Chapter 11 - Caught
Chapter 11
Caught
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Scootaloo was silent under the cushions as she heard steps moving through the house.
She couldn’t be found. If she was, it would all be over and the monster would get her.
She heard it stop, close to where she was hiding.
“Where are those little fillies,” it growled, sniffing the air. “I can smell them and I’m very hungry!”
Scootaloo held back a squeak. It was standing right in front of her. She could just see its shadow through a tiny creak in the cushions.
The cushions were thrown away and she screamed as the creature got her.
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Sunset gulped.
She’d heard her sister’s scream from the other end of the house.
She shrunk deeper into the clothes she was hiding in. She’d chosen the closet.
Somehow it had not thought to look in here yet, meaning she had picked a good spot.
She stiffened as she heard movement and the sound of hushed voices from outside the closet.
Had she been found out? Had another joined her predator?
The closet door was flung open and her hunter pounced.
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Sunset screamed with laughter as Twilight blew raspberries into her stomach.
Scootaloo was on the floor next to her, laughing as her sister’s laughter.
“Mmm, num-num-num, tasty filly!” Twilight said, before blowing another raspberry into Sunset’s stomach.
“Otay! You won, Mommy! You won!” Sunset cried out through her laughter, tears streaming down her face.
Twilight and the girls lay down, breathing loud sighs.
Scootaloo chuckled. “Dat was fun, Mama.”
“Can we pway again?” Sunset asked, rolling over onto her mother’s stomach.
Twilight chuckled. “Maybe another time, girls,” she said, slowly getting up and levitating the two foals onto her back. “But, for now, it’s time for bed.”
“Aww, Mama!” Scootaloo whined, pouting.
“Can’t we stay up a widdle wonger?” Sunset asked, her eyes pleading, right before both sister yawned loudly.
Twilight shook her head. “No. We’re going to Canterlot tomorrow to see your grandparents and your aunt and uncle. We all need to be rested and ready.”
“Otay,” they said sleepily, rubbing their eyes with their forehooves.
As Twilight lowered her fillies into their crib they cuddled up next to each other and went to sleep.
Twilight smiled, kissed them both goodnight and went to bed, checking that Spike was already in bed (he’d gone to bed at least two hours ago while they’d been playing), turned out the light and went to sleep
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Dawwwwwww
it was a cute chapter and please tell me there more chapters then just two chapters left in this story
4075565 plenty more.
i just need to make them work so i don't turn others off by accident
4075579 ok and what to you mean by so you don't turn off others by accident
4075600 same
that fixed the rage induced coma of the last chapter.... SO MUCH D'AAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWW
4075599 well, after their time in canterlot, i'm gonna start with the shipping. and just worried my choice will make some turn off. you've seen it's very split who others would rather twi get together with.
Honestly I think you could probably just add this to the end of the previous chapter and just add a 'later that day' or something. Because being by its self this chapter feels just to short.
WHeeeeeee!!! Sweet mother/daughter playtime!!!
4075632 Id be fine with whatever you chose. Sure I like TwiDash more but thats just because I dont see AJ and Twi having anything in common. It doesnt mean I wont stop reading or stop liking this story should you go with TwiJack.
I started reading this story for its original basis. Sunset gets turned into a foal and Twilight raises her and nothing you do in any chapter will change that. I loved what you did with Scoots. And no matter what ship you go with I will be fine with. You might even be able to make me like TwiJack.
These two chapters been awesome! Keep up the good work!
The dawness, it is unstoppable!
Chapter 11 is far too short to really be its own chapter. It probably would be better served as part of another. Just my opinion.
Maybe this chapter can also have them getting ready for the trip to Canterlot up until they get on the train. Would be slightly longer. Thats just what I think though.
4075632 ok and i will be fine with whoever twilight get together with is fine with me
4076653 I myself was under the impression that Sunset didnt have any anymore and I think at this point Scootaloo would have some teeth if not most of hers. So I guess that Scootaloo could handle mush but not Sunset. At least thats what I think he was implying. Besides should Sunset still be to young for anything but breast milk at this point?
Dawww! I can practically imagine the cuteness! Loved it!
Okay this is for both this chapter and the last one.
For the last one, HOW DARE THAT IDIOT TRY TO TAKE SCOOT'S, and also GO TWILIGHT!
Second for this chapter, d'awww!
So cute.
Update soon.
Please?
I think ive read each chapter at least 20 times now waiting for the next chapter.
last chapter:IF YOU EVER COME AROUND SCOOTS AGAIN, TARTARUS WOULDNT EVEN NOW WHAT TO DO WITH YOU!
(keels over from cutness)
this chapter:
My heart exploded... 10 Times Times 10
At first I was like: "Oh no! Scoots is already mentally scarred from the experience in the previous chapter!!"
Then I was like: "DAWWWWH. Twi's playing with her daughters."
I am happy you didn't go a lesbian style, to many of those
That was adorable and just what the story needed
That was absolutely adorable
💜
oh no the cuteness monster is gonna take me ahhh! *faints and gets carried off by the monster*