Chapter 1
Fluttershy's Foal?
Chapter 1
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"Wow, Pinkie, you really outdid yourself this time," Rainbow Dash smirked as they looked around the ballroom of the new Crystal Palace.
Though it had been such a long day for them and all of Ponyville, what with Tirek taking all the magic they had, only to have the mane six return it all, everypony was enjoying the party, dancing and having the time of their lives.
"Pumpkin, no!"
They all turned to see Mrs Cake pulling Pumpkin off of the head of one of the guards that had just arrived, pulling his helmet off with her as the little unicorn foal held onto it with her mouth, a wide smile on her face. Fluttershy sighed, looking down.
"Somethin' wrong, sugarcube?" Applejack asked, noticing the Pegasus' mournful expression.
The timid mare looked up, shocked they’d noticed, then looked away. "Do... do you girls think.... think I'd be a good mother?"
The question caught everypony off-guard, even Pinkie.
"What makes you asked that, darling?" Rarity asked confused.
Fluttershy sighed, a few tears welling in her eyes. "Back at the Crystal Empire, I saw a mother and her filly. They looked so happy. It made me wonder if I'd be a good mother. Though I know I probably wouldn't be. Any foal would probably be miserable if I was raising them. I care for animals. How could I care for a foal? It’s not the same."
Not liking to see their friend so sad, they all crowded around her, giving her a group hug.
"Don't you go and say that now, ya here, sugarcube?" Applejack said firmly. "Ya'll're great with fillies and colts. Ya'd be a great mom."
"Applejack's right," Twilight said, nuzzling the Pegasus. "Why, if I were your foal and you were my mother, I know I'd be one of the happiest fillies in Equestria.
Dash nodded, smirking. “Twilight as Fluttershy’s foal? That’s would be hilarious!”
Rarity and Applejack glared at the Pegasus.
“I don’t think so in the slightest,” the fashionista huffed, turning away from Dash.
Applejack just scowled at the cyan mare.
There was a popping sound and Discord appeared behind the six mares.
“I whole heartedly agree,” he said, giving a distasteful look at Rainbow, folding his talon and paw across his chest. “Fluttershy would make a wonderful mother.”
He inwardly smirked. In fact, just for fun, I’ll make Twilight a foal for Fluttershy to care for. Just for tonight, of course. I don’t want to ruin our friendship after I almost destroyed it not so long ago.
Fluttershy smiled meekly. "Thanks, girls. I—"
"Pumpkin, what're you doing?"
The mares all turned to see the little unicorn focused on them, her horn glowing brightly with her blue aura. At the same moment, Discord clicked his talon, his eyes going wide as he realized his mistake and his talon glowed with the same aura as Pumpkin’s horn.
Uh oh.
"Duck and cover!" Pinkie cried, bounding under one of the food tables and putting her hooves over her head.
Twilight glanced around at the others in fear, realizing Pinkie’s Pinkie Sense was telling her something dangerous was about to happen. However, they had only seconds to react before everypony present was blinded by a white light.
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Twilight moaned as she rolled over in her bed. Her head was pounding. It felt like... well, like she’d been fighting a power-mad centaur. She inwardly chuckled.
I must have drunk too much and passed out and somepony brought me to my room, she thought, then frowned. But how did they know where it was? I don’t even know where it is. I didn’t exactly get to explore the castle yet.
She stopped frowning for a second, but it soon returned.
Something felt... off. She couldn’t place her hoof on it but something seemed out of place.
She shifted, trying to get her blanket into a more comfortable position, but became very confused.
She could hear the sound of the blanket shifting, but it didn’t feel like it had shifted. In fact, it felt the same as before. Surprisingly snug to her body... save her wings?
She slowly opened her eyes and pushed herself up, hearing a crinkling sound.
She hesitated. Something about that crinkling sound was... familiar.
Her eyes finally were able to focus and her frown became more confused.
There were bars in front of her. Purple, crystal bars.
“What?” she asked, then blinked. Her voice was unusually high. It hadn’t been that high since she was a filly. “What’s up wif my... WHY AWE MY HOOVES SO SMALL?!”
She had just noticed as she lifted a hoof up to scratch her head that it look tiny and stubby, not like her hooves at all.
There was a fluttering sound from behind her and she glanced back, only for her eyes to widen in shock. Her wings! They looked even bigger than Scootaloo’s wings! How was that possible?
Worried about what else on her body could have shrunk, Twilight glanced up at her horn and felt her heart stopped for a second. It... it was as long as Sweetie Belle's! What happened to her nice, slightly longer than a regular unicorn’s horn?!
She started hyperventilating. Her hooves were tiny, her wings were tiny, her horn was tiny...
She looked down at her hooves again and suddenly took notice that they were covered in a purple, woollen fabric, like the kind hoofy pajamas had, or snuggies, as most ponies referred to them.
“But...” she whimpered, her high voice squeaking to a somehow even higher level, “why would I be weawing snuggy pajamas? I’m not a foal...?” Her eyes widened. “Am I?”
She pushed herself up fully, the blanket coming off and that crinkling sound happening again, followed at once by Twilight noticing the feeling of something warm and snug around her flank that wasn’t the snuggy.
She started hyperventilating again.
What was going on? Why was she a foal? Why was she still in the castle? Where did the crib, for she now saw that was what the bars belonged to, come from?
“Oh... Angel,” a soft, sleepy voice said from somewhere. “Not so loud, please? I have a really bad headache. What did Pinkie put in that punch last night?”
“Fwuddewshy?!” Twilight cried, putting her hooves to the bars, looking out.
Now that she wasn’t focused on her strange transformation, she noticed the room she was in was crystalline in design, yet similar to Fluttershy’s bedroom from her cottage.
She’d been in there a few times to care for the Pegasus when she’d gotten sick with Feather Flu days after Tornado Day.
However, she knew this wasn’t Fluttershy’s cottage for several reasons.
The first, and most obvious, this was definitely the castle and two, Fluttershy’s cottage was destroyed when Tirek had gotten all the alicorn magic and gone and a rampage.
The Pegasus was laying in a bed a few hooves away, covered in a blanket of fine wool.
“Twilight?” she said sleepily, rolling over to face the direction of the foal’s voice and slowly opening her eyes. “Why’re you in my cottage...?”
“Fwuddewshy!” the alicorn cried, banging her hooves on the bars. “Down’t you see someting weiwd about me?”
The Pegasus frowned in confusion and sat up a little. "Twilight?” she asked, rubbing her face with a hoof. “Why’re you a foal?”
The words that left her mouth suddenly seemed to register and she snapped awake, her eyes wide with horror.
“T-T-Twilight!” she cried, pointing a hoof at her in fear. “You’re a foal!”
“Jee, tanks. I newew wou’da guessed,” Twilight deadpanned.
Fluttershy’s fear suddenly vanished and she put a hoof over her mouth, slight giggles escaping her.
“Fwuddewshy!” Twilight pouted, which only made Fluttershy’s giggles grow louder.
“I-I so sorry, Twilight—” the Pegasus struggled through her giggles. “Y-you just look so cute wh-when you d-deadpanned and p-pouted—” She couldn’t finish, lost in a fit of giggles.
“Dis is sewious!” Twilight shouted, her anger at Fluttershy’s reaction making it hard to keep a level head. “I became da Pwincess o’ Fwienship onwy yesewday and now I’wm a foal! We need to teww da pwincesses!”
Fluttershy, now over her giggle fit, suddenly stared in horror as the dawning of the situation hit her.
Twilight was a princess of Equestria. She was the Element of Magic. If she was just a foal, there was no telling how Equestria would react to this.
“Oh, no,” she said, her voice turning into a squeak. “What do we do?”
“Teww da pwincesses!” Twilight said, shaking her head at how Fluttershy seemed to have forgotten she’d only just said that a few seconds ago. “Fiwst we teww ouw fwiends, den we teww da pwincesses.”
Fluttershy nodded. That was the most reasonable thing to do.
Twilight’s face darkened and she looked away. “But... fiwst...”
“But first, what, Twilight? I-if you don’t mind my asking, that is?” the timid mare asked, looking at Twilight from her bed.
Twilight scowled, looking away. “Can you get me ouwt o’ dese snuggies an’ change me? I tink I went wast night.”
Fluttershy blinked, then wrinkled her nose as a strong smell reached her senses.
She put a hoof over her nose, saying in a squeaking voice you always do when pinching you nose, “Oh, Twilight. What did you eat last night?”
Twilight just glared at the floor. “Wike I’d know.”
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Surprisingly, or, maybe not, considering how weird it was already that Twilight had woken up as a foal in Fluttershy’s room of the castle and in a crib at that, there was a changing table, fully stoked and ready for a foal to be changed.
Twilight, despite her humiliation at her current circumstances, had to admire Fluttershy’s skill in diaper changing.
“I change a lot of baby animals,” Fluttershy answered the unasked question on Twilight’s mind.
Twilight nodded.
That made sense. Before Tirek had destroyed her cottage, Fluttershy took care of every manner of animals, some from birth to adulthood. And that wasn’t really very different now.
When the castle had grown, it had a room specially suited for her and all her friends. Fluttershy’s room was a lot like her cottage, with bird houses and small critter houses hanging from the ceiling and around the walls and they was a ledge so that the animals could come and go as they pleased, with vines for the non-winged ones to climb up and down.
While she was being changed, Twilight noticed something that both confused her and made her happy. She still had her Cutie Mark. This was odd because, when Trixie had used age spells to turn Snips and Snails into foals, they'd lost their Cutie Marks until they were returned to their normal ages, so why did she still have hers?
She pondered this. Maybe it was because she'd finally found what she was princess of and that was now tied into her, despite her new age? She'd need to do some research, as soon as she was back to her normal age again, that is.
Once she’d finished changing her diaper, Fluttershy picked Twilight up and put her on her back.
“I tink Wainbow would stiww be downstaiws,” the alicorn foal said, frowning, deep in thought. "She'ww pwobabwy tease me about dis, but we need hewp."
Fluttershy wouldn't tell her, but Twilight looked so cute with that look on her tiny face. She'd noticed it during the changing, but hadn't said anything and hidden it from her face as best she could.
Fluttershy frowned. "Something I don't understand..." she murmrued, looking back the foal Alicorn, "is your eyes, wings and horn."
Twilight blinked, then cocked her head. "Huh?"
Fluttershy trotted over to a draw and opened it, moving thing around until she'd found a mirror and held it up so Twilgiht could see.
Twilight blinked, not sure what to make of what she was seeing. She looked like a foal, true, but there was some key differences between her and other foals she'd seen throughout her life time.
For one, Twilight eyes seemed more defiened than a foal's should be. On top of that, now seeing her reflection, she could confirmed that her wings were indeed bigger than a foal her age's should be, as well the length of her horn.
Twilight blinked, realizing something. She'd never heard of an Alicorn foal being born before. She wasn't even sure if the princesses had been born Alicorns. She knew Cadance had been born a Pegasus.
At that moment a knock came from the door.
Both Twilight and Fluttershy flinched and glanced at each other, fear in both their eyes.
"Miss Fluttershy?" a mare's voice called from the other side, muffled by the large crystal door. "Are you and the princess up yet?"
Their eyes widened and they glanced at each other.
How did this unknown mare know Twilight was in the room too? Did the princesses already maybe know and they'd put her in the Pegasus' room while they figured something out?
That made sense, Twilight supposed. Putting her in Fluttershy's care ensured she would be safe until they figured out a solution to the problem.
Fluttershy opened the door and a yellow Earth Pony mare with a green mane, tail and eyes and a lemon Cutie Mark was waiting for them.
Twilight frowned. She could remember this mare. Her name was Lemon Dreams. She was a pony that had, for some many years, thought she was a lemon, but had been fine recently.
"Um, hello?" Fluttershy asked nervously.
Lemon Dreams smiled warmly. "The princesses sent me to guide you to the dinning hall. You still seem to have a little difficulty, finding your way around here. Though, since you've only been living here for a few days, I can't be surprised. I've still no idea how I've figured out how to move around this place after I volunteered for an extra job. Guess everypony that works for royalty gets some weird knowledge to navigate the halls."
Twilight frowned. Either Lemon Dreams hadn't noticed she was a foal, or the princesses had briefed her enough for her to know not to say anything.
Lemon looked to Twilight and smiled. "Good morning, widdle pwincess. Did you have a nice sleep."
Twilight looked away, so as not to give away how angry she was at being talked to like a foal.
Lemon Dreams, however, just saw it as a cute foal reaction "Come on," she chuckled, turning down the hall and heading down it."Can't keep the baby princess waiting."
Glancing at Twilight on her back, Fluttershy waited for her confirmation to move on.
Twilight nodded and they followed Lemon down the hall, both still wondering what the hay was going on.
Here's my newest Fic.
Hope you like it so far. Don't know when I'll next update this, but I hope you enjoyed the daaa'ws that were here.
Lemon Dreams is copyright of Blueshift. I do not take create for her character
Please comment and, until next time, goodnight, everypony
Edit 28/3/2016: If you're wondering what Twilight looks like watch the Ail-icorn short.
Despite Season 6 is suggesting natural born Alicorns might be different than ascended ones, Twilight doesn't become a natural born one here, she doesn't have a similar look to her little cousin, Flurry Heart
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You were inspired by Foaling With Reality weren't you?
Sounds interesting so far. We will see how the second chapter will be. But for now, I give a thumb up and a fav.
That looks a lot like the plushies on my window sill... Wait a second!
I'm flattered you used my picture.
It's an awesome story, can't wait to see what happens next.
4616695 Considering the quality of that story, is that such a bad thing?
4616846 Heh. Noice.
4616942 Your comment confuses me. Do you mean that Foaling With Reality is good or bad?
Ooh, fun. A bunch of mistakes, but few enough that it didn't detract from the story too much. You should still get a proofreader, though.
Other than that, a very good story. Well paced, you do an understandable baby voice vewwy weww, and it's hilarious to read Twilight as a foal.
Awesome story. There are a lot of spelling and grammatical mistakes that I think you should take a look at and fix, but other than that, it's a great story.
4616953 ...I didn't actually mean to post that. Oops.
I've heard both good and bad about it and never had a chance to read it myself. I wanted to see if I could make a statement that, no matter your opinion, I could have it agreeable.
If you'd thought it was good, then it's clearly a good concept and doing it again -- albeit with different characters, slightly different reactions, maybe different circumstances -- will probably turn out well.
If you'd thought it was bad, then it would have potentially been a revival of a good concept used badly.
But was it good? It's been sitting on my read-later list and I've been meaning to prioritize the messy thing for a while. Do you recommend it?
Is Pumpkin gonna be in Twilight's spot now, being the Element of Magic and such?
It'd be interesting to see the other ponies reacting to their friend Pumpkin suddenly acting like a baby for no apparent reason.
4616975 To be "that guy", I just want to point out this hilarious typo:
Oh, the irony.
No offense, of course. I just found it funny. I agree completely, by the way.
4616995 Well i'd think it's good, as I co-write it with Zubric. I would love for you to check it out though, the more feedback the better!
4617004 Ooh, an author, telling me their story is good! I'd criticize but that's make me a hypocrite. And you should totally check out The Moon and I please I want feedback and no one is giving it to me :(
On a serious note, I'd be glad to take a look! I'm assuming it's on either your page somewhere or on Zubric's. Just gimme time to review this other fic and scribble down the next few horse words of my next chapter.
4617002 Lol, thanks for pointing it out though, because otherwise I would probably not have seen it.
4617031 It's on Zubric's page and i'll give "The Moon and I" a glance.
4617039 :D
Okay so. Names are always capitalized. Words after a period are capitalized. Those need to be one paragraph rather than chopped into separate lines.
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Makes no sense. and the fix "Once though" doesn't fix that since "Once though it had been such a long day ..." is nowhere near grammatically correct. Please fix.
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Bring the Fluttershy bit up to be the same line as "face". Guard is supposed to be guards [since there are more than one]. Also mention Fluttershy seeing the sight. Even as is it's off since she's mentioned without any preamble.
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Replace the period with a comma after "away". Move the dialog up to that point.
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Stopped reading at this point. Please get an editor for this. It has potential to be a really interesting fic. But not every sentence deserves it's own line. You need to connect dialog to the ponies who are speaking (if said ponies are mentioned). And this seriously needs a good cleaning up.
PM me please if this gets fixed up, I'd like to give it a go since it looks like it'd be cute. But from just reading this I'm actually put off from giving your other fics a go. And you have two that look like they'd be nice reads from the short description alone. Do those fics have editors?
What is up with you and infantilism? I mean Jesus, that's all you post, story wise.
It´s a good idea, i just don´t know if i would like that if they all start thinking that this was like always. I mean Twilight foal.
4617047 Two things: Good on you for being polite, and your last correction was wrong. The period should stay as-is.
To get a horizontal rule, type "[ hr ]" (no spaces) on its own line.
4617956
Actually my editors have been grilling me on dialog since I first started getting my writing fixed. If a pony is doing the speaking in a paragraph is doing an action. Then a comma goes before (s)he talks, but after their action is completed. Unless it's an artistic choice.
And thank you for the compliment ^_^. I hope the author doesn't take my criticism in the wrong way though.
4618006 Your correction is still wrong. I am an editor of a whole crapton of stories, I would know. You only use a comma if the previous sentence is describing how the quote is said. The quote should still be moved, though. The period just remains as-is.
Now, off to bed! It's late.
4618019
Ah! Thanks for the heads up and the correction then
. I'll keep it in mind when writing my own stuff.
4616695 actually, the blog pic alone is what inspired me.
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Better. I'd try for making paragraphs longer than one sentence in future chapters. But all in all it's cute. I'd also try getting an editor for your future chapters to ensure they're as polished / cleaned up as possible. I'll give it a follow for now since it looks like it could be a really cute story. Best of luck for the future chapters, and I hope they are as good as I know they have to potential to be.
In the short discription you said Twilight was a male.
4618635 okay, I blame the iPad's auto correct for that. It's fixed now
Ok :D
4616999 no. Twi is still the element of magic. It will be explained in the next chapter
"She was a pony that had, for some many years, thought she was a lemon, but had been fine recently."
Wait, what? You can't just pass that off. I want to know more about how the hay that could have possibly happened
I am curious to see where this goes. Can't wait to find out what's going on in the next chapter 
4619353 then check out life is a lemon, by blueshift
4619370 Will do!
Wait! Tirek destroyed Flutters' cottage AND the Golden Oak Library?!
Who else lost their home?
Anyways, wonderful story so far.
4757655
yeah i wanna know too and then go give Tirek a punishment he wont sson forget
loads a shotgun
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AWWW
4789183
I'll get the sniper rifle.
*Leaves the room*
Now where did I put my bolt-action sniper rifle.
4616695 link pwease?
4757655 meanwhile on aj farm " dang it the barn gone again !"
6242488 Can't find it ,but i did find this. * hands over missile launcher*
I would turn this into a link to the story in question.
4619353
See above link.
a wonderful start to this story, might've inspired me to work on my story, but I get brain farts, and I can't figure out what to write for the prologue :/