Cleanup on Aisle 1 · 7:29pm Jan 30th, 2018
So, the next chapter of This Nose is being edited and red pencil'd as we speak, so give it a bit and you'll have more Bean goodness to enjoy.
But! The main point of this particular post is to let you all know there are small changes being made to No Nose Knows, that delightful little story that got this party started.
Are there huge, world-altering edits?
No. I'm leaving all my flaws in there, because that's what I wrote. All major and minor plot points, be they good or bad, are still there and won't go anywhere.
What is changing is the nit-pick stuff that I didn't do very well on - commas, periods, the like. For example, in Chapter one, I used Mr. instead of Mister, and that is a no-no that I didn't know about at the time. (Georg, Moon Fire, Sipioc, and DQuirks had a field day the first time I let them edit my stuff. Red pencil lead everywhere.) There are also a few little phrase changes to clarify what I was trying to say, and for overall read-ability. So far, I've only cleaned up the first chapter, but I'm going to go through 2 - 24 and get those tidied up too, slowly but surely.
Is this some sort of blatant attempt to get you to read No Nose again? Of course not! How dare you think such a thing! But I do think I owe my readers a clean story, so far as it is possible. I want you to enjoy the story without getting distracted by the mistakes.
So enjoy! And make sure you tune in for chapter 7, when things will happen that you will like! (What? You thought there would be a spoiler under the black?)
Yay!!!!!! Cant wait for more
Well, it is called the 'Spoiler' button.
You're fucking with us.
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No, actually I'm just making the same ol' errors I always do, and then having to clean them up again.
Can't believe I spelled that wrong. My apologies.
yeesh, need to have my blog posts edited too. Can't trust myself.
good grief, I'll spell 'aisle' right eventually. That's just sad, really.
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Ok, just for you. One little spoiler.
“Next time then,” he offered with a kiss. He then put his hooves around her neck and smiled as he gazed into her eyes. “So what is on the agenda now?”
“Kissing and snuggling, if you keep this up,” Celestia cooed. “Officially, we are to meet with Shining and Cadence to begin our tour of the Empire now. Pinkie Pie is most likely with them, and I am fairly certain she will accompany us as well. You will be introduced to the crystal ponies by Princess Cadence, and then there will be time for you to go get lost in the crowd and to meet as many ponies as you can.”
“I bet I give the sergeants a fit whenever I do that.”
“They’re getting used to it, and they planned ahead for it this time,” Celestia replied. “They have secured the area, so it won’t be a problem for you to just wander around. I believe we will then take the tour proper, where we will be shown the major landmarks of the Empire, and that will conclude with a visit to the Crystal Heart.”
“Is it really as impressive as everypony makes it out to be?”
“It is,” Celestia replied with a peck for him. “I think you will quite enjoy both it and the day.”
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...I honestly was not expecting to actually get the spoilers, thanks!
No biggie. Content and flow was more my area go focus.
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Scoff. You've caught a few of those little sneaky commas.
Besides, it's good to have someone pay attention to the flow and tone. You've saved me from a few bad ideas.
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You are welcome!
Well then I must read this the 5. times!
4785361 *sniff* I've trained him well.
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Like to think I just gave them a bit of polish.
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Polish that was very much needed. :)
And here I thought the misspelling would be because it was going to be more of Quill and Wysteria — Clean-Up in Isle 1...
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Not quite, but there will be more.
I eagerly look forward to the next chapter. And that's coming from a guy who usually avoids MLP romance stories like the plague!
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I'm like a black hole over here. You went past the event horizon, now you're stuck.