A trip to the past will spark a revelation within one of Equestria's greatest unicorns, and during her time their, she will give birth to two of the greatest beings the world has ever known.
Interesting, now all she needs to do is meet Private Patsy and Chancellor Pudding Head and the cast of the Hearth's Warming Eve will be complete, maybe meeting the rest of the play's cast will help her figure things out better.
Though I don't understand why Twilight is just realizing she'd be immortal, the way I was reading it, it seemed like she still had a definite end along with the other princesses
============= Spell checks here, if you don't mind There's two M's in Immortal, though I guess you're fine because immortalless isn't anymore of a word than what you currently have up there
“He knows I’m and alicorn,” said Twilight immediately
They both nodded, “Yes,” said Star Swirl, “your outburst. Now, I can gage from your reaction that you have no knowledge of the three pillars.”
I looked it up and discovered this is actually a very old word, though most people would probably be more familiar with Gauge. You even used it later on
“No…I will not here this, I have heard enough,” said Star Swirl
hear
But this presented its own problem, for if she was immortal, where was she in the future. Even with how carful she could be, it was highly unlikely that she could stay out of even the grasp of a legend or two
careful
Comment posted by Futile Task deleted Jul 16th, 2014
4702831Well the way I read the passage, it seemed to me like the princesses were slowly killing themselves by taking up the responsibility to manage the sun and the moon
4702846 It is a mystery. Celestia and Luna did for a few or many millennia (and Celestia did for a thousand years by herself) the same thing that killed off the entire previous race of allicorns. They seem to do it easily and naturally. There is probably a spoiler in that question somewhere ...
The pacing is definitely a bit better in this chapter, though it's just once scene. It's good to see Twilight trying to deal with the discrepancies between 'modern' history (which was obviously significantly filtered) and what actually happened. What I'm looking forward to is how Twilight balances what she knows/thinks is supposed to happen with what she's compelled to do by actual situations.
4760278 i think that's what the writer is hinting at, or she's got Luna and Twi is Celestia but Platinum is carrying Celestia or Luna, the writer did point this out in the story, this is what i think it is Platinum is carrying Celestia, Twi is Luna mom, Twi did state that Clover was with Hurricane and Twi just offered to sleep with him,
Well this will be interesting So far the story seams very legit Great world building How ever I have a hard time believing Platinum is carrying Celestia and Twi will be carrying Luna being they have always been sisters I have reason to believe that Twi will be the mother of Celestia and Luna While Platinum is carrying Blueblood's line I WANT MOAR SOON! If that is alright with you
Please tell me this fic doesn't have that one part of doctor who that is impossible: having a situation where you go back in time and you cause your original birth, which is impossible, but swapped qith her giving birth to tia and Luna...
i know i commented on this chapter before and i am sorry to bug you i was just wondering if by any chance you know when you might post next chapter i understand that life can get in the way and i don't want to rash you or anything i just asking if you don't know that is okay and take your time on making a grate chapter
6294851 they dont take into account that you have possibly many other stories to write for im not sure how many havent checked besides ive seen stories go like almost 3 years between updates
Interesting, now all she needs to do is meet Private Patsy and Chancellor Pudding Head and the cast of the Hearth's Warming Eve will be complete, maybe meeting the rest of the play's cast will help her figure things out better.
hmmm...
Story feels a bit rushed, but it's still rather good.
Yay, a new chapter in a timely fashion
Though I don't understand why Twilight is just realizing she'd be immortal, the way I was reading it, it seemed like she still had a definite end along with the other princesses
=============
Spell checks here, if you don't mind
There's two M's in Immortal, though I guess you're fine because immortalless isn't anymore of a word than what you currently have up there
I looked it up and discovered this is actually a very old word, though most people would probably be more familiar with Gauge. You even used it later on
hear
careful
Wow this seems like a good story, I think I might keep an eye on this. Keep up the good work!
4702753
She is not just realizing she is immortal, rather, she is coming to grips with it, if only partially. And what do you mean by definite end?
4702831 Well the way I read the passage, it seemed to me like the princesses were slowly killing themselves by taking up the responsibility to manage the sun and the moon
4702846
It is a mystery.
Celestia and Luna did for a few or many millennia (and Celestia did for a thousand years by herself) the same thing that killed off the entire previous race of allicorns. They seem to do it easily and naturally.
There is probably a spoiler in that question somewhere ...
Well that was a nice world builder.
Given how your stories go I wouldn't be surprised if she ends up giving discord permission to mess things up for the sake of continuity.
The pacing is definitely a bit better in this chapter, though it's just once scene. It's good to see Twilight trying to deal with the discrepancies between 'modern' history (which was obviously significantly filtered) and what actually happened. What I'm looking forward to is how Twilight balances what she knows/thinks is supposed to happen with what she's compelled to do by actual situations.
MORE!!!!! Please
Now that's done great chapter but seriously PA-LEASE update very soon because it makes my day when a story I like has updated
4760278 i think that's what the writer is hinting at, or she's got Luna and Twi is Celestia but Platinum is carrying Celestia or Luna, the writer did point this out in the story, this is what i think it is Platinum is carrying Celestia, Twi is Luna mom, Twi did state that Clover was with Hurricane and Twi just offered to sleep with him,
Well this will be interesting So far the story seams very legit Great world building How ever I have a hard time believing Platinum is carrying Celestia and Twi will be carrying Luna being they have always been sisters I have reason to believe that Twi will be the mother of Celestia and Luna While Platinum is carrying Blueblood's line I WANT MOAR SOON! If that is alright with you
Please, for all that is Pony, say this will continue.
I, too, would rather like to see where this story goes.
Please tell me this fic doesn't have that one part of doctor who that is impossible: having a situation where you go back in time and you cause your original birth, which is impossible, but swapped qith her giving birth to tia and Luna...
5121578
I don't entirely understand your question, but I can tell you she does not orchestrate the events which lead to her own birth.
5121578
As for the rest, I cant say due to spoilers.
5121685
I meant anything like it, like, she causes Luna's and celestia's birth, it wouldn't make sense like doctor who.
A god or goddess in doctor who went back in time to cause thier birth, which is impossible if you were never born in the first place.
You better keep writing this or I will find you
i know i commented on this chapter before and i am sorry to bug you i was just wondering if by any chance you know when you might post next chapter i understand that life can get in the way and i don't want to rash you or anything i just asking if you don't know that is okay and take your time on making a grate chapter
UPDATE PLEASE
Update! Please! I won't do anything for it because that is stupid. But, update, please!
Is there going to be more I so love this story 10 out of 10
Please say it is not dead
Please update I really love this
I think we can say that this story is dead
6294775
why do you guys always assume the worst, I just take a while to update things, god.
6294851 This normally happens to good storys when the date of the last chapter was over a year ago.... I've seen it happen everywhere lol...
6294851 they dont take into account that you have possibly many other stories to write for im not sure how many havent checked besides ive seen stories go like almost 3 years between updates
read the story I like it a lot, I love twist in which twilight end up being the mother of her mentor in some way....I do hope this story get update