Trinity's End: Harmony's Offer
The second worst thing in life is if we don't get what we want.
The worst is if we get it.
White light everywhere.
I am not amused. I've been here before.
"Not again. I'm not doing this shit again." I mumble to myself.
A mirror appears.
Black unicorn walks out of what was supposed to be my reflection.
"Well, it's traditional for a soul to pass judgement on itself before it goes into the great beyond, right?" says Mistake.
"Ooookay. My name is Blazing Light. I am a failure who managed to almost throw the world into chaos multiple times, who can't keep friends because he is a piece of trash not worth their time, and who has failed everypony he's ever met. Tadaaa, done!"
I thought this would be the case.
The soothing voice comes from all around.
You are not fit to judge yourself, young unicorn.
"Nonsense, I know myself better than anypony."
Is there nothing you've done that resulted in good outcome?
"There is," I hesitantly admit. No real point of lying to the great voice in the emptiness who doesn't have the manners to introduce itself.
My name is Harmony.
"Guessed that much. Yea, some things ended well but I wouldn't have had to save anything if I didn't start it in the first place so there's that."
Let me show you the result of your trickery.
"It wasn't that much of a plan. Stay hidden and unknown until Holy Light attacks. Protect the Bearers until they get the explanation about some ponies being gateways to Nightmare's power and allowing it to interact with the world. Pretend to be evil so your Elements are used at full force. Die in the blast with Holy and eliminate Nightmare for ages to come. Not smart, not complex, very effective. Worked pretty well I think."
I have the ability to purify as well as to destroy. My power was used by the Bearers when Luna emerged from her imprisonment on the moon. Had you not tried to steal my power you might have lived.
"Why bother? Crom hates me and Chokey doesn't want to be near me. My only chances for happiness are gone."
Ah yes, the only question you do not know the answer to.
"Har har, very funny."
Just watch.
"Fiiiine," I get ready for the instant replay of my death. Maybe I'm juuuust a little jaded but being left alone by everypony I believed in sort of leaves a bitter taste.
"You saying you're bitter is like saying Discord is just a tad unorganized," Mistake snickers.
"Get out of my head, head."
The definitely not air in front of me wobbles and a clear image appears.
These are several things that happened during the week after your death.
Heavy Hoof lets Cromach go and Three stops pressing a blade to Chokey's neck. Princess Twilight walks over to Heavy and orders:
"Guards, shackle him."
Chokey unwraps a set of chains from her belt and locks them around Heavy's hooves. He doesn't resist in the slightest.
"Mind giving the letter from my saddlebag to mirror Twilight?" Heavy asks and Crom rummages through the bag, taking out a small envelope.
I know what is in there. Nopony was supposed to know about the plan aside from Heavy, Darkhorn, Guiding, and anypony they thought necessary for the completion. The only reason I wrote it down for mirror Twilight was so that she didn't suspect anypony on our side of the portal from trying to use Nightmare's power against her.
I don't need anypony else on our side to know the truth. It doesn't matter anymore.
Cromach hands the letter to princess Twilight but it gets snatched out of his talons by mirror Twilight's telekinesis.
This was my last gambit. The only way of protecting Guiding and Heavy from execution. Well, begging for help can't really be called gambit but it was all I had. Dignity has no value for me.
Thankfully, unicorn Twilight understands.
"Take these three away," she points to Guiding, Three, and Heavy, "but if anything happens to them you can consider it a declaration of war."
"What?" princess Twilight shakes her head.
"They will explain. Now leave this place," her horn lights up and a small portal appears, "we have a loss to mourn."
"A minute of silence," I say, feeling as if I was drunk, "Aaaa, nevermind. Five seconds is enough for the likes of me. Can I go now?"
Quiet, you!
Soldiers in Holy Light's army start falling over as Nightmare's hold over them disappears. Soon enough, the alive ones quickly realize what protected them from the alicorns is gone.
Celestia disperses Scream's illusion and her voice, amplified by magic, promises the soldiers who give up safe return to Zebrica. Many of them immediately leave the side of the massive army but some believe the pony force is tiny and cannot stand against them.
Those continue the assault as a single alicorn flies into their midst. Celestia, for a brief second, summons the power of the sun directly into herself.
The conflagration is brief but the white ash flying around will enrich the soil for time to come.
Seeing what single princess did in a second makes everypony still alive drop their weapons.
The dragons, however, fight until the end. Even without the protection of the Nightmare they are more than a match for Icy Gaze's rapidly diminishing fleet. At least until one of them manages to set Scream's tail on fire.
The alicorn of Lust gets very, very mad.
The dragons get very, very dead.
"Hah! And they say dragon scales don't burn," I hoofbump Mistake.
"Well, fire usually isn't green and made of teeth," he bumps back.
If I had a body I would facehoof.
Heavy Hoof sits in the Canterlot castle dungeon, looking up at princess Luna walking in.
"You shall not be executed and there will be no formal action taken against the dreamlings," she says.
"There is no need to bend the law for me, your Highness," says Heavy grimly.
"It all depends on what you call the crime, young pony. You will, of course, be stripped of your Royal Guard rank. We cannot keep those who disobey us around."
Heavy nods.
"I will find a job elsewhere. Police forces around Equestria must be hiring."
"No, you will not," Luna smiles at him, "You have a debt to pay to the crown."
She summons a scroll, unrolls it, and starts reading.
"We write to inform you that in light of certain recent events connected to the Order of the Silver Sun there arose the need to restore the reputation of this ancient and important organization. In order to do so there has to be appointed a new leader who will claim the rank of baron and gain access to all currently frozen Silver Sun assets. Such is the price of your freedom and since we cannot risk any hostility from the mirror world you will be free."
"Huh?"
"It is rare to see somepony as devoted to protecting others as you are, baron Heavy Hoof. Defying everypony including me and my sister took a lot of courage. I believe you shall restore the light the Order lost long time ago."
"I am not flawless."
Luna opens the cell door.
"Nopony is. You are trying very hard to be though and can inspire others to strive for it as well. It would be a shame to see somepony like you rot in prison. You are free now. Go home and see my sister first thing tomorrow."
"Yes, your Highness," he bows.
"We wish you the best of luck, baron," Luna bows as well.
"I-I don't know what to say."
Then why are you talking? Celestia is currently hammering out a business treaty with the Darkhorn clan. Your daughter explained everything to the sisters and they took these steps. Everything you worked for is safe.
"Good," I take a deep breath and smile, "I can sleep in peace then."
Not... yet.
"WHAT? WHAT MORE DO YOU WANT ME TO DO?!"
Calm down.
"No! Discord used me, Nightmare used me... I was an idiot to think you would be different."
ENOUGH!
I freeze. Mistake disappears. The voice loses its force.
Enough. As little as you might believe it I feel sympathy for you and not only because you were useful for me. You are just a hurt colt but I know you have the potential to become greater than many. I called you here to offer you a chance.
"What chance?"
I can purify you of all divine power and give you new life.
"But I would still be me. That's not a victory for anypony."
I disagree. As they say, you know your first true love because it hurts.
"Low blow," I scowl.
Oh? Am I wrong?
"You're right, okay? I loved both of them. Yes, they were the only reason I tried to make things work. I'm not a hero. I'm not even a good pony. I don't care about Equestria, griffons being eaten alive, or minotaur civilization. I just wanted to give those two a chance to see tomorrow. I'm THAT seflish."
Then why not go for a tomorrow together?
"They CHOSE to leave me. I wasn't good enough for either of them. I didn't deserve them anyway."
It seems to me you are trying to make yourself believe it rather than me.
"I'm just explaining things as they are."
Well, what do you choose? Will you return to them and make their days just a little brighter or... leave them?
"ME making something brighter? Right, Blazing-fucking-Light. They are better off without me, aren't they? They must be. I can't help them, I-"
Choose, little unicorn. Do not dwell on it too much. We both know where that path leads.
Is there really hope for me?
Don't think about it. Just pick a path and follow it to the end.
"I-"
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"I give up. I just want peace. They can do much better than me."
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Damn... true to form from start to finish.
I won't lie, I was hoping for something a little different, but that wouldn't be the choice of a guy who chose to live a life under the name "Mistake". Honestly, he deserves a little R&R. Crawling through waist deep shit really takes it outta a guy.
Anyway, loved the story, shall be keeping an eye out for further horse words.
5631791 Don't worry. Peaceful rest is something my little punchhorse will have to work for.
5631853 I'm guessing that he will have to fight for it.
5631857 There will be some fighting, mostly of the catbird variety. Also, massive minotaur mammaries and a loooot of introspection.
9246326
I screwed myself over with that one... Welp, see you in an hour... or a week.
9246374
Maybe you'll find some more holes in this changeling of a storyline.
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This is a recap, not an accurate depiction of events. The accurate depiction of events, in fact, are the stories themselves depicting the events... somewhat accurately.
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•Heh, I don't think I want to... Plot hole infestations are serious business, barely escaped from the library in one piece the last time.
•Shouldn't a recap be accurate too?
9246786
Pff, I fixed that immediately by making it worse but less plotty!
In what happened? Yes. In how many freckles were on the face of the moon that time? Not really. It's a quick recap, not a history book.
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No, no, you're right on this one. But for once this isn't my fault, I thnk. You see, at the time the series hadn't said where the hive was yet, that was revealed years later. This weill need a revision along with the relevant Imbalanced chapters. Rewrite list on this one.
EDIT: It wasn't that bad. Few changes to "an abandoned outpost near the hive" did the job, both in Imbalanced and the recap.
9246445
I'll have a look at this one if I don't forget. It won't take too much effort, and is somewhat relevant.
EDIT: Easy, done.
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Same principle applies much later for The Corrupted, only with a different and somewhat less successful god.
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•Mhm... Problem is this library will never pass a saftey inspection in this state...
–Okay...
•You could just say the Hive in the Everfree was a backup hive, one that Chrysalis&co retreated to being far closer than the main hive, especially in their weakened state after the invasion...
Kind of like how some rich people have a summer home to go to nearby some fancy beach resort that they own... Except instead of a summer retreat, it's either a backup hive, or what used to be a hive for some different changelings, before its inhabitants fled... or something. See? I can come up with semi-credible bullshit too...
•Okay.
•Guess I will have to see that bit for myself... when I get to it.
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Shocking revelation, I know.
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Once again, I'd blame this on the recap, which is supposed to give an overall picture, although you do have a point. The mental battle happens overall during HaW, not exactly during the real time of the chapters they are in. There are only few points where the events are close. The Second Diary (the 3 stories) is a rewrite candidate, I know.
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Oh yes, I will definitely postpone all ongoing updates and lose everyone waiting for the finale of Management for that. I'll lose them anyway once I get back to updating only Legacy of Light, so at least give me my last 2 weeks of success. :D
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M-Maybe...
...
...
...no.
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I'm not gonna read ahead so that I can't answer correctly, because I genuinely can't remember. Or more accurately, I don't recall exact timings for certain future events.
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It's important to have fun in whatever little moments of peace you're allowed.
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I spilled alphabet soup and uploaded the result.
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That could have been an interesting response leading to more cute and sexy times.
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As I always say - horrible sex jokes and depression, there's not much more to it.
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And for me it's "To the workplace!"
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•Why, it's so shocking! Who knew!? Why, I must spread this gossip at once!
•Okay... nothing more to say on this subject.
•No! You musr suffer as you rewrite the recap! SSSSSSSSSSUUUUUUUFFFFEEEEEERRRRRRRR!!!!!
•You are evil.
•Whatever...
•Rule #32; Enjoy the little things.
•Ehh... maybe you should stick with making sandwiches...
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•Heh.
•Well... the combination of which can vary from time to time...
•Which will later be, "To the money!"
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It gets a bit more complex as the story goes.
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The official title from now on.
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No, and it's strictly only because chickens are delicious.
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Well, it's still true.
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Yeah, keep trying to tell Blaze something bad WASN'T his fault. That's gonna take few more books to get through his skull.
9251708
Cro made a good first impression.
9251709
Does this even count for Blaze's stories anymore? He could say "This is going to go to hell immediately!" and it'll get even worse even faster somehow. Heck, he couls say "I like potatoes" and it would summon a world-ending demon on the level of Chokey's cooking.
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He shouldn't have.
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Nah, this one's correct. I think someone noticed at some point in HaW, although I'm usually wrong about everything ever.
9252042
Sigh...
I write a chapter just for fun ONCE on the spur of the moment after seeing a new MLP episode, literally ONCE...
Alright, fixed to Tirek something something blood and mango related. Too long to recall what I slapped in there atm.
Chokey's good at hiding stuff. Or maybe no one really did notice in HaW and I remember things even better than they were, which is a horrifying thought in a way.
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•I will take your word for it.
•okay...
•seems legit.
•voice still needs to shut the hell up
•well, at least he's making some progress...
•or a bad one... hard to tell. Meh, it's hilarious either way...
•yep. Being inside any of the Imbalanced books is a death sentence... no, it's worse than a death sentence. At least in death you may finally have some peace, but in one of Blazing's stories..? Only when it makes things a million times worse for everyone else than how much better it will make things for you, then, and only then, maybe... maybe the reaper might consider the possibility of giving you the mercy of death... an even then, it will almost certainly last for only so long before even Death himself spits you back out, not wanting to be near the mountain of bad luck you are bringing him just by being remotely connected to the Imbalanced storyline.
•nope. Shouldn't have even considered thinking that thought...
•welp.
•Well, in hind sight, her having a slim body as described when she was first introduced in imbalanced does tip it off... you know... after you think about another line very far away from that one, particularly the one that was said after Cho met Cross, and said how she knew he was a changeling with how "his bulky build screamed 'fruit eater', while his long fangs screamed 'blood drinker..."
But I assumed that was 1. Because she was female, she was naturally more slim. 2. Her workout routine and diet as a guard wasn't so much for her to bulk up like say, the workout routine of a body builder.
The only other thing I can think of in hind sight is how she acted when she met that other blood drinker, and asked for her name, before her thoughts reacted in disgust at how traditional blood drinker names were, but once again, with the whole "Tirek the Mango Craving" line, and how, later on, her story on why she got that name in the first place, rather than just saying that her parents were traditionalists implied otherwise.
That said, I think she is only a half blood drinker... it would explain her love for mangos, and how not every single pony she sleeps with complains about the literal pain in their neck... which should've tipped someone off... ooor something.
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Nightmare's a bitch.
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I'm just gonna say rewrite list for HaW, and add something more obvious.
Welp, sorry I didn't say anything yesterday. Just taking a break from Fim for a few days. Will be back reading soon.
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Don't worry. You are not contractually obliged to read my stuff constantly.
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Probably a coincidence, but still badass.
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Okay, off to Skies... up until these two connect.
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Or it was the good old kind of magical explosion which hurts only the intended targets, or specifically doesn't hurt certain friendly targets. Smartbomb? Smartbomb!
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*The janitor pulls out a massive book and flips pages until he seemingly finds the correct one.*
User manual says: Read FH until the return to Canterlot. Then read TTS because it ends with the return to Canterlot. TTS isn't necessary to FH, just a different point of view with more details.
*Then the manual falls into a plot hole where despite any presence of flames it catches on fire.*
*A moment later it reappears undamaged under the janitor's desk.*
"Plot holes solve everything," the janitor shrugs.
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...of a bunch of other boooooooookssssss.
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Eeeexcellent.
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At this point you should know me well enough to know that I'll take that comment as a statement that until then things were boring.
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Because your assumption is wrong.
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...pretty much. How far am I through, anyways?
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2. ...I knew a guy once. Was a janitor. Didn't say too much, didn't do too much either... but what he did do? ...whatever it was he did do... he did it right.
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3. ...I could talk about how much I like pizza, and you would take it as me claiming pizza is far superior to you. I could say how much I hate Hitler, and you would take it by saying that you are far worse than him...
9260012
4. Okay... but that leaves the question... Whatever happened to Bucket?
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I dunno, about halfway there, I guess?
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It's stated they hire mercenaries.
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I'm pretty sure he was brought back with the others.
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Something is coming.
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No idea. Come to think of it, losing a major element would have broken the balance between gods and screwed Harmony over pretty hard. I'd say Discord or Nightmare are doing something nasty there.
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Offscreen atm. Was supposed to happen in TTS, but that one's unfinished.
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Yeah, because Blaze now absorbing both magic and divinity and possessing NM's power definitely means he's her slave... cleeeearly.
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That's a little better train of thought. A question that I actually don't need to answer in the comments.
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1. ...We've gotta hold on, to what we got! It doesn't make a difference whether we make it or not! We've got eachother, and that's a-lot!.. for looove... WE'LL GIVE IT A SHOT!
Woooooaaaaah! Halfway there!.. Woooooaaaaah! Livin' on a prayer! Take my hand, and we'll make it, I swear! Woooooaaaaah! Living on a prayer!
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2. Yeah, I seen that a few paragraphs later... still, it is hilarious thinking about a pony trying to disguise themselves as a minotaur...
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3. Okay, hope to see more of him soon.
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4. The plot man cometh
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5. Maybe someday you should write a story on that...
"Meanwhile, in Blazing's original world..."
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6. Okay.
9260999
7+8. Hmm... Curiouser, and curiouser...
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That would be pretty funny. Short, but funny.
So, you know how we got rid of the guy who over he next three hundred years works his way to being an actual godslayer? And then we stole Harmony's Element and caused massive imbalance in gods' powers?
"Meanwhile, in Blazing's original world..."
...shit's fucked, yo."
The End.
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...seriously though, I can imagine Nightmare or Discord popping out from that world after it has been practically destroyed, and coming into Blaze's current world... or something or another... I don't know.
Hell hath no fury, than a
womanmarescorned.Alicorn of lust
...to quote the cover of the first book... "Choices, and our ability to stick to them, are what makes us ponies. It doesn't matter whether they are right or wrong, the important thing is that they had to be made."
What time is it?
adventure–overall review time!Okay, the mystery is done... quite well, in some parts (mainly the Golden Sands arch) where the whole thing kept me wondering what was really going on... mainly when it seemed where Blazing became a bad guy, the vision Scream gave to Discord, etc.
Still, you could have played the mystery aspect of the story a little better, likely using cliffhangers and the like, but as it stands... I've seen better. I've seen far worse as well.
Next. I have caught more than a few spelling errors in there, but nothing too bad. One final complaint was the general lack of the comedy you are known for. I mean, it is there, but nowhere near what I am used to from your other stories.
As for good things? Like I said, the mystery has been done quite well... even if not the suspense, the world you carved's complexity has increased quite a lot with this story, along with a buttload of character development. Not to mention it's another good story from the Imbalanced verse to read, and I am even closer to that T-shirt.
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Yeah, about three boks ago.
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All my minotaurs are surprisingly wise, Skullbreaker excluded.
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HE'S BECOME SELF-AWARE. QUICK, RUN!
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The point of the protection spell was also to disperse kinetic energy, so that wouldn't have worked either, but good thinking. The general idea was that the magic effects DID cause high waves, but those calmed down as soon as they got into the protected area.
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Neither do I, because I don't know what the chapter is about exactly! HAHAHAHAAAAAA!
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Girls just wanna have fu-uuuuun. Oooh girls, just wanna have fuuuuun.
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Technically, Blaze DOES stick to this choice.
Unfortunately (maybe) for him, Mistake didn't read the first book's blurb.
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I'm pretty sure the only remotely funny books from now on are "Shine of the Silver Sun" and those NOT from the Imbalanced series.
And holy shit, I'm known for COMEDY? All this, and what sticks in your head is the COMEDY?
I was doing it wrong all this time, it seems.
Interesting choice of words considering Cromach's and Blaze's relationshi- shoo, dirty, dirty brain!
Fiiiiine, I'll go and feed the stitching slaves in my evil underground lair.
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Spoopy voices.
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Tentacles make everything better.
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But what if Mistake becomes the therapist? Plot twist!
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Swimsuits!
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It gets better. As little as it feels like, it gets better.
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Yeah, Cro's fun times ended when he followed Blaze the first time in Canterlot.
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D) Become the godslayer.
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He ded. The next 572 Imbalanced books only repeat "Screw Flanders!".
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Who knows?
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Damn, I knew I should have rated this as Mature.
If you ever get to reading "Shine of the Silver Sun", I'll prove you wrong.
But yes, this is a very important thing to keep in mind to understand why the gods act the way they do in further stories.
i do not know witch is worse! that you lie to me, or that you lie to yourself! naughty naughty unicorn! go apologize to the bat and catbird for not taking their opinions into account!
and that's another book to ad to the shelf... NEXT! i will get though them all!
...eventually
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Just doing what's needed in the completely wrong way as usual, that's all.
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You know what they say - if at first you don't succeed, keep trying.
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He grows out of it…
...much, MUCH later.
If it is Mistake on the art he looks... different. If it isn't he... the hell?!
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I didn't draw nor commission it. I just grabbed some griffon x unicorn picture, invered colors, and painted the eyes for Blaze's blue and Cromach's green. Or maybe Blaze just let his mane grow a little.
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Spooooopyyyyyy!
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Hey, when you can't hit the target, go through their loved ones instead.
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KILL IT WITH HUGS!
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My name is Commander Shepard, and this is my favorite story in Fimfiction.
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Well, everyone assumes something, and they aren't always right.
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Except of direct control