After a small confrontation with Ditzy Doo, Rarity begins to suffer strange symptoms. Is it just an illness, or is it something more sinister?
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z_shimada
I'm a professional technical writer who dabbles in creative writing in his free time. I've been told my stories are very good, so I thought I'd throw a couple up here.
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Well...
I like the plot, but I believe it's going at too fast a pace. You also need to put dividers in or something when the POV changes.
I'm giving it a thumbs up, but only barely. This has great potential. You just need to write it right...