The Mask Makes the Pony

Is now finished.

As stated, I don't know how I feel about it yet.

Comments

[Hodios]

I thoroughly enjoyed it.

[TheBruteKiller]

I'm excited to see what happens next.

[Dlaf rferg]

I was gonna put some long paragraph, but I'm not good at those, so let me just say this;

It was amazing. And I hope you enjoyed making it as much as I (we) enjoyed reading it.

[SolarChaser]

This story is by far my favorite out of all of your stories. (Chase verse included) I love how this deals with all of the facts of life, including death and specificlly how Flicker's mark is changing him. Keep up the good work kudzu.

[djthomp]

It was good.

[CharonX]

Personally I feel conflicted.

Happy because it was such a good story and I really enjoyed reading. Sad because this was the last chapter (for now). And grateful for all the time you spent writing it, so we can read and enjoy it. :)

[PropMaster]

Congratulations on finishing! It's never easy to put that tag on a story, especially one that you obviously enjoyed writing so much. But, all good stories must come to a close!

[Dragonblade722]

It was definatly a good start to a great story. If I'm can give one piece of constructive criticism, it would be to keep the story simple. You've done well so far, but there were times in your story I felt like you were adding a little to much. Things like adding deals with gods of death can complicate a story and lose the reader if added to much and to often. Identify the important elements to your story and bridge out from there. Your heroes Flicker, Piper and Hennessy, your villains contagion and the rats, and the main quest of saving Equestria. Focus of the relationship between your mains and their quest. That's where the strenthof your story is.

[kudzuhaiku]

4495634

Ah, but there is a much larger story also being told here.

[Dragonblade722]

4495639 That's fine. If you have a vision, go for it. I was only mentioning it in regard to how you dispense the information. When reading the story for the first time, I was legitimatly confused at first when Flicker "died" the first time and the events that followed. It took me rereading it to figure out what I missed and piece together what was going on. Again, I like your story.

[Autumn Colors Fall]

4495658 Just to make things clear, as I wasn't sure that this came through: The Mask Makes the Pony is a recent installment in a long running and highly inter-connected series of stories. Many of the characters and events have been referenced in other parts of the series, including the gods, and this story will undoubtedly lead into future installments. Keeping the story more focussed is generally a valid point, but I don't think it applies here where the intended experience is to create a network of stories.

If you haven't read the rest of the series, here is the group page and the first story in the series can be found here. If you have... ¯\_(ツ)_/¯

[QuarterKick]

Flicker stories are by far my favorite. I can't wait to see what you come up with for the next part!

[Nope Nope Nope]

I love you.