Ponies have long been at the top of the food chain, but recently it has all changed. The gates of Tartarus are open; normally docile creatures are growing and feeding, and all of Equestria is in turmoil.
...Please tell me Fluttershy gets to die an slow and painful death, with Princess Celestia and Luna having dissapeared, ponies are looking up to Twilight as an surviving princess whose existence probably gives them hope and she is going to let her die because of the "natural order", not mentioning that Twilight is one of her best friends and one of the elements of harmony but i guess that counts for nothing because of the "natural order"... you have no idea how much i want to see her die right now, i want to see her die even more than Blueblood, which was something i did not think was possible.
................. okay, this is jsut bad writing here. twilight would have burst the fuck to pieces eons ago. she can blast a giant worm serpent enough to make it fall backwards, she can blast her way free of a snake.
seriously dude, its one thing to write a scenario like this, another to blatantly ignore the characterization just so it can happen. twilight could blast her way out or, if she did not want to kill, tepeort herself out of the damn thing. she made a giant serpent worm stumble about with small nonlethal bursts of magic, a snake is not a threat.
so basically when twilight's fate is less she got killed and more you made her too stupid to realize she could kill the thing ninety years ago, it kinda ruins the whole thing. and that is only using tiwlight's fate. the others are equally as bad.
Judging by her reaction, i'd say shy is a voraphile which likely added to her decision to let twilight digest. But i'm guessing from the fact that twi is keeping her soul in tact, she may become a naga or normal snake through possession... Then again I could be completely wrong, since this isn't my story. Either way, twi got eat by a snake.
3986569 Easy explanation: After being in a trance from last chapter, by the time she came to her senses she was too weakened to do those things. For all we know, she only snapped out of it minutes earlier. Even if that wasn't obvious, the show writers often 'ignore' her abilities for no reason, because if Twilight zapped everything on site, it wouldn't be a very good show. Would you like to call them and tell them what bad writers they are?
3986852 ...... the show rarely has scenarios where she is swallowed alive by a deadly predator. or said attacker is a large supernatural animal, often made of inorganic material.
and no, she would probably be able to break out. pertty sure preventing digestion is kinda a few steps above blowing up snakes.
SPOILERS Now fillies, this is easily explained: > Twilight overdosed on sedatives > Twilight swallowed by a snake > Twilight wakes up a day later, her legs digested, suffocating, and barely alive as her magic is preserving her 'mind' even though the body has failed > Hears Fluttershy and cries out for help, uttering a key phrase: "I can feel the snake's muscles."
As you can see, Twilight's already halfway through being absorbed, her essence becoming that of the snake. Like Pinkie's victims, Twilight will become part of the snake. Unlike them, [spoilers]her consciousness will fade.[/spoilers]
Class dismissed, and don't bring Diamond Tiara over again. She's a bitch.
3986802 Fluttershy? Voraphilia? I thought I disguised it better than that.
3986604 Dark Tragedy by Kaidan... yep, no pony will survive. At least, not as a pony.
I'm sad to see Twilight go, but the arc with her and Fluttershy will span the entire story, so is she really gone?
3986550 Lol, awww. Fluttershy is so cute and innocent, and clearly she knew that Twilight was beyond saving. I'm sure she had reptile laxatives somewhere in that cabin and could have saved Twilight, if there was enough Twilight left to save.
She wouldn't have, because I'm writing the story, but she could have.
3758583 I went to the George RR Martin school of character development: > Form attachment > KILL WITH FIRE > somepony far away mourns their death > KILL THEM TOO
3986536 Nothings wrong with you, everything is right :D
3987009 Twilight is still alive, and if what Fluttershy said about it taking an few days is true, then she should have most of her body intact, this is just Fluttershy being an terrible pony who seems to like an snake more than Twilight to the point she is going to let the snake eat Twilight, because there is no way in hell others will not notice an princess dissapearing, and it is not as if that will not generate panic and lead ponykind to take actions that will probably just rush them to their doom but at least she will not disrupt the "natural order"...i mean, is she really so dumb as to not realize Twilight being alive in any way is much better for ponykind than an stupid snake being fed. I really hope one of the animals betrays Fluttershy and slowly performs hard vore on her while keeping her alive for the most part so that she can see one of her animals eat her just like the "natural order" says.
3986989 and alive when her body is dead, all she need do is escape and likely soemthing can be done......
not buying it. the story is a mess............. really weird record with your stories. some are plain awesome, like dash of humanity and the doll house one. others, like this, somewhat confused messes. some are still entertaining but others just.............. not.
3988596 Pinkie scares me now if the same thing happens as a result of her eating Colgate is the same as when she ate Derpy. Then again... actually would be a bit relieved! Lose an alicorn, gain an alicorn!
3988596 All of them? Man, have you looked at the MLP Wiki recently? There's like, over 500 named characters.
Albeit most we never hear of and such, but apparently people have nothing better to do than name every single pony in the show. I mean they may not be official but flippity fuck they all have fan given names practically.
Aaaaaaaaaaaand this fic is now shit and remain shit until Fluttershy gets eaten. Not the nice, smooth, "feels good until you're dead and then you don't care" way. No no no. She needs to be violently ripped apart and swallowed in chunks and kept alive as long as possible so she suffers. Seriously. She's acting like a member of PETA. Not the People Eating Tasty Animals, the bad PETA, the ones who bomb animal shelters and shoot people in the face for owning a fucking dog.
----EDIT---- Oh yes, and Twilight better end up controlling that snake and going about more vore shenanigans. Possibly eating all Fluttershy's smaller friends while making her watch. (Because frankly, we need more pred-perspective vore. Pinkie doesn't quite cut it.)
3994009 I'm with you pal. Pinkie? Keeps the ponies alive and gets stronger, but she's non-violent.Spiderloo? She has a FAMILY to feed now and didn't felt good eating AB. Even the slime ended throwing BlueBlood to the sewers, that is awesome! But fluttershy? I hopeTwilight control or fuse with the snake like scoots and tear shy in pieces...Twilight Nagga Sparkle, half pony, half snake, all vore
This is not a good story nor good writing, you WANT the characters to be in a particular place, but because that place is disrespectful to who they are as a character, what the setting of the show is about and makes NO GODDAMN SENSE, you have to ALTER their personalities and come up with contrived scenarios that force them into acting a certain way. This story is essentially bullshit that pisses all over the characters we know and love and treats them like shit while expecting us to accept it because it's glorified fetish material.
I just want you to know that I upvoted your comment because it was funny while also managing to be completely gay, and that takes effort. Also, I was going to dissect it and mock you like a boss, but then as I was doing the requisite homework, I noticed you had a pretty lulzy blog about Chatannoyance. For that, you shall be spared.
The worst part about her is that she's actually very smart--I have had conversations with her before, and she is an extremely intelligent person--but she refuses to ever compromise or truly admit to being wrong. It's difficult to talk to her because she tends to take everything as an attack if it isn't mindless praise. Now, I can understand to some extent why she would feel persecuted, given that she was rejected by her own family and apparently mistreated by a lot of people irl for being trans a few decades ago. But that's no excuse for not changing her behavior after it's been pointed out literally hundreds of times.
I feel for her real life troubles, but writing stuff like humans not having souls, saying it's okay when HER characters enslave and murder but not when others do, and disrespecting not only the source material but anybody who even tries to point out plot holes and OOC actions in her story by blocking them from responding or just dismissing them as "haters" or a "mob" truly infuriates me.
Because YEAH. That's EXACTLY why people are mad about you, Chatty. Not because your work devalues the work here on this site as a whole, is misanthropy personified, puts your characters in over-the-top god mode and your views on humanity, morality, spirituality and religion are disturbing. No, it's because people like me are just HATERS.
In fact, that's the only reason ANYBODY could hate ANYTHING. Just look at other scenarios this applies to!
"Hey, you shouldn't play in traffic."
"BAH, you just hatin' cuz you didn't think of it first-OH DEAR GOD!"
CRAKKA-KRASSSH!
"Hey, you shouldn't eat so much food so fast!"
"Oh! GLMPH. You just hatin'!...GRUGGHMFH...cuz you ain't gettin' food like-URK! H-heart attack! GAAHHHKK!"
At the least, there's the joy of watching the trainwreck that is her stories. Like I.D., which is my hallmark for 'Wait, did someone SERIOUSLY just write that?'
No, no. The ROOM gives me joy because it's so incompetent and ridiculous. Her work is so...HATEFUL I cannot enjoy it even in an ironic fashion. This story comes off similarly. It's so hateful towards the series and the characters so OOC, the scenarios so contrived, none of it is enjoyable.
I suppose to each their own! I like this because I know it's just kink, and I find ID hilarious because it's so utterly absurd that laughter is the only remedy.
That snake deserves to have his stomach blown open from Twilight. The lazy prick failed to eat her properly. He should have choked the life out of her while breaking every bone in her body before the big gulp like any snake would, but no, he didn't. He even ate her from the wrong side.
So here is what I think should have happen. Twilight blasts open the dumb snake, gets eaten by something else in the forest, rinse and repeat as much as possible (I like to see her get eaten more). Until finally, she makes it back to Ponyville covered in blood and guts only to find everyone dead from their own crazy death sequences. Then asteroid falls and world is destroyed, the end.
If the author wasn't an admitted misanthrope...I mean, it's right there under his name on the side bar...maybe I could just enjoy it too, but since it's not meant to be so over the top it's funny...and since it's not, y'know, actually so over the top it IS funny...
Soooo, am I like the only one wondering if Pinkie's gonna sprout a horn now? She did just eat a unicorn and got wings from eating a pegasus...
Dude, Pinkie's gonna be the next alicorn princess if that happens...
Not exactly sure how I feel about that.
But dude, what if she got, like, extra wings and horns from every pegasus/unicorn she eats? Then she could be just like all of those bad fan-characters I've seen littering dA!
PS: Why the fuck am I saying dude? I never do that...
Gah! Why am I still reading this?! What is wrong with me!?
...Please tell me Fluttershy gets to die an slow and painful death, with Princess Celestia and Luna having dissapeared, ponies are looking up to Twilight as an surviving princess whose existence probably gives them hope and she is going to let her die because of the "natural order", not mentioning that Twilight is one of her best friends and one of the elements of harmony but i guess that counts for nothing because of the "natural order"... you have no idea how much i want to see her die right now, i want to see her die even more than Blueblood, which was something i did not think was possible.
.................
okay, this is jsut bad writing here. twilight would have burst the fuck to pieces eons ago. she can blast a giant worm serpent enough to make it fall backwards, she can blast her way free of a snake.
seriously dude, its one thing to write a scenario like this, another to blatantly ignore the characterization just so it can happen. twilight could blast her way out or, if she did not want to kill, tepeort herself out of the damn thing. she made a giant serpent worm stumble about with small nonlethal bursts of magic, a snake is not a threat.
so basically when twilight's fate is less she got killed and more you made her too stupid to realize she could kill the thing ninety years ago, it kinda ruins the whole thing. and that is only using tiwlight's fate. the others are equally as bad.
Poor Twilight, of all the ponies she had to meet Fluttershy...
Also, I can understand Blueblood - I also feel like shit when I'm hung over, but usually not literally...
Judging by her reaction, i'd say shy is a voraphile which likely added to her decision to let twilight digest. But i'm guessing from the fact that twi is keeping her soul in tact, she may become a naga or normal snake through possession... Then again I could be completely wrong, since this isn't my story. Either way, twi got eat by a snake.
3986569 Easy explanation: After being in a trance from last chapter, by the time she came to her senses she was too weakened to do those things. For all we know, she only snapped out of it minutes earlier.
Even if that wasn't obvious, the show writers often 'ignore' her abilities for no reason, because if Twilight zapped everything on site, it wouldn't be a very good show. Would you like to call them and tell them what bad writers they are?
3986852 ...... the show rarely has scenarios where she is swallowed alive by a deadly predator. or said attacker is a large supernatural animal, often made of inorganic material.
and no, she would probably be able to break out. pertty sure preventing digestion is kinda a few steps above blowing up snakes.
and i have no idea what you are talking about.
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Twilight Time:
SPOILERS
Now fillies, this is easily explained:
> Twilight overdosed on sedatives
> Twilight swallowed by a snake
> Twilight wakes up a day later, her legs digested, suffocating, and barely alive as her magic is preserving her 'mind' even though the body has failed
> Hears Fluttershy and cries out for help, uttering a key phrase: "I can feel the snake's muscles."
As you can see, Twilight's already halfway through being absorbed, her essence becoming that of the snake. Like Pinkie's victims, Twilight will become part of the snake. Unlike them, [spoilers]her consciousness will fade.[/spoilers]
Class dismissed, and don't bring Diamond Tiara over again. She's a bitch.
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Fluttershy? Voraphilia? I thought I disguised it better than that.
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Dark Tragedy by Kaidan... yep, no pony will survive. At least, not as a pony.
I'm sad to see Twilight go, but the arc with her and Fluttershy will span the entire story, so is she really gone?
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Lol, awww. Fluttershy is so cute and innocent, and clearly she knew that Twilight was beyond saving. I'm sure she had reptile laxatives somewhere in that cabin and could have saved Twilight, if there was enough Twilight left to save.
She wouldn't have, because I'm writing the story, but she could have.
3758583
I went to the George RR Martin school of character development:
> Form attachment
> KILL WITH FIRE
> somepony far away mourns their death
> KILL THEM TOO
3986536
Nothings wrong with you, everything is right :D
3987009
Twilight is still alive, and if what Fluttershy said about it taking an few days is true, then she should have most of her body intact, this is just Fluttershy being an terrible pony who seems to like an snake more than Twilight to the point she is going to let the snake eat Twilight, because there is no way in hell others will not notice an princess dissapearing, and it is not as if that will not generate panic and lead ponykind to take actions that will probably just rush them to their doom but at least she will not disrupt the "natural order"...i mean, is she really so dumb as to not realize Twilight being alive in any way is much better for ponykind than an stupid snake being fed.
I really hope one of the animals betrays Fluttershy and slowly performs hard vore on her while keeping her alive for the most part so that she can see one of her animals eat her just like the "natural order" says.
3986989 and alive when her body is dead, all she need do is escape and likely soemthing can be done......
not buying it. the story is a mess.............
really weird record with your stories. some are plain awesome, like dash of humanity and the doll house one. others, like this, somewhat confused messes. some are still entertaining but others just.............. not.
Ride the snake, Twilight. Then eat Fluttershy.
damn, why'd this get so many dislikes?
3987009 No, no, something is most definitely wrong with me.
I'm just glad my threats of NUCLEAR FIRE seem to have kept you from killing Octavia.
Though I'm still trying to understand how one's consciousness is 'absorbed' into the creatures/Pinkie when they should just, you know, die.
But it seems logic.exe had abandoned this story pretty much as the title was typed, let alone when the chapters were being written.
Huh... even though you're killing off some of my favorites I'm seriously having a hard time disliking this one.
Oh Twilight is being digested now and Colgate is also as well as Applebloom. Good chapter looking towards the next.
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Yep, I wanted a story where everypony gets the joy of being eaten alive. I could eat some of your not-favorites next ^^
3988596 Pinkie scares me now if the same thing happens as a result of her eating Colgate is the same as when she ate Derpy. Then again... actually would be a bit relieved! Lose an alicorn, gain an alicorn!
Vore, vore everywhere!! I love it.... now I'm a go puke in that corner. See you next chapter.
3988596 All of them? Man, have you looked at the MLP Wiki recently? There's like, over 500 named characters.
Albeit most we never hear of and such, but apparently people have nothing better to do than name every single pony in the show. I mean they may not be official but flippity fuck they all have fan given names practically.
This will be a very long story.
Aaaaaaaaaaaand this fic is now shit and remain shit until Fluttershy gets eaten. Not the nice, smooth, "feels good until you're dead and then you don't care" way. No no no. She needs to be violently ripped apart and swallowed in chunks and kept alive as long as possible so she suffers. Seriously. She's acting like a member of PETA. Not the People Eating Tasty Animals, the bad PETA, the ones who bomb animal shelters and shoot people in the face for owning a fucking dog.
Know what I think of Fluttershy and her "natural order" bullshit?
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----EDIT----
Oh yes, and Twilight better end up controlling that snake and going about more vore shenanigans. Possibly eating all Fluttershy's smaller friends while making her watch. (Because frankly, we need more pred-perspective vore. Pinkie doesn't quite cut it.)
3994009 I'm with you pal. Pinkie? Keeps the ponies alive and gets stronger, but she's non-violent.Spiderloo? She has a FAMILY to feed now and didn't felt good eating AB. Even the slime ended throwing BlueBlood to the sewers, that is awesome! But fluttershy? I hopeTwilight control or fuse with the snake like scoots and tear shy in pieces...Twilight Nagga Sparkle, half pony, half snake, all vore
This is not a good story nor good writing, you WANT the characters to be in a particular place, but because that place is disrespectful to who they are as a character, what the setting of the show is about and makes NO GODDAMN SENSE, you have to ALTER their personalities and come up with contrived scenarios that force them into acting a certain way. This story is essentially bullshit that pisses all over the characters we know and love and treats them like shit while expecting us to accept it because it's glorified fetish material.
Ah....no. Denied.
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I just want you to know that I upvoted your comment because it was funny while also managing to be completely gay, and that takes effort. Also, I was going to dissect it and mock you like a boss, but then as I was doing the requisite homework, I noticed you had a pretty lulzy blog about Chatannoyance. For that, you shall be spared.
3997353
BUUUUUUUUUURN
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Chatvoyance is a horrible human being and a total hypocrite. She's the Anita Sarkeesian of Fimfiction.
3997776
The worst part about her is that she's actually very smart--I have had conversations with her before, and she is an extremely intelligent person--but she refuses to ever compromise or truly admit to being wrong. It's difficult to talk to her because she tends to take everything as an attack if it isn't mindless praise. Now, I can understand to some extent why she would feel persecuted, given that she was rejected by her own family and apparently mistreated by a lot of people irl for being trans a few decades ago. But that's no excuse for not changing her behavior after it's been pointed out literally hundreds of times.
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I feel for her real life troubles, but writing stuff like humans not having souls, saying it's okay when HER characters enslave and murder but not when others do, and disrespecting not only the source material but anybody who even tries to point out plot holes and OOC actions in her story by blocking them from responding or just dismissing them as "haters" or a "mob" truly infuriates me.
Because YEAH. That's EXACTLY why people are mad about you, Chatty. Not because your work devalues the work here on this site as a whole, is misanthropy personified, puts your characters in over-the-top god mode and your views on humanity, morality, spirituality and religion are disturbing. No, it's because people like me are just HATERS.
In fact, that's the only reason ANYBODY could hate ANYTHING. Just look at other scenarios this applies to!
"Hey, you shouldn't play in traffic."
"BAH, you just hatin' cuz you didn't think of it first-OH DEAR GOD!"
CRAKKA-KRASSSH!
"Hey, you shouldn't eat so much food so fast!"
"Oh! GLMPH. You just hatin'!...GRUGGHMFH...cuz you ain't gettin' food like-URK! H-heart attack! GAAHHHKK!"
3997776
Love and tolerate!
3986569 Did you forget about the tablet she took? I'm just surprised her soul if still intact.
That being said, Fluttershy is insane.
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At the least, there's the joy of watching the trainwreck that is her stories. Like I.D., which is my hallmark for 'Wait, did someone SERIOUSLY just write that?'
Also on topically, still wondering when we get the flashback to the Royal Sisters! Or presumed flashback
4005132
No, no. The ROOM gives me joy because it's so incompetent and ridiculous. Her work is so...HATEFUL I cannot enjoy it even in an ironic fashion. This story comes off similarly. It's so hateful towards the series and the characters so OOC, the scenarios so contrived, none of it is enjoyable.
4006303
I suppose to each their own! I like this because I know it's just kink, and I find ID hilarious because it's so utterly absurd that laughter is the only remedy.
That snake deserves to have his stomach blown open from Twilight. The lazy prick failed to eat her properly. He should have choked the life out of her while breaking every bone in her body before the big gulp like any snake would, but no, he didn't. He even ate her from the wrong side.
So here is what I think should have happen. Twilight blasts open the dumb snake, gets eaten by something else in the forest, rinse and repeat as much as possible (I like to see her get eaten more). Until finally, she makes it back to Ponyville covered in blood and guts only to find everyone dead from their own crazy death sequences. Then asteroid falls and world is destroyed, the end.
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If the author wasn't an admitted misanthrope...I mean, it's right there under his name on the side bar...maybe I could just enjoy it too, but since it's not meant to be so over the top it's funny...and since it's not, y'know, actually so over the top it IS funny...
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We'll have to disagree on the over the top part! It's just too absurd for me to take seriously
Is twilight gona merge with that snake like those ponies with pinkie? would be nice.
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Snakes don't break the bones of their prey. Also, I agree with Fluttershy. The snake deserves to keep his meal.
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I would want the snake and Twilight to become like a naga... And eat Fluttershy... But that's just me...
Oh my
Spiderloo is my new waifu
Soooo, am I like the only one wondering if Pinkie's gonna sprout a horn now? She did just eat a unicorn and got wings from eating a pegasus...
Dude, Pinkie's gonna be the next alicorn princess if that happens...
Not exactly sure how I feel about that.
But dude, what if she got, like, extra wings and horns from every pegasus/unicorn she eats? Then she could be just like all of those bad fan-characters I've seen littering dA!
PS: Why the fuck am I saying dude? I never do that...
When's the next chapter
3988596 when's the next chapter
When's the nex chapter
3988596 Well you already got Blueblood, so the only others that come to mind are a couple of bullies. I think you know who I mean.