Prologue
“Sheesh.” A dejected Scootaloo walked into the Cutie Mark Crusader’s clubhouse and set a small pack onto the table in the room. “I really thought we had something going for us in the whole ‘Cutie Mark Crusaders Professional Wrestlers’ thing.”
Apple Bloom trotted in after the pegasus and sighed. “Frankly, Ah’m surprised that we managed to get out of Carousel Boutique with the fabric for the costumes without being noticed by Rarity.”
“Yeah, it’s too bad Twilight caught us when we went past Sugarcube Corner,” Sweetie Belle said, also trotting in. “Although, to be honest, I’m surprised she wasn’t at the library researching that box she got.”
Scootaloo brought a hoof up to her chin and hummed in thought, hoof tapping on the table slightly. “Why does she even have that box?”
The three fillies thought together for a few seconds, before Apple Bloom stated, “I got nothin’.”
“Me neither,” Sweetie Belle said, setting her stuff down onto a chair. “So, what are we doing now?”
Scootaloo jumped up onto a different chair. “Cutie Mark Crusaders Shark Jumpers!”
Apple Bloom jumped onto an opposing chair. “That’s way too dangerous! And where are we even gonna find sharks to jump over, anyway?”
Scootaloo got off of and sat down upon the chair she was once on. “I dunno. Fluttershy?”
Sweetie Belle nodded. “Fluttershy probably has sharks.”
Scootaloo stuck a hoof up into the air and started declaring “Then is it decided that we’re going to go for Cutie Mark Cru-” before Apple Bloom stuck her hoof into Scootaloo's mouth to interrupt her.
“No,” she said. “Ah still think It’s way too dangerous.”
“Aww…” Scootaloo spat out Apple Bloom's hoof and pouted. “Well then, do you have any ideas, Apple Bloom?”
Apple Bloom thought, as the trio have been doing a lot lately. “We could always try Cutie Mark Crusaders Bakers again.”
“No thank you.” Sweetie Belle shook her head.. “I still have no idea how Pinkie did that.”
The three of them had a collective shudder. “It hurts to think about it,” Scootaloo stated.
“Yeah, let’s get off the topic,” Apple Bloom said. “So Sweetie, do you have any ideas?”
Sweetie Belle sat down and thought. And then she thought some more, and eventually she decided. “Nope.”
Apple Bloom sighed and picked up a crayon that was lying on the table. “Cutie Mark Crusaders artists?”
“Nah,” Scootaloo said. “I don’t feel like drawing…”
Sweetie lifted a drawing of Twilight in her magic grasp and sighed.
The three of them sat around the table and thought. Sweetie Belle began absentmindedly humming a tune.
“Hey,” Apple Bloom asked inquisitively. “What’s that song, Sweetie?”
Sweetie abruptly stopped. “O-Oh, it’s just something I came up with yesterday…”
“Well, it’s awesome!” Scootaloo declared. “You have to write some words for it!” She paused for a moment, then declared, “Cutie Mark Crusaders Songwriters!”
Apple Bloom perked up. “Yeah! Let’s do it!”
Sweetie Belle lightened up a bit and stuck her hoof up into the air. “Cutie Mark Crusaders Songwriters!”
The other two brought their hooves up in their salute. “Yeah!”
“Okay,” Apple Bloom said. “The first thing we need is a name.”
“...This Side of Eternity,” Sweetie Belle decided.
“What?” Scootaloo asked. “How’d you come up with that?”
“I dunno.” Sweetie had a puzzled expression. “It just… Fits.”
“Well, it’s awesome!” Scootaloo declared. Then she paused again, and stated “And it really does seem right, somehow."
“And it's so... Mystical." Apple Bloom whispered. "Anyway, we’ve got a title and now we gotta write!”
“On this side of eternity,” Scootaloo started. “Our fears run cold.”
“On this side of eternity,” Apple Bloom continued. “Our souls grow bold.”
“On this side of eternity,” Sweetie Belle also continued. “No story goes untold.”
“On this side of eternity,” The three of them finished. “We shall not withhold. Heading straight on 'till morning and onwards unfold.”
“The lyrics sound like they’re from some rock song,” Scootaloo said. “I like it!”
"And that's because you whined and complained until the words 'met up with the potential of the title?" Sweetie asked, while Scootaloo made a nervous grin and slid down in her chair.
“Well, we’ve got the chorus done,” Apple Bloom said in between writing down the words. “Now, what should we do for the verses?”
“It’s finished!” Sweetie Belle declared, holding the paper in her telekinetic grasp.
“Well?” Scootaloo asked. “Sing it!”
“What?” Sweetie Belle blushed. “I-I couldn’t…”
“Well, we shouldn't,” Apple Bloom said. “You made the tune and most of the words, and you’re the best singer out of us.”
Sweetie Belle moved her hoof in a circular motion. “Well, alright. But only because you’re my friends.”
She stood up and trotted up to the podium, This Side of Eternity in tow.
And then she sang.
Sweetie Belle's voice came to a stop and she opened her eyes. Apple Bloom and Scootaloo were staring up at her in awe.
“Uh, hello?” Sweetie Belle asked, seeing their expressions frozen. “Are you two there?”
Sweetie jumped off of the podium and trotted towards her two friends. She leaned in and studied their expressions, before waving a hoof in front of their faces.
“Huh? What?” Scootaloo asked, snapping to attention.
“Sweetie Belle, that was amazing!” Apple Bloom declared once she recovered, a spark appearing in her eye.
“Yeah!” Scootaloo agreed. Sweetie noticed the same flash appear in her eye. “In fact, I’d say it’s even your special talent!”
“Really?” Sweetie gasped. “Do you think so?”
“Of course!” Apple Bloom exclaimed. “Why, it’s so obvious I can’t believe we hadn’t noticed it until now!”
Sweetie’s face brightened and she looked at her flank. Emblazoned upon it was a simple green heart with an eighth note sitting upon it.
“Wait, what?” Sweetie squeaked. It wasn't exactly what she expected. “I see it's music-related, but-"
But when she turned back to face her friends, she was alone in a starry blue field that radiated magic, everywhere.
Well, I will say this fic has potential; the only glaring problem I could see was the overuse of horizontal rules. While they're good to use occasionally, using one every few lines is a little off-putting and stilted. I would get rid of a few of them and instead go into a little more detail explaining the process with which the CMC came up with the song.
As for the idea itself, I'm not too sure how the idea will be received. While I'm not against the idea of more characters ascending, other people might be and will downvote this fic like mad for it. That said, I'm interested in seeing exactly how Sweetie Belle earned destiny's favor, so I shall keep a close eye on this story.
One last thing; that cover art is so adorable. It's so much better than anything I could ever draw.
lol kinda figured that was what was about to happen wonder how THIS is going to wreak havok on Twilight's self-esteme being out done by the CMC on one of their attempt at a cuteymark
Hmmm... A bit quick, but you did a decent job in a thousandish words. I'll follow this and see where you go.
4075109 I shall take note of that line break thingy.
And don't worry, the song will be revealed in full later on.
And let them downvote! I forget who said it, but having enemies means I've stood up for what I believe in!
Wait that has nothing to do with this situation...
I'll think of something better, don't worry, jut lemme think...
While I'm processing, just know that Sweetie is adorable no matter what picture she's in.
4075121 Oh, you'll see Twilight's reaction soon, don't worry.
4075806 The original take was actually shorter, at only about 800 words or so. And yeah, pacing is my one big fatal flaw and I'm trying to work on it.
We shall watch...
We shall see...
And we shall hope you don't disappoint...
While not a new concept, Alicorn!SweetieBelle is started very nicely here. Right into the action.
Sweetie Belle is my favourite CMC
This first part is so beautiful. I can't wait for more!
Awesome.
From one side of eternity to the other. I like it.
Sweetie Belle Fic... im so on I really love her
Wow, thanks for all the positive feedback. I never expected this to get so much support.
4077119 I hope so, too.
4077921 Old concepts can still be relevant if used right!
And apparently I used it right...
4078698 Sweetie Belle is best pony~!
4079055 'Beautiful' might be a bit much. Let's go with 'aesthetically pleasing.
4079204 Thanks!
The fact you added Derpy just made the compliment even better!
4081008 How'd you know...
4083154 Indeed.
Sweetie Belle, in fact, is best pony.
woah...Sweetie Belle is royal now... looks like Rarity's gonna get her wish to be accepted by the highest ranks of society! Or be jealous...
Anyways...good story! Continue please
4083818
I Uhhhmmm....:
I didn't?
Very nice
In my opinion, 10000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000% better than my fic (first timer as well)
Keep up the amazing work and just so I can stay updated, insta fav!!
Good Fanfic!
Haiku fu review:
Sweet start to the heart
Lyrical telling telling
New spring is turning
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Ooohh, I like this concept!
So, Sweetie met the requirements for alicornization by inventing a new music-based magic? Explains the trance-like state Scoots and Applebloom were in.
A little too good in my opinion.
Please do worsen the story to appease my envy.
Ooh, this is very interesting indeed. That ending made me shudder. Pretty freaky transition! I'm in suspense and can't wait to see what happens next!
Will we eventually get to read the lyrics to the full song?
i look forward to reading this, but right now ive chapter 12 of my fic to write and several foulfics by nightmist to read
4084076 I'll touch on that. Possibly. I have pretty much nothing planned out, basically.
4084586 Sure...
4084650 Oh, this is nowhere near my first story.
First on FIMFiction, but not my first ever. Far from it, in fact.
4084706 Glad to hear it!
4085890 You'll be glad to know Chapter 1 is about halfway done.
4087482 Yeah, the song's magic. Comes in to play very much for the little I have planned.
Although whether or not that's why she ascended is another story...
4087778 I am sorry, I do not know how to process this request.
ObsidianBlack555.exe is not responding. His ego is far too inflated.
4088507 Transitions are what I am mediocre at!
And yeah, probably. Don't expect it to be any good though.
I can play music well enough, sure, but write it? Nope.
Another fic with great potential. Please continue.
Who's that? Who are you? I don't understand life anymore.
do do do doooo! you got a !
4088617 *Phew* Good to know you're half way done with chapter one.
I've been wondering why the title of the song just fits.
I get the feeling that Sweetie Belle just accidentally found her personal answer to Starswirl's unfinished spell after Twilight finished it. Way to go, Sweetie, you hacked the universe into giving you wings! Bad news is that with great power comes great responsibility.
In any case, I look forward to seeing where you go with this.
That's really good.
I really look forward to sweetie learning what this means... Actually, now I realise she's gonna need twilight for emotional support. She's immortal now. Scoots and bloom are gonna grow old and die while she stops ageing at a point close to twilight's age.
Man, that's probably the worst way to earn your cutie mark, gain a greAt power that makes one of the mares you look up to part of your family but lose everypony else you know and love through the passage of time.
Great story though and I look forward to the next chapter
Interesting start! Was looking for a nice Sweetie Bell story.