Also, I'm truly sorry I couldn't be a part of this, brony fife. I feel like shit that I promised I would and I could settle my shit in time to participate. Yet another failure, yay.
Well, i'll save the rest for later, but i read the intro. You used the word lugubrious, so i feel obligated to like and fav preemptively. Though with your star-studded cast of writers, as it were, i'm sure it was inevitable anyway.
Ha! Loved it. Both characters were captured so well---I could almost hear Suri's sneering voice. The abrupt ending seems quite typical of Blueblood, too. Well done!
4250966 No one likes a Snide Sandy, TittySparkles. I on the other hand am a Guilt-Trip Gus. That's why I'm going to say: Oh... I guess I wasn't invited to write for this. That's fine. I didn't want to be invited anyway.
Don't be like that, Jake. I'm still accepting entries from anybody on this site willing to put in the work and submit a short clop story. And don't forget -- you're one of the ones I went to instead of the other way around; if I didn't think you'd fit in with this project, I'd have never asked. There's always gonna be a spot for you in this project, Jake; you just gotta make the time to take it.
You want in on this project, PM me a link to any of your finished clop stories. Then we can further discuss what we can do for the collab. Thanks for reading!
He wondered aloud if it was the right time to let her taste her masculinity but she was just so into it that he decided to let it slide...before sliding inside of her.
I believe this is the wrong pronoun.
Her hips were found smashing against his, glued to each other by a need that transcended reason.
Who found them?
Suri slammed the door the door so hard, she nearly broke the walls.
One of those "the door" is superfluous. Now if only we could tell which one.
Despite a few minor errors, this chapter was well written. However, I did not care for the characters. Do not get me wrong, if it were any other two characters, it would have been amazing. Even if you changed just one character, it would have been better. I am just not emotionally invested in either of these characters. It is like when two wrestlers you do not care about have a match. (You may replace wrestler with whatever you prefer. Basketball teams, football teams, whatever.) You watch it but you do not pay attention to it. If Blueblood raped somepony else, I would have hated Blueblood even more. If Suri was raped by somepony else, I would have cheered that pony on. But together, Suri and Blueblood are just not interesting.
I'm considering joining this project. So I looked in on the Blueblood and Suri chapter.
There was something to it. It was... not objectionable. Oh there was domination and two unpleasant ponies, but it was actually very readable. Maybe disliking Suri and feeling neutral to Blueblood did it but, all your talent showed through (you MUST teach me erotic brevity; I feel I have this habit of rabbiting on because I fear an un-padded sex scene will have me drawn and quartered by readers.) I think the sterilization helped too. No fart smells or slime flavors or even descriptions of dirt, even when licking his hooves. The focus on the act rather than disgusting things that could be there made it simply magnificent.
This was a triumph. And if I can I will join this august gathering, eagerly.
Omai...
Pretty good...... pretty good....
I should be in here as a narrator or something, right 4248838?
Also, I'm truly sorry I couldn't be a part of this, brony fife. I feel like shit that I promised I would and I could settle my shit in time to participate. Yet another failure, yay.
Well, i'll save the rest for later, but i read the intro. You used the word lugubrious, so i feel obligated to like and fav preemptively. Though with your star-studded cast of writers, as it were, i'm sure it was inevitable anyway.
Ha! Loved it. Both characters were captured so well---I could almost hear Suri's sneering voice. The abrupt ending seems quite typical of Blueblood, too. Well done!
Ah awesome! I was wondering when I would get the chance to read what other writers wrote.
4250966 No one likes a Snide Sandy, TittySparkles. I on the other hand am a Guilt-Trip Gus. That's why I'm going to say: Oh... I guess I wasn't invited to write for this. That's fine. I didn't want to be invited anyway.
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Don't be like that, Jake. I'm still accepting entries from anybody on this site willing to put in the work and submit a short clop story. And don't forget -- you're one of the ones I went to instead of the other way around; if I didn't think you'd fit in with this project, I'd have never asked. There's always gonna be a spot for you in this project, Jake; you just gotta make the time to take it.
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You want in on this project, PM me a link to any of your finished clop stories. Then we can further discuss what we can do for the collab. Thanks for reading!
Shipping it like FedEx.
discord as the crypt keeper with tales of crazy villain porn.
holy fuck this is awesome.
Just started the chapter
Well it's about fucking time a story doesn't feature a manipulative female femdom males are weak rape them plot!
no wonder the lack of maledom. This bastard ruins the whole genre.
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As the writer of the Discord / Crypt Keeper segments, thanks for the feedback!
Special thanks to Brony_Fife for
herding catsbringing all of our collaborative efforts together.Chapter one: Story 1: "Powerless":
I believe this is the wrong pronoun.
Who found them?
One of those "the door" is superfluous. Now if only we could tell which one.
Despite a few minor errors, this chapter was well written. However, I did not care for the characters. Do not get me wrong, if it were any other two characters, it would have been amazing. Even if you changed just one character, it would have been better. I am just not emotionally invested in either of these characters. It is like when two wrestlers you do not care about have a match. (You may replace wrestler with whatever you prefer. Basketball teams, football teams, whatever.) You watch it but you do not pay attention to it. If Blueblood raped somepony else, I would have hated Blueblood even more. If Suri was raped by somepony else, I would have cheered that pony on. But together, Suri and Blueblood are just not interesting.
I meant no offense and I apologize for my rant.
KBO.
1. All chaps are assless
2. Props for the Oklahoma parody lyrics, very creative
A very good story overall!
Dark but hot. I like it.
I couldn't read it... I fucking hate Blueblood with all of my heart and soul.
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I'm considering joining this project. So I looked in on the Blueblood and Suri chapter.
There was something to it. It was... not objectionable. Oh there was domination and two unpleasant ponies, but it was actually very readable. Maybe disliking Suri and feeling neutral to Blueblood did it but, all your talent showed through (you MUST teach me erotic brevity; I feel I have this habit of rabbiting on because I fear an un-padded sex scene will have me drawn and quartered by readers.) I think the sterilization helped too. No fart smells or slime flavors or even descriptions of dirt, even when licking his hooves. The focus on the act rather than disgusting things that could be there made it simply magnificent.
This was a triumph. And if I can I will join this august gathering, eagerly.