Sweet and Sour: A new scene has been added to the first chapter · 3:28am Aug 28th, 2015
Hey folks!
Okay, so...I've been picking away at the next chapter of Sweet and Sour here and there this week, and there's this scene I wrote for the next chapter that, upon reflection, actually makes more sense as a closing scene for the first chapter.
Therefore, I have decided to add the scene in question to the first chapter.
If you haven't read it yet at all, you don't need to worry about this. It's there now, so you won't miss out.
If you've already read it, you might want to go back and reread it for the new scene.
Alternatively, you can read the new scene right here, as I have helpfully appended it to this blog post below the double horizontal rule.
After dinner, Aria was lying in bed listening to angry punk rock and reading a magazine when Fluttershy walked in, carrying a bowl, a spoon, and a napkin. She glared up at her, rolled her eyes in disgust, then went back to her magazine.
Fluttershy reached out and plucked Aria's headphones off. "HEY!" Aria snarled.
"Here, this is for you," Fluttershy said, offering her the bowl and a smile. Aria frowned and looked inside. It was chocolate ice cream. "It isn't poisoned, there's no hot sauce or hairballs. It's just plain ice cream." Fluttershy smiled encouragingly. "To apologize for earlier. What I did to you was pretty mean."
Aria scowled, but accepted the bowl. She dipped the spoon in and took a tentative test bite. After nothing bad happened, she took another. "No chocolate syrup or whipped cream?" she asked.
"No, just plain ice cream," Fluttershy said. "Good girls get sundaes. You're not there yet. Not by a long shot."
Aria snorted. "So how much trouble did you get in wasting so much ice cream on that bullshit prank?"
"Oh, none at all," Fluttershy said. "That was my own personal ice cream I bought with my own pet-sitting money. It's mine to eat, share, or waste as I please."
Aria stopped eating and frowned. "You wasted ice cream you bought with your own money just to mess with me?"
"Let that be a lesson to you," Fluttershy said. She motioned to the ice cream in the bowl. "And this came from my own personal ice cream too. Friends do share, you know. Just...not razors and toothbrushes and things like that."
Aria ate some more ice cream, then looked up with a frown. "Why do you spend your own money on ice cream?" she asked. "Couldn't you just ask your mom and dad?"
"Oh, I could," Fluttershy said, "but I prefer to buy it myself, because I like the expensive kind. You see, I...I need my ice cream sundae every afternoon. It's kind of my thing, you know? Every day after school, I come home, I feed and water my animals, and I make myself one ice cream sundae. I've been doing that since I don't know how long." She paused. "I think...I started doing that right after Sunset Shimmer showed up at school. Back then, when she was a bully and, well..." Fluttershy trailed off. "That ice cream sundae was what I looked forward to every day. It was the one thing that was all for me, the one thing nobody could take away from me."
Aria paused. "And I tried to take it away from you," she said.
"And where did that get you?" Fluttershy asked with a smile.
Aria rolled her eyes and snorted. "I won't touch your ice cream without asking anymore," she said.
"Thank you." Fluttershy turned to leave.
Aria watched her, then finished the ice cream, shaking her head.
That's a nice finish scene.
read it in context, commenting here. I like the shift this scene provides from "Let the games begin..." to "Fluttershy is serious, but not needlessly malicious" so yay. Aria finishing out the thought is great.
That certainly shifts the tone of the story. For the better, I'd say. This isn't Fluttershy engaging in bitch-to-bitch combat so much as her using passive aggression as a teaching device. I think this will go a lot better in the long run.
3352958 Oh, there'll still be bitch-to-bitch combat. This IS the Equestria Girls version of Fluttershy, after all. She's...snippy.
Hmm... I see that other people are enjoying the way this changes the tone from Fluttershy being a complete dick to Fluttershy being a harsh teacher, but honestly I preferred the former. I wanted to see the plan backfire-instead of having Fluttershy reform Aria, Aria would corrupt Fluttershy.
Eh. Guess there's still a chance of that happening over the course of the story.