Derpy, on her normal delivery route, notices that a Zebra running across town has dropped a piece of paper. After returning it, the two talk, and soon become great friends...and more.
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this reminded me of a french movie i saw once......le boop
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stay classy
I love how this went from adorable to "Yes Mistress" in 10 seconds flat!
Well... That was unexpected.
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That escalated quickly. o.0 I look forward to the next chapter, whenever it comes out. :)
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Yeah, that one.
I love how the story is coming together cant wait for the next chapter.
First herds, now heat? Any other ridiculous, nonsensical and not-even-slightly-supported-by-canon fanon cliches planned for this story? It looks like the story already has no issue bringing out two of the biggest offenders for a bit of absolutely pointless clop ("Don't worry, won't happen again! Just some heat!").
Remember when the story was about Rush and Derpy trying out a relationship? Why couldn't the story just stick with that (or if it was going to have Rarity, then have the story not be lazy enough to avoid potential social issues by just throwing the word Herd in there)? Why did all of this fanon stuff have to be tossed in for seemingly no reason?
I really don't mean to sound so negative, but this just really irritated me. I can't seem to find a story that starts out genuinely good (especially if it involves a stallion with two mares), without eventually tossing out completely unsupported social fanon nonsense. If the story is going to pull that stuff out, then at least put up an AU tag and mention how it will involve things like heat and herds in the description.
I just hate it because it's so well written. The descriptions, the emotions, the characterization, the spelling and grammar. It's great, and you're clearly a good writer. But then the story just got flooded with all of these ridiculous fanon cliches.
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So they had public sex in a cafe? And none of the employees did anything to stop them? I bet the colts and fillies got an eyeful then.
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It's a flimsy excuse at best, but it is in there. Anyhow, many regrets for this story are present within me- this being one of them, that they all so brazenly did this.