Twilight rested near the Dusk Range. She heaved a breath, the strain of creating her world getting to her. Still, she knew she must continue. She was finicky by nature, and under no circumstances was she going to leave a job half-finished.
She opened her wings and shook them out, flapping them hard. She took off into the air, Rainbow's cerulean sun shining its gorgeous light on her and warming her wings.
She felt that she was nearly done with the landscaping. Glorious lakes and vast oceans covered her planet. Majestic waterfalls fell from cliffs high in the mountains. The ravine containing the Belle Stones scarred the land, adding a touch of character to her world. If she squinted, she could just about see the mountain range where she had erected the Memorial Temple.
The atmosphere was coming along nicely, and Twilight knew that her world would soon be ready to support more life than simply a few patches of stubby red and green grass.
She did, however, notice the lack of geothermal activity on her planet. There were no volcanoes, nor geysers nor hot springs. Twilight's scholarly mind instantly took note of the danger. If too much pressure was to build up with no way to escape, the results could be extremely volatile. She wouldn't allow that to happen and destroy the life she would create.
Soaring over one of the more remote mountain ranges, close to the North Pole, Twilight focused her strained magic. She concentrated her telekinesis in a way she'd never tried before. Her magic condensed into an opaque magenta cone, ridged along the sides and almost solid to the touch.
Twilight drove the cone downwards into the summit of a mountain, rotating it rapidly. The drill of pure magic began to burrow deep into the rock that formed the mountain. Gritting her teeth, Twilight continued to drill into her mountain.
Suddenly, she felt something give. She dispersed her drill and flew clear as a violent shaking built up around the mountain.
A pillar of molten rock, mud and smoke came billowing out of her brand new volcano. The heated matter began to fall, lava oozing down the side of the mountain and incinerating the patches of grass in its path.
Twilight smiled. She would allow other volcanoes to form naturally, but this one would satisfy the ground's geothermal needs for now.
She condensed her magic into a smaller drill and flew around, drilling holes in the ground, creating vents. She placed them strategically, attempting to avoid areas that would make for good farmland.
Future volcanoes would grow up around these vents. She didn't want to leave them too close to anywhere that her ponies might settle.
She alighted near a lake's edge, taking a drink of the clear, cool water. It was somehow immensely more satisfying, knowing that she had created this water with her own magic.
Sweat dripped down her mane and into her eyes. Twilight shuddered. It had been quite a while since she had bathed herself. She looked at the lake again.
Well, no time like the present.
With a very un-princesslike whoop, she dove into the chilly lake. A part of her felt ashamed for sullying the water, but the more rational part of her told her that the lake would clean itself, as water does.
She ducked under the water, and paddled leisurely with her wings, just enjoying her surroundings. The lake looked lonely. It was merely a rock basin filled with water. There was no pondweed. No wader birds pecking for shrimp, or true water birds diving for fish. She made a mental note to make sure that her underwater kingdom was just as full of life as her land-based one.
She noticed an indent in the side of the lake. She swam over to investigate it. It was just a short hollow, nothing spectacular about it, but it reminded Twilight of adventure stories she'd read. Stories where there were underwater tunnels that would lead to caverns.
Twilight formed her drill once more. She dug it into the hollow, angling it downwards. Water rushed in the fill the space. Twilight followed her drill into her tunnel, the light from her horn guiding her. When she felt it of sufficient length, she angled her drill upwards. Gravity opposed the water's attempts to fill the gap, and it remained behind.
Twilight folded her dripping wings and walked along the tunnel, which was gradually getting steeper. She made sure not to make it so steep that any non-Pegasi who were daring enough to attempt to follow the tunnel would not be able to traverse it.
Feeling once more that she had gone a sufficient distance, she enlarged her drill. She began to cut a cavern into the rock. The fallen scree piled up, and Twilight levitated it off to the side. She would deal with it later.
When she had a sizeable cavern dug out, she picked up the scree. Her horn glowed brightly for a moment before the scree disappeared in a flash. She had teleported it to some place near the Lunar Range.
Standing on the edge of the cavern's spacious basin, Twilight sighed and lit her horn, beginning the arduous process of creating water from scratch.
After several hours, she cut off her magic with a groan. She fell back on her haunches and wiped her brow with a wing. She was exhausted, but when she looked at the sparkling underground lake she had created, she knew it was worth it.
She had lined the ceiling with luminescent gems. Like the Belle Stones, they could not be removed. But whereas the Belle Stones could be removed under certain conditions, these gems were completely immobile. They cast a soft light on the lake's water, their many colours dancing on the small ripples.
Twilight smiled. She was not done with this lake. But she would have to wait before her plans for it could come to fruition.
Deciding that here was as good a place as any for a nap, Twilight curled up and fell into a deep sleep.
Twilight soared once more. She wanted more geothermal activity. She wasn't sure that a few vents and a volcano would be enough.
She landed on the ground and walked until she noticed a place where the ground was heated beneath her hooves. She deduced that the crust must be thinner here.
The perfect place for a hot spring. She created her drill and burrowed into the ground. Not so deep as to reach the core, but deep enough that the ground was even hotter than before. She didn't even want to think about creating more water from scratch, so she grabbed an amount of water from a nearby river and dropped it into her pool.
After a while, the water grew lukewarm. After that, it became pleasantly hot. Twilight soaked herself in her new hot spring. She let the warm water soothe her tense muscles, in particular her wings, which had seen more use these past few years than they had in the rest of her millennia long life.
The hotspot stretched further, so Twilight idly drilled a few more holes. She wasn't sure why she did it. They weren't deep enough to be vents. They weren't wide enough to be a hot spring.
Maybe they would be warm wells? She borrowed more water from the river and dropped a small amount into each hole. Warm wells didn't seem right. Maybe they would just be a mystery? Maybe she would just leave them, and see what her ponies did with them.
As she sat contemplating the purpose of these holes, she heard a bubbling sound come from one of the holes. The small amount of water in it was boiling. It was both shallower in volume, but further down in the rock than the hot spring.
Suddenly, a plume of steam and water droplets burst from the hole in front of her. Another hole shot a similar spray into the air. All around Twilight, the holes were erupting.
She smiled. Geysers.
She had made geysers. Even when their initial water supply ran out, water seeping into the ground from the spring and river would have a place to escape the pressure via the newly formed geysers.
Twilight found great joy in watching them. So much so, in fact, that she drilled a few more, in a different area of the hotspot.
As her second set of geysers began to erupt, Twilight couldn't help but compare them to a pony she once knew.
They were odd. To somepony less knowledgeable than her, they didn't really make much sense. They were random. They were spontaneous. They erupted whenever they felt like it.
They were a perfect mirror of Pinkie Pie.
Smiling, Twilight grasped the water supply in the second set of geysers with her magic. She cast a conversion spell, but an altered one. Instead of changing it to a different liquid, she changed it to the most fitting thing she could think of. The water slowly solidified and changed shape. Soon, it was not water that Twilight held in her magic field. Instead, she held bits of confetti, long streamers and balloons, some filled with air, some deflated.
She lowered the party supplies into the geysers once more. She lit her horn, still gripping the supplies, and said, "May these objects never run out. May they always be here, eternal. May they not catch fire, nor be destroyed in any way. Their presence shall be a harmless one. They will not contaminate the ground. Instead, they will bring new water to the world upon touching the ground. May they bring joy to the hearts of those who see them. May they be freely taken by those who need them to bring happiness and laughter to others."
Smiling as she completed her spell, she gently placed the party supplies into the geysers. She sat and waited.
Within minutes, one of the geysers erupted. With the sound of a party horn, confetti, streamers and balloons flew into the air. They began to slowly fall, fluttering and twirling in the air. The balloons floated upwards slowly. As the confetti hit the ground, it melted back into water.
A streamer wound itself around Twilight's horn. She picked it up and put it on the ground, watching it dissolve harmlessly. She smiled.
Pinkie would approve, she thought.
As much as she would have loved to just stay there and watch the Party Geysers, Twilight knew she had further business to attend to.
She took off. Her next destination would be a large plain near the Chaotic Range. It was spacious, even ground. There was a large lake, perfect for fresh water.
It would be the perfect place for a city. But, Twilight wanted the place to have a bit more personality. She wanted future settlements in this area to be located on something impressive. Like the mountain Canterlot was built into.
A plateau. She couldn't recall creating any plateaus in all her time here. Gripping the landscape, dotted with patches of red grass, she gently pulled upwards. A section of land was lifted with her magic, expanding so as not to become ripped from the core entirely.
Gently teasing the plateau up from the ground, Twilight let her mind wander. She wondered what her ponies would create on the world she gave them. She wondered what she would do when she was finished. Would she rule the world like Celestia and Luna? Or would she stay out of it, an impartial observer? Perhaps she would assist the crown of the future, but not directly rule herself.
Twilight decided that she had probably raised the plateau enough and refocused her attention on it. What she saw shocked her.
While she hadn't been paying attention the shape of the plateau she was building, she had inadvertently created it to be in the shape of a six-pointed star.
She wasn't one for egotism, but she found herself enjoying the shape, and how similar it was to her cutie mark. It was a symbol of her part in creating the planet. Rather than change it, she decided to leave it as it was. She would return here later. There was still space for more plateaus, after all.
And she had ideas for the shapes of them.
on the subject of geysers....
Clouds arn't supposed to be pushed arround by flying horsies either. Screw logic, aquire magic
4052540 I second this
great world building, hope you plan on doing something with it :)
yes, ponies are interesting but since she's starting from scratch why not go all the way?
Nice chapter can't wait to see the creation of plants and animals.
On the matter of the party geysers: May I suggest that the balloons and streamers dissolve into water upon hitting the ground? If they don't disappear... they'll just end up contaminating the ground
Also, this chapters feels like it's higher quality than the others you've written... Did you practice? Also, "longest chapter so far," Bullshit! I wrote a 3900 word chapter, mate We just split it in two.
4052670 Retarded oversights. Those are my specialty!
And I haven't really been practicing. It's just that I had this sitting around for a while and rewrote it like three times. So it got a lot of editing.
EDIT: I changed the geyser mechanics and the author's note.
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Good girl! Editing is good!
4052581 Indeed. This seems like a fun little world, with some lore and places to explore. So I hope you get a sequel out after this about the creatures living here, so that many other authors can write into this universe!
this is going to last forever at this rate.
...awesome!
4052969 4052581 I actually was considering opening the universe to the public when it's done, so I can see what people will do with it.
Kind of like Twilight, I guess.
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are you sure that's a good idea?
Twilight has to fail at some point. Otherwise you run the risk of making her infallible, and an infallible protagonist is a borring one.
Also, I was wondering, will Twilight make her own life or borrow some from Equestria?
Don't rush anything! No matter what people say. Don't forget that Twilight is MAKING A NEW WORLD! Any abreviations or shortcuts will undermine that feat and make it seem less impressive.
Also don't lose sight of the vastness of the project Twilight has undertaken. The physical output alone of the spells shes casting would break scientists' brains. Not to mention the massive amount of micro managing required, lest a seemingly beautiful valley scene is proven drab and blank apon closer inspection.
How about some custom creatures and plants?
The idea of Twilight filling the world she creates with these tributes to her friends is so heartwarming that I'm almost crying.
Great story, keep it up! I'm looking forward to when ponies start living there. I hope the story is going to be long enough to have us follow Twilight when civilization has been created and whatnot...
Beautiful
Enjoy this guy
Your writing a story were an immortal winged unicorn is, quite literally, building a world using her magical magic of magicness.
Just going to go out on a limb and say that I think most peoples suspension of disbelief will also cover the finer points of geology not working quite as they do in our world.
A beautiful chapter, either-way. Did not expect that tribute to Pinkie, but it truly seems something she'd been enjoyed.
I'll be honest, I was dubious of the story at first. Then I ended up reading everything in one sitting. Great work honestly
Don't forget Twilight's personal fax machine though. Spike needs some love
I can't wait to see what plants and animals she creates. Also, can I suggest having her altering her own form to match (at least slightly) the beings she will have inhabit her world? I think that would be cool!
You could have them be more realistic looking, with cloven hooves and spiraled horns and lionlike tails, or something similar. Or just go all out, and make them look completely different!
And don't forget to write about Celestia and Luna's reactions to her world. (What will she name it, by the way?)
Continue the good work!!!!
Very enjoyable read keep writing friend and have this up vote.
Now THIS is world building! And in a very literal way, too.
As a huge fan of God games, like Populous: The Beginning, Black and White and From Dust, this has all my approvals.
My cutie mark!
Hory shet!
Twi goes about creating her own friggin' WORLD?!
Okay, I'm gonna have to read this one sooner or later.
4053166 I just thought of something. Will Twilight be going the whole evolution route? Or will she just create all life in apex form?
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I'd guess evolution, she seems to be scientific, remember when she said time travel was not 'scientifically' possible?
Notice this when I came down to the bottom to comment:
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Three things argue against this:
Firstly, evolution would be driven by survival of the fittest, which tends to go against Kindness.
Secondly, she is a detail-oriented neat-nick. I hardly think that she is going to leave the design of species to random chance when she has been crafting individual rivers and such. Also, she specifically said she would be creating "Ponies" so if she has a specific goal in mind, using round-about means to achieve it seems too inefficient for her.
Thirdly, we don't know if Celestia and Luna went that route, so the concept of macro-evolution may not have ever occurred to her.
[EDIT]In chapter number six we see that at least as far as plants go, I guessed correctly. We shall see how ti works out for everything else, but I'm guessing that this isn't that sort of story.[/EDIT]
Back to reviewing as I read.
She heaved a breath, the strain of creating her world getting to her. Still, she knew she must continue. She was finicky by nature, and under no circumstances was she going to leave a job half-finished.
-This again has me worried about Celestia's attitude from the first chapter, although I continue to hold out hope.
She placed them strategically, attempting to avoid areas that would make for good farmland.
-Aren't the materials in lava good fertilizer in the long run? Perhaps Earth Pony magic renders that a trivial point.
She didn't want to leave them too close to anywhere that her ponies might settle.
-Oh, DUH! I get it now. She's not trying to preserve the total amount of farmland, she's trying to avoid Pompeii and Herculaneum! Very good!
the lake would clean itself, as water does.
-Doesn't that require algae and stuff to do it?
She made a mental note to make sure that her underwater kingdom was just as full of life as her land-based one.
-Indeed...
Gravity opposed the water's attempts to fill the gap, and it remained behind.
-So, vacuum for now, until the watervapor and air seeping through tiny cracks in the rock can fill it in? Actually, what is the boiling point of water at zero pressure? *Googles* Looks like BELOW -90 degrees Fahrenheit . Wait... never mind... it might have happened slowly enough as she drilled (especially given the hot zone around the drill to localize it) that there wouldn't be any visible boiled... doesn't change the fact that she is probably surrounded by gaseous water rather than the standard atmospheric mix unless she did something to prevent it... well, minus whatever dissolved gases leeched out first... bleh... science is fun, but I'm not getting anywhere too interesting with this particular avenue of investigation, so I'll stop now.
When she had a sizeable cavern dug out, she picked up the scree. Her horn glowed brightly for a moment before the scree disappeared in a flash.
-Interesting you choose to explicitly cover this now, when it wasn't for the memorial to her friends nor for the tunnel to get here.
beginning the arduous process of creating water from scratch.
-Why, when she has an entire lake-full very near-by?
Deciding that here was as good a place as any for a nap, Twilight curled up and fell into a deep sleep.
-Another worrying sentence...
They were a perfect mirror of Pinkie Pie.
-Not what I would have picked probably, but then again she's a hard one to fit...
Soon, it was not water that Twilight held in her magic field. Instead, she held bits of confetti, long streamers and balloons, some filled with air, some deflated.
<SNIP> "May these objects never run out.
-AH! That's better!
May they always be here, eternal. May they not catch fire, nor be destroyed in any way. Their presence shall be a harmless one. They will not contaminate the ground. Instead, they will bring new water to the world upon touching the ground. May they bring joy to the hearts of those who see them. May they be freely taken by those who need them to bring happiness and laughter to others."
-I would recommend "Let" instead of "May"... as in "Let there be light!"... still nice to see the technical details covered even as regards this most 'illogical' portion of the story.
A streamer wound itself around Twilight's horn. She picked it up and put it on the ground, watching it dissolve harmlessly.
-Ah, so they can be played with since on the ground destroys them... the uninflated balloons would be somewhat disappointing to her Ponies otherwise... still it might cause problems for trees and roofs... but those should be manageable even without her tweaking it so that only non-plant living creatures DON'T destroy them or something... I dunno...
A plateau. She couldn't recall creating any plateaus in all her time here.
-Rainbow Dash's personal memorial?
While she hadn't been paying attention the shape of the plateau she was building, she had inadvertently created it to be in the shape of a six-pointed star.
-Guess not... and it makes sense that she would include that subconsciously. From a literary point of view it makes sense, even if from an in-universe perspective the Ponies won't need a reminder since she is with them in person... at least as far as Twilight knows she will be... still worried about her discorporating for a few thousand years, or outright dying permanently. Anyway, I would think that she would have enough monuments to herself from her beloved subjects... could be seen as "well, since I gave my other five friends a geographic feature for themselves, I guess I get one too... doesn't feel like an artist's signature either... and, yes, I AM bleeding back into literary analysis.
There was still space for more plateaus, after all.
And she had ideas for the shapes of them.
-Ah, that works too...
-I notice that you are leaving out Spike from all this. I assume he was a few centuries dead at the start of all this, but even with more time with him, I would think she would want to memorialize him somehow... unless he is just sleeping and she times her visits back to Equestria to catch him when he is awake?
looks like the entire world is a memorial to the bearers.