You find yourself as Pinkie's special birthday present, but she likes a good game before any actual play time. Enjoy running through distractions from the residences of Ponyville as you track down your target, but will you win in the end?
HEY YOU STOLE MY IDEA WITH THIS ONE DIDN'T YOU!!!!!
Lolz I'm just kidding I'm not mad.
Nice to see that other people are doing this though. I wonder where you'll take this one.
Edit: Oh right... Place a cupcake out as bait. Even if she zips by as fast as the Roadrunner you'll still have some kind of lead you can use to chase her with. Also tracking devices or spells in the cupcake never hurt.
2417771 Yeah I have a comment driven story on my page as well. Though you seem to be taking the opposite approach. Whereas mine is about running AWAY from a lusty Twilight yours is about finding a lusty Pinkie Pie.
So yeah same type of story, but we got completely opposite ideas here. Good luck man.
2417831 No problem. Check out mine if you get the chance. Though if you're wondering how it's so damn long, it's cause I update it every day practically. Don't worry, it goes by fast.
2418355 Guidelines...? It's basically do what you will. Not everyone would want to give Rainbow Dash a belly rub, (God only knows why not,) but then there's some that would die to eat Applejack out. I gave them that choice. Considering this is a second person story, about you, I tried to accommodate for what everyone prefers to the best of my abilities. You don't want to know how hard that really is.
Eh, not bad for a second person story, though i rarely read them. I mainly read hoping for comedy but since the tag was mature sex i knew there would be clop in it, kind of disappointing.
Np. I always try to comment on stories i read, I know how it feels to look at your view count and go"okay, I KNOW this many people read this...where the buck are the comments?!"
How to catch Pinkie in ten simple steps: Step 1: Get a stick. Step 2: Get a box. Step 3: Prop up the box with the stick. Step 4: Tie a string around the bottom of the stick and lead the other end of the string behind a corner of a building or wall, out of view of the box. Step 5: Leave Ponyville, and go to, say, Manehattan. Step 6: Get a pony, befriend them, take them back, and place them under the box. Step 7: Convince everypony that the box is your new friend's home. Step 8: Pinkie Pie shows up to throw a "Welcome to Ponyville Party" in the box, going inside with a ridiculous amount of decorations. Step 9: Pull string. Step 10: Trap is shut.
... Now you aren't invited to the box party. Oh cruel fate!
2419022 Hey, I just proofread clopfics, romance, and the occasional sad story while writing my own adventure-based stories. Comedy isn't my thing, but if someone else can use it, then by all means, go right ahead!
I'll be back to this story once it's done, more than likely, to put my proofread and review skills to use!
2419042 Nice! Actually, my scenes in my own unpublished stories seem to involve Pinkie in rather dark themes (nothing GRIMdark, just 'dark'), so I think I wanna see how far I can go with that. A comedic take wouldn't be good for me to pursue. Heh...
this is an interesting idea, but it's kind of lame that you published it before you had half the stuff written. makes it hard to render a verdict on it in its present state.
when i saw Rarity was next i though i would have some bondage and alot of leather and spanking. i always saw Rarity that way thanks to Tumblr (lilmissrarity)
… “walk passed her” – ‘passed’ should be ‘past’. … “mono-toned voice” – It should simply be ‘monotone’. … “hues of pigmentation's” – I get the feeling you misused ‘pigmentation’. That refers to the following:
1. The natural coloring of animal or plant tissue. 2. The coloring of a person's skin, esp. when abnormal or distinctive
If Rarity had hues of, essentially HIDE, I’d be… surprised where she got it. Consider hues of colors, or shades, or “a spectrum of hues”, etc. … “just a manikin” – ‘manikin’ should be ‘mannequin’. ‘manikin’ means… wait… *checks* … Th-THE SAME THING!? … Oh… erm… v-very well! Carry on!.... I still think Rarity would use the more elegant spelling, but now I’m just a sore loser. … “just wanted experiment” – Either ‘an’ or ‘to’, should be placed after the word ‘wanted’ and before the word ‘experiment’.
Rarity was… hardly generous in this. She chose not to help with hints, then chose to waste the protagonist’s time by dressing them up, finally outright leaving her store to avoid questions (because seriously, looting her store wasn’t against the rules. ), I’d be tempted to outright steal some gemstones from her just to place a trail from the Library to the Boutique in an attempt to attract Spike there.
Of course, I’m being vindictive here, because Rarity really was the first unlikable character in terms of their portrayal… I guess she IS just there for work, but did she have to come across as being so… well, rude? The “no clop in the scene” is fine, but her portrayal was the first that lacked interest, and even involved physically HARMING the protagonist with that little ‘stunt’ with the carpet.
I kinda hope Opal aims for her gold fabric instead of the litter box…
2426679 You'd think I wasn't the same guy who made the "Box party" joke given my rather persistent and critical review with regards to Rarity! But I wasn't expecting this to go from "Read Later" to "Read NOW!" so quick! It really DID get finished fast, though, and I admire your diligence in your work not only being written quick, but written with such quality.
its a trick that that PINKIE
HEY YOU STOLE MY IDEA WITH THIS ONE DIDN'T YOU!!!!!
Lolz I'm just kidding I'm not mad.
Nice to see that other people are doing this though. I wonder where you'll take this one.
Edit:
Oh right...
Place a cupcake out as bait. Even if she zips by as fast as the Roadrunner you'll still have some kind of lead you can use to chase her with. Also tracking devices or spells in the cupcake never hurt.
2417761 Uh, hello?
And yeah, I'm curious to see where I'm going with this too.
2417771
Yeah I have a comment driven story on my page as well.
Though you seem to be taking the opposite approach. Whereas mine is about running AWAY from a lusty Twilight yours is about finding a lusty Pinkie Pie.
So yeah same type of story, but we got completely opposite ideas here.
Good luck man.
2417794 Thanks! You too!
2417831
No problem. Check out mine if you get the chance.
Though if you're wondering how it's so damn long, it's cause I update it every day practically. Don't worry, it goes by fast.
2417841 I did mine in a chunk. I'll see about your story soon, but it might take awhile. I have another story I'm working on as well.
2417851
Okay cool. I'll be watching this one as well. I'm curious to see where you take this.
Also don't be afraid to go completely crazy with this. Hell your subject is Pinkie Pie so you have even more of an excuse to not make sense sometimes.
2417919 I'm gonna put that in the story! Thanks!
Edit: Not word for word, but pretty much a better way of putting things.
lol watching
2418355 Guidelines...? It's basically do what you will. Not everyone would want to give Rainbow Dash a belly rub, (God only knows why not,) but then there's some that would die to eat Applejack out. I gave them that choice. Considering this is a second person story, about you, I tried to accommodate for what everyone prefers to the best of my abilities. You don't want to know how hard that really is.
Eh, not bad for a second person story, though i rarely read them. I mainly read hoping for comedy but since the tag was mature sex i knew there would be clop in it, kind of disappointing.
2418589 I didn't tag it with comedy, though I understand why people would think it's a funny fiction. Anyways, hey, thanks for reading!
2418600
Np. I always try to comment on stories i read, I know how it feels to look at your view count and go"okay, I KNOW this many people read this...where the buck are the comments?!"
2418669 Heh, thanks for that. I usually don't worry about that sorta thing... but now I probably will...
Anyways, thanks again.
2418740 You know what you read.
How to catch Pinkie in ten simple steps:
Step 1: Get a stick.
Step 2: Get a box.
Step 3: Prop up the box with the stick.
Step 4: Tie a string around the bottom of the stick and lead the other end of the string behind a corner of a building or wall, out of view of the box.
Step 5: Leave Ponyville, and go to, say, Manehattan.
Step 6: Get a pony, befriend them, take them back, and place them under the box.
Step 7: Convince everypony that the box is your new friend's home.
Step 8: Pinkie Pie shows up to throw a "Welcome to Ponyville Party" in the box, going inside with a ridiculous amount of decorations.
Step 9: Pull string.
Step 10: Trap is shut.
... Now you aren't invited to the box party. Oh cruel fate!
2419009 I should, and COULD write that as a fic!
2419022 Hey, I just proofread clopfics, romance, and the occasional sad story while writing my own adventure-based stories. Comedy isn't my thing, but if someone else can use it, then by all means, go right ahead!
I'll be back to this story once it's done, more than likely, to put my proofread and review skills to use!
2419032 Sweetness! I'm going on a full writing torture routine again tomorrow to try and finish the rest of this up.
It's how I posted today's entries.
2419042 Nice! Actually, my scenes in my own unpublished stories seem to involve Pinkie in rather dark themes (nothing GRIMdark, just 'dark'), so I think I wanna see how far I can go with that. A comedic take wouldn't be good for me to pursue. Heh...
Best of luck, good sir!
this is an interesting idea, but it's kind of lame that you published it before you had half the stuff written. makes it hard to render a verdict on it in its present state.
2419161I'll... try harder next time, Sir. The next chapters will be published tomorrow, if you're interested.
ohmygoshohmygoshohmygosh
2419171
i don't understand this reaction
that said, i will pop back tomorrow to check 'em out
2419175 I'll try not to disappoint.
2419022
I'd read that.
Well this story has got me sucked in. Can't wait to read the rest.
Lol lets see where this story goes.
2419784 Look, it's clop, yes. There's a sex tag. It's rated mature. Why wouldn't it be clop if it had that?
Anyways, thanks for reading!
And good morning everyone! To those who are reading this, I'm getting back to work on updates now! Wish me luck!
Cant see me being mad at anypony... especially with all the fun I already had. It would be entirely worth it. lol
Wait, there's Discord? I'm gonna get to fuck DISCORD?!
YAY
2420835 Uh, I'm just gonna let you know right now, you don't get intimate with Discord. Sorry about that.
2420976
Oh....okay....But...why is he in the characters section?
I'm new to the site so if I fuck things up I'm sorry.
Good so far. lol.
2421028 He'll be in a later chapter.
2421137
Thank you.
What?!? Only a belly rub outta Rainbow? well that's disappointing, cool story though, can't wait to see how it ends
2421254 How it ends will be completely up to you.
She got away...DAMMIT *Punches a hole into wall*
2421379
<You were so close, too.)
damn oh well lets sleep
when i saw Rarity was next i though i would have some bondage and alot of leather and spanking. i always saw Rarity that way thanks to Tumblr (lilmissrarity)
2421479 Everyone sees her that way, even without Tumblr.
2421028 lol, i'm not sure there even IS a clop story with discord
2421254 i'd be dying to give dash a belly rub
Wow...That was... Amazing.
You deserve this as a reward.
Fappable material
Rarity… Oh… this won’t end too well.
… “walk passed her” – ‘passed’ should be ‘past’.
… “mono-toned voice” – It should simply be ‘monotone’.
… “hues of pigmentation's” – I get the feeling you misused ‘pigmentation’. That refers to the following:
If Rarity had hues of, essentially HIDE, I’d be… surprised where she got it. Consider hues of colors, or shades, or “a spectrum of hues”, etc.
… “just a manikin” – ‘manikin’ should be ‘mannequin’. ‘manikin’ means… wait…
*checks*
… Th-THE SAME THING!?
… Oh… erm… v-very well! Carry on!.... I still think Rarity would use the more elegant spelling, but now I’m just a sore loser.
… “just wanted experiment” – Either ‘an’ or ‘to’, should be placed after the word ‘wanted’ and before the word ‘experiment’.
Rarity was… hardly generous in this. She chose not to help with hints, then chose to waste the protagonist’s time by dressing them up, finally outright leaving her store to avoid questions (because seriously, looting her store wasn’t against the rules. ), I’d be tempted to outright steal some gemstones from her just to place a trail from the Library to the Boutique in an attempt to attract Spike there.
Of course, I’m being vindictive here, because Rarity really was the first unlikable character in terms of their portrayal… I guess she IS just there for work, but did she have to come across as being so… well, rude? The “no clop in the scene” is fine, but her portrayal was the first that lacked interest, and even involved physically HARMING the protagonist with that little ‘stunt’ with the carpet.
I kinda hope Opal aims for her gold fabric instead of the litter box…
2426598 All I can say is I hate Rarity.
And you're doing a fantastic job at helping me! Thank you very much!
2426679 You'd think I wasn't the same guy who made the "Box party" joke given my rather persistent and critical review with regards to Rarity! But I wasn't expecting this to go from "Read Later" to "Read NOW!" so quick! It really DID get finished fast, though, and I admire your diligence in your work not only being written quick, but written with such quality.