Wow, this been up for a while and no one has commented yet?
Anyway, great chapter!~~~ Is it a problem if I tell you the choice I made in the poll?
I chose Minuette (Colgate)! While not a famous character from Canterlot, she still first appeared in Canterlot. Personally, the choice was kind of hard to make...
Another excellent chapter. I can't wait to read the next one! (I'm personally hoping for a Royal Guard gang bang, but whatever you want to do is fine.)
Quick question: How would I go about making one of those polls like you included at the start of this chapter? That seems like a great way to get feedback. I'd appreciate any information you have regarding online polls.
It lets you design your own poll like this. And when people answer the poll, it outputs the results to a spreadsheet (which works exactly like Excel, ofc):
that was a good chapter but, i have only two problems with it. 1) it was a bit anti-climactic personally, after all the effort fluttershy put into trying to hide her dong they only go at it once? especially since rainbow is her oldest and best friend i would have thought at least 2-3 times or an all-nighter personally. 2) rainbow's an athelete she can handle more than once :D
1538582 I don't want the sex to feel like it's excessive. Two sex scenes seems to be the magic number for me; any more than that and it just feels like it's being dragged out.
Well, nice to see the story updated again, just read it after a few weeks of playing around (skimmed it before). Is the link invalid now and the poll closed? Had hoped to vote, see what sort of antics Futashy could get into with certain pony/ponies if they had won. Assuming it's next chapter even.
I'm wondering if Celestia's plan is to keep Fluttershy permanently as a herm, if she's aware of what the naughty shy pegasus has been doing during her week-long 'punishment', if it could still be called that at this point. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Celestia.png As I think that was her at the end, not to mention the invite to the Canterlot party at end of the last one. If not in a way, the potion that Zecora gave Fluttershy changed her anyways since it was with a magical enchantment to begin with, either way.
It does kinda irk me at times that I think ponies refer to having someone close with, yet they can sleep with others... but not familiar with your other works, if this is a recurring theme. Like Rainbow mentioned herself with Soarin' here and Fluttershy mentioned herself with Big Mac in the chapter with him and AJ. If they can have multiple partners or casual sex, while in a relationship. Just something been kinda confused on a little bit, over the course of this story.
Anyway, this was a good and silly, but fun chapter. With Rainbow trying to uncover Fluttershy's secret, even if she did maybe act a bit OOC, but I know she is acting in a bedroom manner here and such. Some nice sexy funtimes between the two long-time pegasus friends, though now sorta wondering who else you have in store, with the few days remaining for course of this story. Hopefully, will be someone fun, looking forward to next chapter soon, I guess!
Yesssssss. This story is awesome when you need some good old-fashioned clop, just the way it used to be. It leaves you feeling like such a perv afterwards, though, but that's purposeful.
You know, I can't help but think that it's funny (but totally in-character) that Fluttershy is concerned about being seen as a pervert... even though it's obvious by this point that everypony in Equestria is already having sex with EVERYPONY ELSE.
And I know a clopfic is the wrong place to go looking for consistent logic, but something just kind of sticks in my mind. It's established that Fluttershy's futa-wang is a bit smaller than average compared to a stallion's, but at the same time there are frequent comments about how big it is. So, shouldn't all the mares simply be thinking that it's a bit on the small side? What ELSE are they comparing it to, if not males of their own species? Unless it's common for them to get it on with males of OTHER species.
4188100 Xenophilia? Gentlemen for Mares? The Dark Apprentice? Jungle Fever? A Stud About Ponyville? TWBHW? There's a bunch, and these are just the clopfics on my favorited and following list. This one is a little more cloppier than most, and I think the only pure futa, but that can be a good or bad thing depending on where you're coming from.
4261635 This is certainly has more clop than most clopfics with a story, and it takes itself a lot less seriously than other such fics, to the point where it's starting to sound really quite ridiculous. I'd say it's on the borderline between clop with a plot (no pun intended) and clop for the sake of clop.
Has anyone carried on writing the Dark Apprentice yet. Someone should really do that, it was a great story.
Edited and uploaded from an iPad remote desktop app, so if there are any errors, tell me.
Wow, this been up for a while and no one has commented yet?
Anyway, great chapter!~~~ Is it a problem if I tell you the choice I made in the poll?
I chose Minuette (Colgate)! While not a famous character from Canterlot, she still first appeared in Canterlot.
Personally, the choice was kind of hard to make...
A Canterlot Pone? FLEUR!
Excellent work schmaltz.
Mmmf.
This is a thing to wake up to.
...You sly author, you.
luna?
oh and no one comments because their scared that other bronies will dislike their taste in clop
Hell yeah! New chapter!
Totally should have octavia on that poll. great so far.
Another excellent chapter. I can't wait to read the next one! (I'm personally hoping for a Royal Guard gang bang, but whatever you want to do is fine.)
Quick question: How would I go about making one of those polls like you included at the start of this chapter? That seems like a great way to get feedback. I'd appreciate any information you have regarding online polls.
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It's a feature of Google Drive:
i.imgur.com/DQ8Pv.png
It lets you design your own poll like this. And when people answer the poll, it outputs the results to a spreadsheet (which works exactly like Excel, ofc):
i.imgur.com/xDh8L.png
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Thanks for the help! Feel free to vote in my first poll!
that was a good chapter but, i have only two problems with it.
1) it was a bit anti-climactic personally, after all the effort fluttershy put into trying to hide her dong they only go at it once? especially since rainbow is her oldest and best friend i would have thought at least 2-3 times or an all-nighter personally.
2) rainbow's an athelete she can handle more than once :D
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I don't want the sex to feel like it's excessive. Two sex scenes seems to be the magic number for me; any more than that and it just feels like it's being dragged out.
Wow! That's a hot chapter, especially for Fluttershy!
Keep on going!
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i can respect that.
ANOTHER AMAZING ONE....PERFECT IMAGES TO FALL ASLEEP TOO!!!!! TAKE SOME ROYAL CANTERLOT VOICE AND BRING ME MOAR!!!!!!!
Well, nice to see the story updated again, just read it after a few weeks of playing around (skimmed it before). Is the link invalid now and the poll closed? Had hoped to vote, see what sort of antics Futashy could get into with certain pony/ponies if they had won. Assuming it's next chapter even.
I'm wondering if Celestia's plan is to keep Fluttershy permanently as a herm, if she's aware of what the naughty shy pegasus has been doing during her week-long 'punishment', if it could still be called that at this point. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Celestia.png As I think that was her at the end, not to mention the invite to the Canterlot party at end of the last one. If not in a way, the potion that Zecora gave Fluttershy changed her anyways since it was with a magical enchantment to begin with, either way.
It does kinda irk me at times that I think ponies refer to having someone close with, yet they can sleep with others... but not familiar with your other works, if this is a recurring theme. Like Rainbow mentioned herself with Soarin' here and Fluttershy mentioned herself with Big Mac in the chapter with him and AJ. If they can have multiple partners or casual sex, while in a relationship. Just something been kinda confused on a little bit, over the course of this story.
Anyway, this was a good and silly, but fun chapter. With Rainbow trying to uncover Fluttershy's secret, even if she did maybe act a bit OOC, but I know she is acting in a bedroom manner here and such. Some nice sexy funtimes between the two long-time pegasus friends, though now sorta wondering who else you have in store, with the few days remaining for course of this story. Hopefully, will be someone fun, looking forward to next chapter soon, I guess!
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Yesssssss. This story is awesome when you need some good old-fashioned clop, just the way it used to be. It leaves you feeling like such a perv afterwards, though, but that's purposeful.
i was going to add this to my reading log for school but then i thought better of it
You know, I can't help but think that it's funny (but totally in-character) that Fluttershy is concerned about being seen as a pervert... even though it's obvious by this point that everypony in Equestria is already having sex with EVERYPONY ELSE.
And I know a clopfic is the wrong place to go looking for consistent logic, but something just kind of sticks in my mind. It's established that Fluttershy's futa-wang is a bit smaller than average compared to a stallion's, but at the same time there are frequent comments about how big it is. So, shouldn't all the mares simply be thinking that it's a bit on the small side? What ELSE are they comparing it to, if not males of their own species? Unless it's common for them to get it on with males of OTHER species.
I like how this is the only clopfic that has a storyline. But later I shall continue, for now I have to go do some stupid ass work..
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Xenophilia? Gentlemen for Mares? The Dark Apprentice? Jungle Fever? A Stud About Ponyville? TWBHW? There's a bunch, and these are just the clopfics on my favorited and following list. This one is a little more cloppier than most, and I think the only pure futa, but that can be a good or bad thing depending on where you're coming from.
4261635 This is certainly has more clop than most clopfics with a story, and it takes itself a lot less seriously than other such fics, to the point where it's starting to sound really quite ridiculous. I'd say it's on the borderline between clop with a plot (no pun intended) and clop for the sake of clop.
Has anyone carried on writing the Dark Apprentice yet. Someone should really do that, it was a great story.