A Sniper in Equestria

by xXxJXTxXx

Prologue

A new morning starts on a Saturday a man sleeps while the sun shines towards his eyes through the window waking him up peacefully until the alarm clock starts beeping.
(POV Silver)
-I slammed on the alarm clock turning it off-

"Dang nammit I accidentally turned on the alarm again like the other Saturdays I always wake from"

.....

"Well, can't sleep back in so better start my morning."

-I started walking out of my room to the restroom and step into the shower turning it on-

Well I'm not much of a morning person but the names Silver just like the color similar to grey but shinier. I live in a regular apartment with a decent life. I have black hair yellowish skin just like what my friends usually say to me. Just a way my racist friends say to me because I'm Asian, but I don't care. I just have this feeling today is going to be the day where it's going to be perfect, but then I'm always wrong.

-after the shower I wear my clothes of typical shorts and a t-shirt and go to the kitchen making my breakfast of a simple eggs, toasts, and bacon, after eating I started to talk to myself-

I just feel bored just because I have nothing to do on a Saturday. It's just the same ol same ol. Wake up, sleep, be bored, do something that'll keep me entertained, then when the time comes I go back to sleep. I need to socialize more with my friends.

...

"Why am I talking to myself?"

Whelp time for my buddy the laptop success me to have some fun with video games and possibly a sale from steam.

-I jump from my seat and go back to my room where I see my laptop is opened making a loud whirring sound-

"Huh? Did I not close the laptop? I thought I didn't use it all week. Well, at least I'm going to use it anyway."

-I open up to my steam to open the game I play the most team fortress. Team fortress 2 or in abbreviation "Tf2" is a single shooter game that is created by a company named Valve. Even if I have other games in my library that is fun Tf2 is my number 1-

"Ok let's see here" -browsing through the servers-

"Hmmm achievement, achievement and idle, trading, minecraft and ctf2fort. C'mon there is got to be better servers than these piece of crap." - I refresh my page and stopped it to find a server with a map called "ponyville"-

"Whelp never went to a map called ponyville so let's give it a try"

-as soon as I click the connect button I started moving towards the laptop until I was being started to be lift off the ground and towards the laptop-

"WHAT THE FUCK IS HAPPENING TO ME AND MY LAPTOP!!!!!"

-Suddenly I was pushed towards my laptop causing me to black out until hearing laughter-

....

....

"Ugh where am I?"

-I open my eyes to see the clear blue sky while hearing birds chirping-

"Wait how am I outside, I thought I was inside and why do I have a hat also why do I have shades on."

-I stand up almost immediately causing me to almost fall down again but quickly regaining my balance I look at my surroundings-

"Wow this place is beautiful."

...

Wait a minute...

-I check throughout my body to find new clothings of a hat, a pair of shades, a vest with bullets at the pocket, a pair of long skinny pants and a new pair of shoes-

"Wait a bloody second I look like the sniper. I wonder.."

-I touch my face to touch a scar and I take off my hat and on my the bullets in my pocket vest to feel a real life bullet-

Whelp that proves it for me but if I'm the sniper where are my weapons.

-I find a backpack behind me to see that it has every item I had in my backpack in tf2- (No I do not have an unusual)

Whelp if I'm gonna keep standing here I-

-to the left of me I hear a rustle of leaves and some voices-

???: "Are you sure there's something here?"

???: "Yes I'm sure of it. I got the letter from the princess of some weird magic disturbance near the Everfree forest."

???: "Well make it quick now will ya, Twilight, I'm starting to get hungry"

Twilight: "Alright Spike just be patient if we don't see the problem in the next minute we'll go back."

-As soon I heard those voices I started to go towards them I mean seriously, I don't know how to shoot a gun and all also it looks like they came here for some kind of research but can't be too careful. So I just pulled out my ham shank while it glowed the color violent from time to time. Only to stop where I was to see a purple horned pony while some kind of lizard is riding on the back of it staring at me-

Spike: "Ummm, Twilight?"

Twilight: "Yes~ Spike?"

Spike: "Umm Twilight I think found something." -points towards me-

Twilight: "Really!? Where!" -right when she turns around her eyes go wide while her pupils dilated-

"Ummm... Hello weird talking purple pony?" -I waved my hand to try to look less threatening until a ball of purple energy hit me knocking me out almost immediately, hearing some words from a panicked pony that sounded like a pyro until my vision went black-

Author's Note:

Well this a new fanfiction and a first time making one. I would like you people to have your inner grammar natzis come out and hit me because I don't care, but enjoy. Also comment on what you think.

Comments

[The Pyromanecer]

Hmmmm has potential this train has potential but just one thing
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[Tom ruler of the stones]

Pretty good so far. As a tip instead of 'Twilight: "Really!? Where!"'
You could have : '"Really!? Where!" Said Twilight.' I'll be watching in the mean time.

[xXxJXTxXx]

4460232 thanks for the tip!

[anon5412]

valve should be Valve

[xXxJXTxXx]

4462779 fixed it for you

[Kiryu]

-I find a backpack behind me to see that it has every item I had in my backpack in tf2- (No I do not have an unusual)

do not have an unusual

... Oh my god...

[MuzaWaza]

Knockout on start is done to much!

[The Zealot]

So, not be a downer, but I think there's a rule against script formats. As in the whole having a characters name, and then a colon to denote what they are saying. Also, might want to get rid of the.. uhm... whatever the '-' marks are called when you describe something. It might also be a good idea to be a bit more descriptive, other than that it seems pretty good, although perhaps a bit more disbelief would be proper. ('Wait, I- I'm in a damn forest! And... where'd I get this vest, wait, these are real! No, no no no, what is going on? i'm a sniper? But- but how did this- what was that?' hear noise, introduce ponies.)

[Therisinghero]

this fic needs tf2 music here I am to save the day

[bronyvamp]

it's good so far i'll keep reading it

[R41N80WD45H]

4462972 Did you have a proofreader, for this?

[Radioactive Dragon]

4459997 as you can notice we all are now sad that a good comedy is gone