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Back in February, I knew that I left some unfinished business, as the participants in the very last Slates never got what had been promised to them when they participated. I don't think anyone would have blamed me if I had left all that alone forever, as it looked like was going to happen. But I'm a bit of a completionist, and so wanted to get around to giving this whole endeavor a bit of final closure. I just never expected to not get around to it for so long, sorry about that!
So here are the very last fruits of an experiment that ran its course.
Luna Slate XIV Entries
Entry 1: Walk A Thousand Nights
Nominator: Bicyclette
Author: Sunlight Rays
- MLP: FiM
- Drama
- Sad
Celestia sent Luna to the Moon. The price of her neglect continues to haunt her.Entry 2: Too Much Trixie in That Mirror
Nominator: SparklingTwilight
Author: SparklingTwilight
- MLP: FiM
- Comedy
Trixie buys a mirror / Trixie loves her mirror / Discord teaches Twilight a lessonEntry 3: The Night Before Wednesday
Nominator: Scribblestick
Author: Scribblestick
- MLP: FiM
- Random
- Slice of Life
Will Fluttershy learn the true meaning of Wednesday?Entry 4: Celestia and the Mild Inconvenience
Nominator: daOtterGuy
Author: daOtterGuy
- MLP: FiM
- Comedy
- Random
Perfect Order has been slighted by Princess Celestia and will now mildly inconvenience her in vengeance.Celestia Slate XV Entries
Entry 1: A Little Bittle Of Sunshine
Nominator: daOtterGuy
Author: River Road
- MLP Gen 5
- Slice of Life
Before Izzy, there was another pony who did his best to make the town a little bit brighter.Entry 2: Harmony Terminated Us All
Nominator: SparklingTwilight
Author: SparklingTwilight
- MLP: FiM
- MLP Gen 5
- Drama
- Sci-Fi
- Tragedy
"Harmony doomed us. I killed Cozy Glow (although she was always a robot). If anycreature remains, heed this warning." -Former Princess Twilight Sparkle.Cadance Slate VI Entries
Entry 1: Killing All the Right Ponies
Nominator: Bicyclette
Author: ObabScribbler
- MLP: FiM
- Romance
- Drama
- Tragedy
An Apple family member comes to Ponyville to make angry demands of Princess Twilight in the middle of a personal crisis.Entry 2: Fluttershy, Royal Game Warden (?)
Nominator: Bicyclette
Author: JimmySlimmy
- MLP: FiM
- Adventure
- Comedy
"She needs bits? I'll just make her the Game Warden. Not like we're gonna need one of those any time soon!" – Twilight Sparkle, clueless.And one more thing before I go: A list of participants and the following final Comment Rating posts.
Thank you so much to everyone who has participated! Goodbye now!
Cadance Slate V Comment Rating
Entry 1: Change, Inc.
Entry 2: Sparkle
Results
Entry 1: Change, Inc.
Winner: N/A
Entry 2: Sparkle
Winner: ReedHoarse
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This was the cutest! I basically spent the whole time reading it hugging myself and grinning.
Everything flows really well, and I was cheering at all of the main character's little successes and bits of progress.
The tone you have going on is basically how I imagine it would be if the show itself dealt with the subject of trans people, a reflection of real world struggles but in a fundamentally caring and supportive setting. With the largest obstacle being the main character's internalised issues and dysphoria, it allows the story to focus on her inner struggles.
At the beginning of the story we basically know how this will end, so there's an immediate dramatic irony in this line. It becomes clear quite quickly that what she means by this is that the element of magic should have been a woman, which it turns out she is.
The disappointment is freaking tangible here. The conflict of the story is one of knowing herself, of trying to find that clarity she lost. She's disappointed that she is who she is, and it's not like at the end of the story she's someone different. She just knows herself better, and has that clarity she once had.
The main character is so frustratingly close to that clarity all through the story, blatantly holding herself to different standards than she does anyone else. I feel like Fluttershy in Chapter 7, "I just wanted to grab your shoulders and shake you!"
The double-think, the doubts, and the 'oh, well if it's me it's bad and wrong', ring painfully true, and are also so Twilight: this is the Twilight who threw a town into chaos because she thought her loving, understanding teacher whom she'd known for years would be mad at her for handing in her friendship homework late.
She sums it up nicely in Chapter 3:
I love this line, because that's it, that's the whole story. And it's great.
Chapter 2 is the standout for me. You combine Season 1 doesn't-understand-friendship Twilight so well with trans Twilight, and the dramatic irony of knowing what's actually going on from the episode versus what's going on in Twilight's catastrophing mind is used to great effect. I think I might have wanted more chapters like this before she came to understand herself, but that's more because I was enjoying the story and the feelings it evoked enough that I wanted it to continue more than that it felt rushed.
I saw in the comments you're planning on doing a sequel, and I'm interested to see where you go with this!
Celestia Slate XIV Comment Rating
Entry 1: The Unicorn Owl
Entry 2: Pedestal of Stone
Results
Entry 1: The Unicorn Owl
Winner: SparklingTwilight
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A hilarious few lines!
An interesting survey of the Mane Six's reactions to a situation--a tried and true structure that works well here.
That said, I am not sure why most of them really care that much about the situation (sure there's a reward, which sets things in motion...but even a line or two about why each thought they needed the reward money could have added context and some other joke zingers [if there already are lines about it, apologies and I can revise this comment!]). Still, the concept is amusing. Fluttershy's non-interest was a nice surprise that elevated the humor with an unexpected yet reasonable twist.
I was not expecting the ending twist. I had expected (until they showed up) that due to the presaging of their presence, the Crusaders were going to turn out to have stuck something to Owliscious. I wasn't expecting something unexpected to come completely out of nowhere--while that's accepted comedy, I'd have preferred some lampshading about Luna. Still, it was amusing.
Thank you for sharing!
Entry 2: Pedestal of Stone
Winner: daOtterGuy
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Howdy, hi!
Gosh, you hit me right in the feels with this one. Glad I took the recommendation from Mush and read this one. I love me sad fics with no obvious stab to the heart, just a low pull as you realize everything is falling apart and that ends on that bittersweet note. I was genuinely worried going through that Sweetie wouldn't have let go, but she did and found a glimmer of something new to do. The just slow build-up to the climax was solid and the payoff was worth every word to read.
It also helps that most people won't write this kind of slow degradation of friendship. It happens all the time, but you don't see stories tackle it. Thsi one handled it perfectly.
Anyways, a fantastic read, thank you for this one!
An unexpected update. Neat--thank you!