more of this

5245308 Very true, I am just applying what the rules of war would permit or be used for or against him. In many ways we have a hostile group of judges passing judgement on what could be construed as either a Partisan or a Rebel against a lawful authority. Not a war criminal unless you get really loose with the rank Spike may have held. Was he a elected leader? One that seized power? A Warrior Champion? There trying him for Genocide for killing the Caribou yet he wasn't the only one doing the killing. He was just the leader or one of them and if other leaders were female then how would they judge a mare who had been repeatedly humiliated, raped, and abused for the same crime? Looks to me that Spike may be a scapegoat, one thrown to the wolves to pay for a crime but also to throw others off the scent for aiding and abetting such crimes. The Law of War actually allows for prisoners to be killed in some situations like when they cannot be made prisoners safely. And would the Equestrians have trusted a surrendered Caribou at there backside? doubtful.

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Quite the contrary to say the least...

5245587 You never know when a bunch of women are trying to get into their pants all the time -_-

Your description intrigues me, i shall read this despite i dont like this universe

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We don't know if the nations of the judges helped one side or the other. Spikes army had changlings and mares from saddle arabia as stated in the story. Still he stands trial befor them.

One chapter out and we already speculate like there is no tomorrow.

The question for me still stands. Does the liberation of one country justify the death of an entire race. Even if the caribu threaten them, not all of them are to blame. The woman in their sociaty are victims as well and normaly you would not blame a kid for the sins of its parents.

5245656 Thats the question to ask, did the army of Equestrians go too far? It was not uncommon for medieval cultures to kill all adults from a certain age upwards when the conquered a country. And from all evidence Equestria is essentially a medieval culture in many ways. Its entirely possible the Equestrians and Spike blamed all male Caribou and killed them but left the females (who probably weren't all that smart) alive. But with no males the species dies out within a generation as half breeds don't really count as one species or another.