When Cinny published her first book, she hadn't expected it to be so popular or to find herself in the position of being herdmother to one of the ponies she wrote about. There are some sins a colourful hat just can't cover.
4009451 Well, firstly there's the general appeal of the whole thing. Twilight might not be as helpless as she's making out, but she might enjoy pretending she is.
But, secondly, this is something written by Cinnamon Swift and a pegasus. She might be familiar with magic in the abstract, but it's not necessarily something she'd think of.
4009824 I had assumed from the context that Twilight was genuinely worried that AJ was about to hurt Rainbow, so I don't think she'd continue to act helpless in that senario. I also assumed that AJ had interupted Rainbow and Twilight, so wouldn't it have been Rainbow that tied her up? Just a bit confusing to me here.
4012624 Well, it's emulating a romance novel, too...and seeing as how the story in romance novels are mostly just a vessel for the sexual fantasies, it comes without surprise that romance novels aren't especially known for having solid quality writing in terms of plot and character development...
In all, I think you did a good job emulating that aspect of the genre. The excerpts read like they're from a decently written stock romance novel—it does seem to have some plot, but anyone who reads actual quality literature will be able to tell it's a merely flimsy excuse to write loosely-affiliated sex scenes featuring a consistent set of characters.
Right!
I'm actually starting to wish this was a full story all its own.
The last page? Say it isn't so!
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I know, right?
Cinna, DO EET!
Why is Twilight restrained by a rope? She has magic, she should be able to get free easily.
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Well, firstly there's the general appeal of the whole thing. Twilight might not be as helpless as she's making out, but she might enjoy pretending she is.
But, secondly, this is something written by Cinnamon Swift and a pegasus. She might be familiar with magic in the abstract, but it's not necessarily something she'd think of.
Or maybe AJ is just that good with knots.
4009824 I had assumed from the context that Twilight was genuinely worried that AJ was about to hurt Rainbow, so I don't think she'd continue to act helpless in that senario. I also assumed that AJ had interupted Rainbow and Twilight, so wouldn't it have been Rainbow that tied her up? Just a bit confusing to me here.
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The rope must have been enchanted with "Drama-Preserving Handicap" magic! How insidious...
I am really liking this story more and more. You are doing a great job.
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Well, that's pretty much it.
I never intended these 'pages' to be wholly serious, after all.
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Well, it's emulating a romance novel, too...and seeing as how the story in romance novels are mostly just a vessel for the sexual fantasies, it comes without surprise that romance novels aren't especially known for having solid quality writing in terms of plot and character development...
In all, I think you did a good job emulating that aspect of the genre. The excerpts read like they're from a decently written stock romance novel—it does seem to have some plot, but anyone who reads actual quality literature will be able to tell it's a merely flimsy excuse to write loosely-affiliated sex scenes featuring a consistent set of characters.
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That's something you should ask show!Twilight.
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You're a meanie pants for making these segments so short.