Aug
25th
2014
So... the last few lost chapters for The Chase · 7:26pm Aug 25th, 2014
How were they?
I am kinda curious. There hasn't been much in the way of feedback or comments. And Thistle's chapter when fully combined is huge.
And I am sorta kinda neurotic and paranoid that perhaps they were not well received.
And if they weren't, what could I do better?
As with the other chapter involving Sparkler, I was shooting for gritty realism or something resembling it.
I'll return to something a bit more comedic in time, like the forthcoming ROPE chapter.
Or the long awaited and much requested Bucky, Bon Bon, and Lyra chapter.
And no, Bucky will never stick his penis into Bon Bon or Lyra.
Your most recent chapters of clop made me laugh.
It made me cry.
It made my right hand hurt a little.
And I'd like to think it made me a better man after reading it.
Last line:
On the subject, I liked it overall. I'm not all that stellar at feedback, I can only say whether I liked it or not, and, thus far, all your chapters have gotten a solid two hooves up from me.
'Cept for the one with Lyra reliving her nightmare. That got a head on a pike
those were some sexy chapters... good times, good reading, you need to write more clop in general, your good at it.
can't wait to see sexy time with bon bon lyra and bucky, one does not need to stick it in order to have sexy time
Very nice, IMHO, very sweet and delicate...i liked that you pointed, through Derpy, that things are still very sensitive, due to Thistle young age. It´s not just "Hey, let´s have sex !" kind of clop. I really like those developments.
Forgive me, for I am not caught up in the story. But last I checked, Bucky's condition for them joining the herd was that Lyra and Bon Bon have to bear his foals.
How's that supposed to happen if he never sticks it in?
2400376 Artificial insemination.
Re: the last two comments
Yeah, I was going to say that last line was suspiciously specific. Who's to say he (or probably somepony else, considering after-orgasm conditions) couldn't just magically catch his shot and shove it up in one/both of them?
they were really good, but like all porn no one wants others to know they watch it
The only complaint I had was that it was broken into two (because the first part was hott and I was left wanting more) ...and then when the 2nd one came out I was sitting reading porn in the dentists office and had to feel guilty because... well...BECAUSE...but how I could wait until I got home!!!
you write porn good. :) Go you!
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Ohhhhh... so many trips to the guidance counselor have just been explained, as well as all those funny looks in the mall...on the street...classrooms
2401103 You know, in Japan this would be considered pretty normal...superior people, i say !
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I like you, we need more people of your caliber.
Welp- there goes the neighborhood.
*pokes head in.*
"You're doing great, keep it up."
*hurries back to writing.*
'Tis all good. Doesn't have the empathic feels that the main storyline does, but good nonetheless.
2401229 indeed! hear hear!!
Never mistake silence for disapproval
Personally I love the story, these one-off chapters and all the other spinoffs you're working on. There are only so many times you can say positive things before it starts sounding contrite or saccharine.
One thing though, said it before and I'll say it again, damn you for getting me so addicted to your work and your prolific posting schedule!!!
One author here posts a chapter of a very popular story once a year, or at least that's how long the last one took to come out and he hasn't posted another in months.
I'll be honest...I can't help but think of Bucky as being a bit wrong for taking Thistle. I have a hard time looking past the fact she is still technically a minor. Eh, maybe I'm just a prude, but I just think she was too young.
With that in mind, I grimaced through the chapter, trying to enjoy it, but also just thinking of Thistle as a kid. No offense at all to your writing, mind you.
I just found the intimate moments between first Derpy then Bucky with Thistle of the statutory kind.
(I blame my years in the military police)