Pain.
Her throbbing head was all Trixie could think about. She slowly opened her eyes to see only blurs. She rubbed her eyes with her hooves hoping to clear her sight. The first thing she saw was the ceiling over her bed, unmistakable because of the replica of her cutie mark that she painted above it, a blanket covering her form. Odd, last thing she remembered was that she was pulling her cart like any normal day, running into a little rabbit, then...
"The human!" Trixie shouted, bolting upright. Her left foreleg gave a twinge of pain, but she ignored it.
Why did the human save me? Where's the manticore? Why didn't the human just leave me? Trixie just kept thinking of questions but not answers. She then rolled out of her bed, determined to get answers from the human. Opening the door she found the human silhouetted in front of a beautiful sunset in its final minutes of the day. Trixie's eyes widened and her jaw dropped at the sight, her heart giving a strange flutter.
The human straightened turning to face her. "Ah, you're awake." he said in a slightly cheery voice and had that half smirk from before on his face, "Good to see you can walk around with out a limp." Trixie was about to question him when she realized her front left leg was in a makeshift splint made up of sticks and a blanket. "I was able to heal it enough to make it only a minor fracture, but I couldn't heal it any more than that."
"Why?" Trixie mumbled.
"Excuse me?" He asked. "Can you repeat that?"
"Why?" She asked a little more clearly.
"One more time?"
"Why!?" She shouted, "Why let Trixie go, than save Trixie's sorry flank from a manticore when you could have gotten injured? It would have been so easy for you to do, just watch as Trixie gets torn to shreds and eaten! Or is it because you wanted to hurt Trixie instead, not wanting the manticore to have the fun of it?!" The human was silent, not backing down, flinching or even giving an expression to Trixie as she accused him of multiple atrocious acts. Eventually Trixie stopped, resorting to glaring at her might-be captor. "Well?!"
He closed his bright eyes and slowed his breathing further than before. After what felt like an eternity he opened his eyes and spoke "You're wrong again Trixie." He sighed. "How about I answer your question with one of my own? If I got a sick pleasure from watching others suffer, then why would I heal most of your broken foreleg and help ease a majority of the pain from your concussion?"
Trixie was speechless. He was right, he had helped her out of a sticky situation and even began nursing her back to heath, making her assumptions of him completely baseless and made her feel like she was a little filly calling out an old, wise mare. "I don't know," she finally admitted "But, really why? Also how do you know Trixie's name?"
A smile. The human actually gave her a genuine facial expression! "Because my personal motto is 'help those in need and maybe they can help you.' Since I helped you with that manticore, I expected that you would be able to help me figure out how I got here and if I could possibly get back to where I'm from. As for your name," he shrugged "You've said it at least twenty times since we meet and it's also written on the wall of your mobile home. One doesn't need much more than that to figure it out."
Trixie's face burned ever so slightly from a light blush at the obvious answer to her second question. "So is that the only reason you saved Trixie for?" She asked, "Or is there another?"
The human's smile disappeared and he glanced just to the right of Trixie as he responded "I do have another reason, but that will have to wait for some time to be said, if ever."
Trixie opened her mouth to ask why he was dodging her question but closed it when she saw his, barely visible, serene expression, as if just living was giving him joy to last him an eternity. She let the matter drop, aggravated at how thick-skulled this human was.
"Name." She stated.
"Excuse me?" He asked.
"Your name, tell it to Trixie."
The human arched his eyebrow the slightest bit, "My name is Joseph Green."
"That is a strange name." Trixie said
"And Trixie Wand isn't a strange name?" Joseph asked.
Trixie reeled back when she heard her last name, "How do you know Trixie's last name!? Trixie never told you, nor anypony else!"
Joseph's eyes widened the slightest bit but the rest of his face remained in the same stoic position. "If I told you now, you would never believe me."
"And why is that?!" She shouted.
"Would you believe me if I said I could make absolutely anything I want happen with a mere thought? Would you believe I could fly without wings or magic? Or anything else along those lines?" He asked.
"No, because what your saying is impossible!"
He sighed, "Not quite," he said, "But at the moment, yes, those things are impossible. But imagine something at least three times as impossible as those examples and hopefully you can understand why I know you wouldn't believe me."
Trixie stopped. If what Joseph said is true, she understood why he was reluctant to elaborate. "Fine, Trixie won't question you on this subject for now." She scowled, "But she will again, eventually!"
"Eventually?" Joseph asked, "As in you expect me to stick around and be available for conversation at a later date?"
Trixie nodded and looked around, she and Joseph were both in a small, plain area with a small tent, a fire and two overturned halves of a freshly cut tree trunk acting as makeshift seats and just south of the small camp were the fringes of the Everfree.
Trixie shuddered, not from the memories of her escape from death at the edge of the ancient and foreboding forest, but instead from the cold wind that froze her as if her fur coat was nonexistent.
Joseph, who was tending to the fire looked up to see Trixie shivering, his eyes widening the slightest amount. He rose to his full height and, Trixie noted he was much taller than her, even though Trixie was an average four and a half hooves tall, he seemed to be at least six hooves tall.
"Are you cold?'' he asked.
Another blast of cold air made Trixie shiver harder "A-a l-l-little." She stuttered through her clacking teeth, "T-Trixie will just g-go inside." Trixie had only managed to turn around before she was stopped by something that had her tail, and she had an idea who it was.
"Wait just a second." He said, dragging her by her tail, using his magic, she was moved closer to one of the makeshift benches, "Just give me a moment." The glow around his hand got brighter slightly and the chilling wind died and the force holding her tail dissipated.
"How did you do that?" Trixie asked curious, sitting down on the, rather warm, log.
Joseph just shrugged and lowered his appendage down to his side, "Weather Manipulation spell?"
Trixie was very impressed, Weather Manipulation spells were rather difficult to cast and it was as if Joseph could cast them with little to no problem.
The sun had finally completed its decent and the darkness surrounded them, the light from their fire the only thing keeping the darkness at bay. Even though Joseph was not saying a thing Trixie could see something was on his mind from his body movement. The slight amount of fidgeting, how he was looking at everything besides her, and other subtle giveaways. To be nice Trixie started a conversation to get his mind of whatever it was that he was thinking.
"So, uh, what is it that you remember? How you got here Trixie means." She started.
Joseph paused, then said, "Not much, I was having fun at a party that was thrown in my honor for my latest discovery in my field of science, I got a little tipsy and, after that, nothing."
"Nothing?"
He nodded "Next thing I knew, I was in the middle of some freaky, dark forest with strange creatures and even stranger plants."
Trixie didn't know what to say, if he was telling the truth then he had not the slightest idea of how he got here and woke up in the Everfree! "You're very lucky," She said "From what you said you landed in the Everfree forest, a place of dark magic and ancient creatures from a nearly forgotten age."
Joseph's eyebrows shot up for roughly three seconds before returning to their usual position "Did I really?" he asked in an amused tone. "Seems my bad luck did not carry over to this different land." He chuckled and looked into the fire, "Huh, looks like we need more wood for the fire, if you'll excuse me for a moment." Joseph then got up from his log and made his way to the side of Trixie's cart where a decent sized wood pile lay. Bending over he grabbed several full sized logs with those odd appendages he had.
"What are those?" Trixie asked pointing with her hoof at Joseph's appendages after he set down the logs.
"You mean my hands?" He asked wiggling the smaller parts on one, "They're what I use to pick things up with and," His face darkened, "When necessary, fight with." His expression went back to normal, "But anyways it's just a part of the human anatomy."
"What are the littler things on your hand called?"
"Fingers, humans have ten, five on each hand," he explained holding up one to Trixie so she could study it while telling her exactly what a few parts of his hand were called. While Trixie was studying Joseph's hand he was busy chopping wood, not using a tool or magic, mind you, but using his hand to cut the thick logs into narrow quarters. After finishing Joseph put four log quarters into the fire and sat back down, giving a content sigh.
"Joseph?" Trixie asked.
"Yes?"
Trixie bit her bottom lip a bit, "What did you do before you ended up here?"
If Trixie was intruding in Joseph's personal life he didn't seem to mind, if anything Trixie swore that she saw his eyes get a twinkle in them, "Well, you see Trixie, what I am is a physicist and engineer, I have found ways to bend a few of the laws of physics through my extensive research and even grant myself the greatest thing the world has ever seen," He lifted his hand, his palm facing upwards where a ball of white fire burst into existence, "Magical abilities, allowing me to further reshape the laws of physics."
Trixie stared at the enticing white flames that where now in Joseph's hand and she continued to watch until he decided to let the miniature fire burn itself out, curling into the air and disappearing. All Trixie could think of was how amazing he was, changing the laws of physics? There was only one being that Trixie knew of that could do that, but the pink earth pony was the exception of almost every rule or known fact there is, but that's besides the point.
A comfortable silence took the place of conversation, human and pony alike staring into the ever moving flames. After what felt like several hours of relaxing Trixie began to feel drowsy and her foreleg was beginning to ache.
"Trixie thinks that she will go to sleep now," she said. "Trixie shall see you in the morning Joseph."
Joseph smiled, and for the second time that day Trixie's heart felt as if it was filled with butterflies, and he said, "Good night, Trixie, and please, call me Joe."
Trixie nodded her head and left the light of the fire for her dark cart, but instead of fearing who was outside, knowing Joe was just outside left her dreaming peacefully, for most of the night anyway...
I thought it was going to be the wizard of oz
3848681 Sorry to say, but this FanFic is not a crossover of any kind, new character, no affliction to any other piece of work sorry if that's what you were hoping for
I like it but I don't understand as to why he is so calm about being on a completely different world. His love of science maybe?
3848783 Oh, there is a reason, but you will only know it when it works it's way into one of the following chapters
Read this carefully.
Also...
1.) "Laws of physics" does not need to be capitalized.
2.) Technically speaking, if he discovered how to use "magic" through his research, he wouldn't be breaking the laws of physics; he would merely be redefining them. Things that break the known physical laws are impossible because the logical structure of reality as we understand it does not allow such things to occur. But if they were to occur, they wouldn't be "something impossible" but rather "something we didn't expect was possible," and we could change our definition of the laws of physics to include it. So it is impossible to actually "break" the laws of physics, since anything you could do that would "break" them merely expands upon their definitions. The laws of physics are "what we observed to be true," after all.
3850522 You're right sorry, admittedly I could not figure out how to word that differently without it sounding odd. I will get right on that.
is he secretly a brony and not telling?
is he a magical, realistic, flying tiger?
3850953 Happy to hear you enjoy it so far, but as I stated in at the top of the first chapter, this is my first FanFic that I've posted on this website, so thank you for the encouragement!
3850856 You see what I planned for his backstory is that he-[spoiler redacted, no hints for you!]-and basically that's what's going to happen.
Wait, what happened?
Shouldn't you put an OC Tag on this story?
3851173 Not necessary, OC's are usually new ponies that meet with the mane 6 or the other back round characters, I do have an OC, but that will be for another story
Bending the laws of physics...
I ask you... At what cost?
Wait... when you think about it... all magic is science.
When he "spawned," a fire ball all he did was increase the vibration rate of the gas in the air causing it to combust
When he took down the Manticore he could have manipulated the carbon composition in he hands and arms. increasing their density, mass, weight and hardness thus creating a heavier hit.
It all makes sense.
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I'll be watching this story...
Travelling & Finally.
Honestly, the description just drew me in, will have to read later though and the moment I saw the picture, I thought she fell in love with Link (not to be confused with Zelda... again, like what many people {including me} did back in the day)
3852116 We shall see but yeah, in actuality, your correct, but the reason I had him refer to it as 'magic' is because [Spoiler fished back, no hints!]
3852283 Glad to hear it
3853552 Always with misspelling! happens far too often, but no, Link isn't apart of this FanFic.
Other than a few grammatical and spelling errors, this fic is quite good! Haven't read a good trixie x human fic in a while. Love the use of his magic so far. Hope you continue to amuse and entertain me.
3855534 Thank you for the compliments and sorry about the third-rate grammar, can never seem to get all of those mistakes
3855679 Get yourself an editor, or at least someone to help proofread to find your mistakes. Certainly helped me!
So he's a scientist that invented magic or is he a mage from "Mage: The Acension" I'm thinking Order of Hermes.
I've been wanting to write another review for a while so lets get started.
First of all, I find you writing to be very rushed, you don't spend the proper amount of time an any single subject to allow it to grow and develop. This is a big thing for any well written story; scenes, characters, and environments and how they interact must be given the proper attention otherwise absolutely nothing of interest will happen. A lack of proper attention to details is a fantastic way to lose reader interest very quickly. This neatly brings me to my second point. You suffer from what a lot of new writers have, a fear of conflict. You have crafted in just two chapters at least 20 situations that could have risen to conflict of some sort, not necessarily violent conflict, but conflict nonetheless. This situations spring up and resolve themselves with absolutely no effort on either characters part and it just seems lazy. This is compounded by your already rushed writing. As a writer and as a story teller, you can't avoid conflict, you have to thrive in it and milk it for everything it's worth. These I can chalk up to a new writer who hasn't refined his own writing style yet. But my next point is something that I see so often and even in the best of fiction. What I am about to say next may seem cruel, however it needs to be said anyways. Joseph Green is a painfully obvious self-insert Gary Stu character. He reacts to, as far as I can tell, being thrown into a whole new universe with no understanding of where he is with, at best, disinterest. He doesn't react in shock, confusion, or any other expected emotion. Trixie also has this problem, finding a whole new intelligent creature in her carriage with about the same level of emotion as finding a dollar on the sidewalk 'oh, how nice'. Reinforcing Mr. Green's Gary Stu syndrome is his apparent total control over physics. EXPLAIN THIS SHIT!!! you cannot give a creature that does not normally have fantastic abilities such things without a damned well thought-out and justifiable reason. And 'because science' does not hold water. All in all I found the entire thing kinda forgettable and falling into many bad tropes. I feel as though your main problem is that you don't reread what you write. I want you to go back and reread your entire fic back to yourself out loud. This is a basic trick that really helps you write. Also get someone else to weigh in on what you write. What might be obvious and awesome to you might not be to anyone else, because they don't have the story already in their head like you do.
All in all I'd give this, for what it is a 'C-'.
I will add it to the favorite (or my personal tracking device that i have no idea what other reason beside tracking the storys's progress)
Maybe the human's from an alternate universe of our Earth where it's possible to use magic. Bet twenty bits that he knows spells that Trixie doesn't!
3857465 I have to agree with you on how rushed it is, I just think it's apart of the fact that I have no real experience yet. As for not rereading what I write, I have to disagree, for I do, maybe not as well as others do, but we ARE human after all. The lack of conflict now will be made up for in later chapters, and no, he won't be fine immediately afterwards. I also cover the reason he's so emotionless in the next chapter.
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I think this is more of a case of shell-shock and beginner's luck. He's too surprised/shook up by the transport process to think about how weird everything is, and therefore acts and fights out of instinct combined with basic mannerisms he unconsciously employs due to them being ingrained into him.
As for the magic, maybe it's merely a resonance with the raw magic flowing through Equestria, which was hidden back on good old nonmagical earth.
I see a lot of potential in this story, just please stop rushing.
I really like where this story's going. But I only have one problem that I always spot in stories like this:
How's come ponies don't understand hands?!
Sorry, but that's just something I don't understand. There are creatures with claws and paws in Equestria like dragons, bunnies, and gryphons. They have claws and paws that act just like hands. So shouldn't they understand the concept of hands?
Not only that, but has every pony forgotten about Iron Will? He had hands too!
Keep it up this is getting good. You are having better luck with your first fic then I did.
I prefer that the last name of Trixie is Lulamoon instead of wand. That's how it was known on the merchandise.
3866483 In all honesty I didn't know never knew Trixie's canon last name.
3862274 you kind of contradicted yourself, your right, there are some creatures with paws and claws, but their referred to because the only creatures with 'hands' are monkeys, apes and of course, us, and since Trixie didn't know much about humans, she couldn't have known what exactly they were called.
3869540 You forget that I mentioned Minotaurs too. Iron Will. Those cannot be defined as paws or claws, and are definitely hands.
And the other thing I was pointing out was that Trixie should've at least known the concept of hands.
I'm not saying the story's bad. HAY no! This story is awesome! It's just a small nitpick if anything.
3870968 Come to think of it, yeah, he does have 'hands' not paws, but any how, thank you for the compliment. Sorry for the wait on the next chapter, writers block is a pain
3871788 Hehehe...I know that feeling all too well.
3859480 I would tell you if your right or wrong, but...... it's more fun to see you guys guess and don't worry I will eventually cover everything, even if I must quadruple check everything!
The first thing she saw was the ceiling under her bed
in it's final minutes of the day
than why would I heal
barley visible
if he was telling the truth than he had not
1. Ceiling under her bed? Is Discord around?
2. Its.
3. Then.
4. Barely.
5. Then.
And this is how the story of a man named Joe came to own a shop called Donut Joe's in Canterlot. Or not
3873008 I don't know what word to use to describe how pathetic I am but I'm still going to fix those mistakes
3876850 it's alright, people make mistake so no need to beat yourself up over it
And just like that, my head cannon is crushed. xD Two quick mistakes: Hasbro produces Trixie toys labeled "Trixie Lulamoon," so that is her official name. Idk if you want to change that or not. The second is in thename of the chapter itself. The plural of recovery is recoveries, not recoverys. I'm absolutely loving this so far. I'm giving it a fave.
And just like that, my head cannon is crushed. xD Two quick mistakes: Hasbro produces Trixie toys labeled "Trixie Lulamoon," so that is her official name. Idk if you want to change that or not. The second is in thename of the chapter itself. The plural of recovery is recoveries, not recoverys. I'm absolutely loving this so far. I'm giving it a fave.
3852139 Someone's a full metal alchemist fan.
3852139 Someone's a full metal alchemist fan.
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1) Good to hear that you enjoyed something out of your comfort zone.
2) I've heard of Doctor Who, but never watched it myself ( I have friends that do that pester me about it from time to time though )
And 3) I'm now aware of Trixie's last name, the one Hasbro gave her, but for simplicity's sake, Wand would be easier to remember of Lulamoon, now wouldn't it? And when I decided to give her a last name, I didn't know, so I made up one.
3882352 I think you should go on youtube and watch an episode or two of the 6th doctor. Just typing in Colin Baker Doctor Who should get you to one. Lol. That doctor was...unique. xD He just seems similar, in ways, to Joe.
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Well for the carbon bit kinda but not really.