welp, time to get my reading glasses

I thought it was gonna be a dusk/shining armor fem version ;_;

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Well... sorry. That's a right shame/ shocking business right there.

This is positively godlike.

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You like it?! I'm glad somepony does because I'm just waiting for the downvote train to run this fic over...

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[3:55:34 PM] Christmas Parasprite: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/155539/philiac
[3:55:51 PM] Christmas Parasprite: i cannot exaggerate how awesome that story is
[3:58:24 PM] Christmas Parasprite: it has colt-age dusk shine crossdressing as a filly and getting buttfucked by male cadence

This... is epic!

this was awesome!

Well, I'm surprised this hasn't been nominated for some kind of award already.

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42 to 7 as of the time I read it. Doesn't exactly look like it's going to be steam-rolled, nor should it! And that's coming from a guy for whom gay scenes don't work one bit.

What I'm awfully curious about is, how will Shimmer Shield react to all this..? Will she even find out? Does Cadenza strive for a relationship with Shield in the first place? I would assume so, seeing as how Shimmer Shield claims to her little brother to be annoyed at the prince; that, to me, suggests that yes, Cadenza is actively working on their future together. To be honest, I've always quietly assumed that it'd been Cadance/Cadenza, the Prince/ess of Shipping Love, who took the opportunity to ship herself once she found somepony she/he liked^^

This was a lot beter then what I expected xD

I hope the dark tags doesn't shine to much later on?

Or is the dark tag because of the S&M?

well shit............. I enojoied this more than I though I would!!

Foalcon, Crossdressing, S&M, Pet Play

Sadistic or just lewd? Lewd is exactly my cup of tea, darker stuff... is a big nnnope for me.

I'll kill you. You thought that was a lot of blood? That was a skinned knee equivalence. I wanted to kiss you this morning, now there is no rock big enough, no mountain high enough, no crevice deep enough to shield you from my wrath!! Too much blood is spoof zombie flick quantity. Aside from that good work. Very Grimm light, it's bad what happening but is better than the world they live in. This seems like a much lighter fic than what I've read so far. Which is weird given the material, but it makes sense.

P.S. I was not that mad.

Honestly I come here, six months abroad, three months in one city, and Cole still doesn't understand not to toss my phone. Though I have to admit even I was furious with this. Not the story, no that was amazing, the context pissed me off. How can your own parents not accept you!? I know murderers who still get presents from their parents, deadbeats that still share a Christmas dinner with the folks, and you are telling me their kid come out a genius, with a shinning future, but him being gay makes him a low rung in the family?! That is the biggest bullshit I have ever heard!! Though I love the sister being the saving grace, it is always the older sibling who watch out for the younger. So far I have high expectations, sorry but they are there, I am sure you won't dissapoint. Though... Is there something 'personal' going on here? Many times if I read a story there's an emotion behind it, anger, anxiousness, excitement, here there seems a lack... Like stone cold lack of emotions. Maybe my own anger got in the way?

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Let's go over a few facts about my life that let me fit into Dusk's shoes perfectly.

For one, I studied programming since I was about thirteen, have parents that want nothing but for me to get a good job so they can mooch off me for the rest of my life, claim to be Proud of my intelligence but do not want me talking at all about my personal life or relationships, and are morover happy to ignore me until I serve them some purpose. Also, when I was thirteen there was somepony I positively adored and I wanted them to watch me over the summer. With a no, my dreams were shattered, and I am left to my own devices for months.

I fit perfectly behind the eyes that stare out at you from the cover art of this fic, and it is (to an extent) a lament to everything I wish I'd had with that certain person I positively worshipped, even with the years between us.

M... More?

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Well, I can't exactly say that I know how that feels like. The parents thing I mean. With my own, it's something like this:

"Son, if you were gay, we'd love you and support you and not think any less of you. The only way to really disappoint us is to become a Nazi."

"And if I did?"

"Then we'd be really disappointed, but still love you."

My former roommate, on the other hand... they didn't help him move, despite the fact that his new flat is right opposite theirs, same level, same building; and that our old flat was within twenty minutes walking distance. And that they're unemployed both. And despite his grandfather coming to help with moving the furniture and all...

Damn it, it is so hard hiding a wing-boner! But, my gods, that was beautiful! I ask for more! I want more!

I've got my suspicions that the dark tag involves the parents.
I'll be watching... Waiting... Interminably waiting... And then... I'll read the next chapter. ...

Hmmm... this... this story... it interests me.

Strangely enough, I was disappointed by the clop. Not for lack of quality, although I do have a few issues with it; I was disappointed because it disrupted the flow of Dusk's sexual identity. I really liked where it was going, exploring the ideals and concepts of felling more emotionally at ease as the opposite gender in some regard. It even brings up the common feelings of shame and the desire to hide those desires from friends or loved ones, and the concept of becoming a further outcast from one's own friends and family.

I was so excited when Dusk started crossdressing. There was a really well done war of consciousness at work, but once Cadance appeared, those themes, ideas, and groundwork got chucked out the window. I was so excited, but then it just devolved into wanton clop for the sake of clop. I hope you realize the headway you made with the first half. It seriously outshined the clop in every respect.

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I will take note of that next chapter... I was trying to rush it with the clop I must admit. I just needed to make it seem sudden, but in that respect I suppose I lost some quality. I will try harder next time, as this may turn out to be my most notable fic ever.

3687087 mmm nice/not nice , i had a relational experience that also turned out with a no in that way , only it was prior i was left with my thoughts of what to do about it , afterwards of being unable to convince to change mind i simply 'moved on' as some would say , sometimes i still catch myself wondering about what could have been had circumstances been different , but im not about to start brain storming to write any fics about it , so good on you for this one here then....

and while i appreciate giving us some goods in the first chapter so i could successfully get off tonight , i feel it was very rushed/shoehorned in and also felt needlessly cruel , you put a lot of effort into the build up and then the sex kinda just happened and that was it , would have much rather seen the discovery scene play out in a much more gradual way.....

This is a good story, even if it doesn't make me feel particularly good. Dusks parents are assholes that's obvious, but cadenza? I can't help but get the feeling that he's taking advantage of a confused young colt. This puzzles me cause if he is the male version of Cadence, shouldn't he want to genuinely help Dusk? I thought Cadenza was going to help guide him to accepting himself, but it doesn't seem that way, not yet anyway. Poor Dusk.

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This starts to address how I'm feeling right now: "Why would we want to read about a male version of Cadenza being a ruthless sexual predator?" I believe the answer would be "We don't." (Or at least, "I").

Assuming that, second question: "Why would we want to read about whatever horrors this story puts a gender-confused male Twilight through, when it's already weird enough that you bother to switch her gender in the first place?"

The third question: "What do you have to say on the psychology of the issue, is this kind of pro-homosexual statement that you're making here? Or perhaps just pro-crossdressing? I don't believe this to be a justifiable position from a psychological (Which, believe it or not, I know more than a little about) perspective, and if I'm reading a story dealing with mental confusion, I certainly expect a factual inquiry into the matter."

The fourth question: "Assuming that, no, we're not here to discuss Psychological Fact vs. Psychological Theory vs. Psychological Proganda vs. Free Choice vs. Abortion vs. Personal Belief (Which is a pretty accurate rundown of how such discussions go, as people like to introduce abortion when the choice factor of homosexuality is brought up {rolling eyes}) Then is this just fluff? I feel confused... And these stories certainly aren't my cup of tea, so I come to the comments and say: What the hay, Author?"

And frankly, while I read mare x mare ship fics, those are inherently: "Hey, this is how I choose to act." (Which, right or wrong, is undeniably freedom of will that would be absolutely stupid {and hypocritical} to try and contain, deny, or control).

This story is letting off: "Hey, this is how I may or may not inherently be with no considerations except, perhaps, clop?"

And naturally that raises issues on many levels, from the aforementioned sexual predator to relationship considerations to "What. In. Equestria. Do. You. Honestly. Think. Is. Happening. To. Dusk Shine's mind."

Yep...

I'm just confused by the whole premise of this story, and even though I don't plan to read this, for all of us who don't read stories unless the premise of the introduction catches our interest: What the hay?

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Hello, Author-san here with a few answers. Firstly this fic isn't written for you, and I mean that in the way that it isn't really isn't for everypony. I wanted, and if you read back in this comment thread, to take a trip into the mind of a colt whose mind is changing, and as we can see he reaches catharsis with himself over his own sexual identity in just this first chapter. I wanted to write about how strange one can feel when somepony (in this instance, Cadenza,) uses this fractured, malleable state of mind. I also wanted to get inside Dusk's head as his foalsitter steps in, and just how he feels about this. If you were to read the fic you would see that Dusk is not only fond of Cadenza, but does little to stop him when his advances, signalling initial consent, but confliction over whether it is right for a colt of his age to be okay with such things. I wanted to write about how strange exploring the mind of a young colt can be, and how it can go down strange roads through its remarkable ability to accept and explore the strangest of behaviours.

If this fic isn't your cup of tea, I cannot help you. But I at least gave you insight into why I wrote the fic. I also may say that I wrote this for somepony that, when I was that age, fawned over in much the same way Dusk does over Cadenza.

Have a Happy New Year.

I liked it

Now then, onto the actual comment.

While I do agree in the bit at the end did feel rushed, I also agree in the sense that it was a good chapter. The buildup was good, and so far I'm liking the character's personalities. Cadenza seems a bit rough with his treatment towards Dusk (though he did heal him back up after all was said and done). So I'm not gonna be like, "Oh he's being heartless" or "I wonder why he's doing this if he's supposed to be like a sort of role-model for Dusk". Instead, I'm going to sit quietly and wait, because I honestly think that Cadenza is helping in either the only way he knows how, or because he knows that this is the right thing to do in this situation.

I mean, he is quite the intelligent stallion, so my bits are on Cadenza knowing exactly what's going on and how to deal with it.

well.... that was a thing.... excuse me whilst I proceed to cleans myself with FIRE although very good story

3688131 Wow, you raise some really good points. I was thinking similar things I just didn't think it through enough to word it so accurately. I think what you're getting at is that this fic takes a bit of a simple approach to what is a complex issue. I agree with that, and also I just can't see a male Cadence treating a male Twilight like that.

... Damn it, internet.
No offense to the author, but when I saw that this was an r63 clop, I figured i'd read it for gits and shiggles. Then damn it all, i'm straight, and i've got an awkward boner. Damn it... Just, damn it.

... I'll be favoriting to read future chapters. Don't judge me.

*licks lips* oh Yes DWhay, this is positively scrumptious. An excellent mixture of feels and delicious crossdressing foalcon (shotacon) goodness! You sir are quickly becoming one of my favorite writers on this site, do not disappoint me....

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Welcome to a combination of spare time, myself, and... Well, many things, this whole story is full of topics that don't deserve a hand-waving "politically correct" remark... But need to be reasonably engaging so it doesn't turn in a flame-war either. (And that's a line that I doubt can be walked and still fully express your opinions/beliefs on the issue).

Which of course mostly leads you to; "Sexuality behind closed residence doors."

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I see... Or at least I think I see.

Or maybe it's: "I see many things you could mean by that, and why you might write something like."

And obviously that's the cue to take a step back from, "Really personal not-to-mention long-winded conversation."

Have a Merry Belated Christmas and a Happy New Year!

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I have over a hundred followers thanks to this fic that, frankly, I expected to get burnt to the ground due to its content. Now here it is, my most.popular fanfiction ever, not because of some fancy diction and extensive proofreading, but out of sheer concept. I do believe that this is as close as I will ever get to the front page and it feels so amazing just to have a hundred followers.

(*P.S. Had to do a lot of thread trimming... lots of people bringing up the same points, giving one or two word comments, or things that don't relate to the fic.*)

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But you don't know any of that because you never read the story.

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Damn!! A lot can happen in a few hours no? So let me see if I get this straight. Your parents disapprove of you sexual orientation, are only wanting you as a source of income, and you carry regret from a missed opportunity. Preferably I would move away. Still you really let out the submissive character here. I am still awaiting the next chapter.

P.S. Cole says when is the next chapter of caffeine coming out?

The fuck did I just read...

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When she can summon it from the dead because it no longer exists.

I'm still underage I can't move away.

This is my most popular fic ever, and I'm working on the next chapter right now.

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Err... You might wanna keep that fact hidden from her. Nothing gets her flame going more than someone abandoning their story.
Popular? With all the mixed reviews, deleted comments, and material of the story? You better believe this thing is gonna be popular!

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it has colt-age dusk shine crossdressing as a filly and getting buttfucked by male cadence

Read that sentence out loud to yourself. listen to the words that you are speaking.
now think about what you are doing with your life.

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yeah i know
but, as a brony, i have no shame

3689403 Dude i feel for you wanting for your parents to accept you stay strong my friend