You find yourself as Pinkie's special birthday present, but she likes a good game before any actual play time. Enjoy running through distractions from the residences of Ponyville as you track down your target, but will you win in the end?
*squints*… I only JUST recently heard that this side of Lyra exists… I normally heard only of the “With Bon Bon” side, but apparently this second fan interpretation has become rather interesting when it comes to how people have viewed her. Might as well see what it holds!
… “Well, a deals a deal” – ‘deals’ should be ‘deal’s’. … “You question yourself why” – ‘yourself’ seems rather out of place.
Well, it was certainly interesting to play with Lyra like an accordion...
... Look, for a background pony, I can't say she was "in character", though I CAN say that she was incredibly interesting to read about. That said, one thing bothered me:
your right hand’s thumb prods her upper hole
This... is literally as far as explaining what happens with regards to anal. Now, all things considered, "prodding" is different from "inserting", and it goes straight to "ramming" right after "prodding" without a proper transition. I'd imagine a pony would be rather... inexperienced, and as a result you could have at least described lubing up the thumb with her juices before inserting it, to her (likely) moans of delight.
Regardless, barely anything got described here. "You were lost, then went to her house". I would've liked to at least hear a little bit more about the scenery, smells, even the sounds of Ponyville! It seemed like a wasted chance, especially with the water fountain.
... Well, onto the next chapter! Typos were lessened, but I want to see what's next!
Personally, I would NEVER stick my fingers in a woman's private. I respect Lyra too much. So, I would just let her continue with my have in her mouth. Maybe even mess with them ( hopefully non-sexually), like wiggle them around.
*squints*… I only JUST recently heard that this side of Lyra exists… I normally heard only of the “With Bon Bon” side, but apparently this second fan interpretation has become rather interesting when it comes to how people have viewed her. Might as well see what it holds!
… “Well, a deals a deal” – ‘deals’ should be ‘deal’s’.
… “You question yourself why” – ‘yourself’ seems rather out of place.
Well, it was certainly interesting to play with Lyra like an accordion...
... Look, for a background pony, I can't say she was "in character", though I CAN say that she was incredibly interesting to read about. That said, one thing bothered me:
This... is literally as far as explaining what happens with regards to anal. Now, all things considered, "prodding" is different from "inserting", and it goes straight to "ramming" right after "prodding" without a proper transition. I'd imagine a pony would be rather... inexperienced, and as a result you could have at least described lubing up the thumb with her juices before inserting it, to her (likely) moans of delight.
Regardless, barely anything got described here. "You were lost, then went to her house". I would've liked to at least hear a little bit more about the scenery, smells, even the sounds of Ponyville! It seemed like a wasted chance, especially with the water fountain.
... Well, onto the next chapter! Typos were lessened, but I want to see what's next!
ALL I WANTED TO DO WAS LET HER EXPERIMENT WITH MY HANDS! Not so sexually as this, why does this keep happening?!
Personally, I would NEVER stick my fingers in a woman's private. I respect Lyra too much. So, I would just let her continue with my have in her mouth. Maybe even mess with them ( hopefully non-sexually), like wiggle them around.
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It's just the seductive setback.
I'll let Lyra experiment with my hands all she wants 8'D
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Nice job again, heheeheee