MOA: Major Retconning (Possibly) · 1:08pm Jun 18th, 2015
It's been a pretty long while since I made a blog about this story. What I'm about to discuss below revolves around a major plot detail from the latter part of the story, so if you're currently reading the story and haven't completed it, turn back now.
So, at the end of Chapter 21, Marcus's conflict with Honey Pot came to a head when she visited him late at night and tried to, well... take him. Looking back on how that scene was handled and the aftermath, it could have really been done better, and when I eventually get to that scene in MOA: Alternate Perspectives (which will be updated at the end of the month), it's gonna be really hard to execute the other perspectives because of how the scene was handled in the original.
This won't be a HUGE change that breaks the story, but this is something that I think will work to the story's benefit.
I'm almost 100% certain that I want to do a rewrite of this scene, and make adjustments to the beginning of the following chapter to accommodate said rewrite, but I'd still like to know your opinions. Did you like that scene the way it was? Do you think a change is needed? Like I said,
Do what you think is right, kid.
I think a rewrite would be for the best given what we have seen of Honey Pot from Alternate Perspectives.
If you could change the scene but keep the plot elements and character motivations the same then I say go for it.
I think a bit of a rewrite would be wise.
Eh. This is a matter when I feel guilty for finding sexual harassment funny when it's female-on-male.
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Rewrite is possible, but in the end you make the call on what's right.
i like it as is but it's your story
stayclassy
I'm curious as to what you would specifically change and I would make my choice as to whether or not a rewrite is needed.