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"as they bullet had remained" as the bullet
"years twitching again" ears twitching again
Christmas was a few days ago but I'm not going to complain about it, I've been wondering when the next chapter will be out. With the number of test subject, I'm starting to believe she will soon get caught with it.
Also, wonder what's happening with Pinkie.
I don't understand why it hurts so much to see an Old Derpy.
I must say I felt a little confused at the start of the chapter, due to the ellipsis of time and moving scenes from New Appleloosa to Appleloosa,
Glad you left the cliffhanger of Angel's chat with Jack, can't wait for the next chapter now and the (hopefully) incoming conclusion of Arc 1.
Also happy holidays Borsuq
I have bingeread this today and, boy oh boy, do I need more :D Great story so far, can't wait to see what happens in the next chapters!
I am hereby boycotting this story and banning it from all FoE groups since other people dared to read and comment on the newest chapter before I had a change!
I've been meaning to read this story for some time, but I've always had something else to do. Another story, something else, or I'd just forget. So when I saw it on the front page the other day, looking for something to read, I decided to finally give it a go.
Before now, I've read a few other FO:E stories, finished or otherwise. Not all of the more well known ones, like Pink Eyes or Murky, but certainly the original and of course Project Horizons, among a few others. It is with that in mind I feel confident in saying that no one, - living or dead; real or fictional - has terrified me quite like Angel with the possible exception of Blackjack.
What she does is terrifying, even with her protagonist protections. Because just like Blackjack, I have been in her head, learning what drives her. She doesn't just believe she's doing the right thing, she knows it, regardless of what others think. She knows her line in the sand, the lines she won't cross, just like Blackjack. Plus, simpler things like appearance line up. Red eyes, white fur; really, just dye her mane and tail black & red, she could make for a passable Blackjack. Lastly, they both seem to have a conspiracy on their hands, and I know enough to recognize The Institute when I see it, regardless of the form it'll take.
But despite these similarities, Angel is so different. She doesn't hate herself. In fact, she seems to be rather fond of herself. She is also rather chaste in comparison. She can't fight very well, so I'm going to be expecting a lot more smooth talking and the like. Angel is absolutely a smart pony, after all. As mentioned, her morals appear flexible, and she is far more willing to work with people she considers pretty terrible. Perhaps as much if not more than the 'experimenting on people in my basement' thing is her manipulative streak. I have also seen the 'voices in the protagonist's' head thing, though the Pinkie and Fluttershy are very different from the other case I've seen so far.
Also, she overexplains things like I am doing right now!
The point is, much as she scares me, Angel very much has my attention. and by extention your story Borsuq. I assure you, I'm making these comparisons oniy with the best intentions. I adore Blackjack, and a FO:E character inviting those same feelings of uncertainty that only time can answer - even time after the journey is done - is so awesome. I'll be along for the ride.
One last thing before I shut up: since Watcher brought it up last chapter, I think I have a theory on Angel's virtue. In case I'm right, I'll be spoilering it:
I believe that Angel holds the virtue of Generosity. For one: her actions. She is giving her services to the ponies of the Wasteland because she wants to help others get better, where so often the message in these stories is for the protagonists to do better for themselves too. She won't take life directly, on purpose at least, only give It in the form of her healing. Plus, insisting she pay Ditzy for the goods she was given last chapter.
More importantly are the very, very many similarities and allusions I've been recognizing to Rarity. Manipulative? Check. The 'Art of the Flesh' and working with surgery as though she were a seamstress. Check. 'Darling / Sweeting?' Check check. White coat? Confidence in appearance? Enjoyment of luxury? Making 'Watcher' stutter like that? If I just described these traits, someone might very well say it's Rarity!
With the Element of Generosity never having been revealed in Horizons or the original - because it's dedinitely not Charity - that's my conclusion. She already has a friendship with Ditzy, who is Laughter, and she's in Appleoosa where she is in a ripe position to meet Velvet - Kindness - and by extention Calamity - Loyalty. I forget if there's an Honesty ever named, and the singing, angry vat baby of Magic is another story, but certainly this all doesn't have to happen during this story's main plot. This could all be epilogue stuff, since Littlepip hasn't left Stable 2 yet.
That's just my theory though. Right or wrong, I don't mind either way. I'm happy be along for the ride, and look forward to what's in store for Angel next.
"it would appear good if I already knew what Cutter was about to say"
"it would appear bad if I already knew what Cutter was about to say"?
"Her eyes moved from one slave to another"
"Her eyes moved from one slaver to another"?
"I guess, Fluttershy replied, uncertainly"
"I guess, Fluttershy replied, uncertainly"?
"Question, should I thank Somber and Heartshine for their stories even if the particular chapters don't have anything referencing their stories? I mean, I don't mind thanking them for their stories everytime, I do enjoy them that much, but I'm not sure if it's not annoying to the readers "
Well, it's not annoying me, at least, and it seems like it could still be relevant for giving you general inspiration.
I hope your Hearth's Warming was happy too, and that your New Year will be. :)
Yippee!! Update with my favorite Dr.
Holy Sweet God Damn, I just noticed the length of the chapters so far. This story will be longer than Project Horizons. Not that I mind, every single word of PH was pretty much excellent and this story is about as good, if not a bit better (PH might seem a bit too edgy with the whole team of most broken ponies of the Wasteland saving the Most Cursed City of the Planet from the eldritch monstrosity, legions of almost undead cyber-zebra clones [commanded by actualy undead Legate] AND the literal god damn piece of Moon falling on it AT THE SAME TIME. I know, I know, it was not really like that, but the satire is imporant).
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Thanks^^
Guess you will have to wait and see ;p
Why would something be happening with Pinkie? :blinks innocently:
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Well, not old, more like dead and decayed. Then again, she is over 200 years old, so...
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Yeah, I figured there might be some issues with that part, especially after how the previous chapter had started similarly, moving from Rock Farms to New Appleloosa and recounting what had been happening. Fortunately, this should be the last time this happens for a while.
To be honest, I was originally going to include that part in this chapter, but for a few reasons, one of them being that I wanted to get this chapter done before the end of the year, made me decide to move it to it's own chapter As for wrapping up arc 1, there are still a few things that need to happen before that... hopefully will get it done in 2019, buuuut I doubt that
Thanks, they were great, been to Greece to visit my family^^
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Always glad to have a new reader^^ I'm happy to know that you're enjoying this story and I hope I'll continue to entertain you^^
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Oh wow, I can't even tell whether you are being serious or not
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Always happy to get a new reader^^
Would you believe me when I say that it wasn't until I was writing chapter 2 or 3 did I realize that by making her an albino I had made her almost identical to Blackjack? Oh well, at least I will be able to make fun of this at some point
I'm not really sure if saying that Angel is rather chaste when in comparison to Blackjack is correct, seeing how it took her 11 chapters to get into bed with somepony (not to mention that if you wanna get literal, she was already in bed with Derpy by chapter 6, only they were actually sleeping)
Not gonna comment on your guess
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Thanks^^ Actually, that first one was supposed to be "it wouldn't look good" Hate how often this mistake happens...
Ah, I see, thanks^^
They were, spend them with my family in Greece, and thanks^^ Hope yours were too^^
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Well, David Tennant will be disappointed (Though personally I like Peter Capaldi better )
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Oh, you can bet, I expect this story will be about as long as Project Horizons at LEAST And looking at my update speed, I sincerely hope I won't die before I finish it... crap, this must be what George Martin must feel like...
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Yep^^ Actually, I was originally planning to have them cameo in my story when Angel would get to New Appleloosa, but I quickly dropped that plan
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To be honest, i was disheartened when i noticed Anywhere but Here got deleted. It was such a great story, yet not only was it left without a great conclusion, it was also wiped off the face of the planet.
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Banned I say, Banned!
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"Thanks^^"
You're welcome!
"Actually, that first one was supposed to be "it wouldn't look good" Hate how often this mistake happens..."
Ah, heh, sorry. :)
"Ah, I see, thanks^^"
No problem. :)
"They were, spend them with my family in Greece, and thanks^^ Hope yours were too^^"
Ah, good, and I think so, aye, thanks. :)
Both… I am definitely both… Although me being hungry when the episode happened is a much better explanation to be honest.
Nitpicks:
"trotting around the mattress where the dead body of beige colored mare lied" missing an a, and I am pretty sure it is laid
" I had little doubt that I would be able to get from him the information I want" wanted
"and sent a group under Apple Core’s command comprising of almost one third of slavers there were in Appleloosa " the
"with the holotope to open the Stable door and orders to capture the raiders" holotape
"it was merely the matter of assuring they will eat more nutritious food than the slavers usually give to their captors" would
"rising from floor and walking away" the
" pointing with her hoof into far distance." the
"when they heard her sarcastically call them ‘fine ladies and gentlecolts" There are really no need to explain it.
"slamming his hips against his which he held in his strong forelegs" I do not get what you are trying to explain here.
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Thanks^^ Will do^^
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Hm, well, we all have flaws
I think both with "a" and without it are correct. Also while it indeed should be laid, one could say that the body had "lied", as it wasn't Thorny Locust's ;p
True I suppose, but it doesn't sound as if it was too much explanation either I think
What I ment was that he was holding Pillory's hips as he was slamming his against them. ... I have no idea why I picked this to be the moment I go into more graphic description of sex
Thanks for your suggestions
nice chapter. Been a while without reading any but I loved to read again your fic
Hope all is well! Great work as always. Keep it up, my friend!
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