cleverpun's Concise Critiques #2 · 11:15pm Jan 18th, 2016
I go into every story hoping for something that will be worth commenting at (great) length on. Unfortunately, not everything warrants prolonged critiquing. Here is a selection of reviews/critiques, in two sentences or less.
Denial by Masterweaver: This presents an idea but doesn't attach a plot to it. Another one of those "stories" that would be less constrained and more interesting as either a longer story or an exploratory blog post.
Crumbling by alarajrogers: This presents the illogical and jumpy nature of dreams well. It doesn't really have a plot, though; it's more of an experimental scene than a story.
Ten of Cups by bahatumay: Has some nice descriptions and characterizes Trixie well. There is no real plot, however, and the ending tries too hard to impart meaning to it all.
Recurring Nightmare by Titanium Dragon: The story leading up to the twist feels rushed and dull. The twist itself is well-executed and interesting.
That is...
actually, yeah, that's pretty much accurate.
Thanks for reviewing it! I'm glad you thought I nailed Trixie (which would mean something totally different in another context).
The link for Recurring Nightmare is to one of the comments. Was that intentional?
3711295 Yes, since this review is a summary of said comment.