Takes place in the middle of chapter IX: Everything is Going to be Fine
The crowd, shocked into silence, muttered and growled, but more and more ponies showed shocked recognition.
"I will not force you to accept her, but there will be responses to acts of violence, as there always have been." Celestia took a step back, letting the six mares take her place. With a flourish, she summoned the Elements and gently placed them around their owners' necks.
Twilight felt nothing short of amazement as Celestia placed her crown on her head.
"Behold, Twilight Sparkle, Princess of the Stars!"
The crowd shuffled, withholding any major reaction. Twilight saw Celestia's expression falter into anger as the neutrality drew on, and she placed a hoof on her mentor's shoulder.
"I can do this myself." Twilight whispered.
Celestia nodded, taking a step back.
"Ponies of Equestria." Twilight shouted over the stunned crowd. "I know you have wanted me out of this place ever since I started my ascension. I know some of you enjoyed that fact that I was dead, if only because I did not rule you."
She cast a glaze over the audience, trying to gauge a reaction.
"The truth is, I didn't think I could do it either. I was just a pony, after all. I never thought I could measure up to what my mentor had done.
"I realize now, standing here, that I was never a regular pony. I was raised by the Crystal Princess, mentored by the Princess of the Sun, and fulfilled the Element of Magic when I saved the Princess of the Moon and Equestria. I defeated and aided in Discord's fall and redemption, and was a key piece in the defeat of the Changelings and the fall of King Sombra."
She stomped a hoof on the balcony, the sound ringing out over the silence.
"And you dare to call me unworthy?!" She summoned a newspaper from her caves, waving it towards the crowd. "You dared to call me 'Celestia's pet'? Who is to be more worthy of leading you than the sixth element?"
She tilted her chin up, glaring at the newsponies below. "I will have you know that I am Twilight Sparkle, Princess of the Stars.
"And I am nobody's pet."
Yep. I fucking called it.
2357501
Yes, you did.
2357516 Dude, I'm like God or something lately. Feed me chocolate, peon!
2357534 REBELLION!
2357534
Internet chocolate sent.
SHE WILL BE MY PET
I cans ee why this got deleted. That line at the end seems to imply that Twilight's about to stage a coup against Celestia.
I will have her as a pet in the game "Can Your Pet?"
*Throws ball* "FETCH!" *Gets vaporized*
I have no idea whether it is appropriate to correct that, or not.
But, I will anyway
Nopony's
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Eh, not worth an edit.
Wow... Why did you take this out again?
Also a bit off topic but why am I gold?
2358648
You're gold because it's a demo.
I dunno, it didn't really fit well with everything else.
Heh.
Nobody's Pet. Beautiful.
~Skeeter The Lurker
(Got any more deleted scenes?)
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A couple.
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Gonna show them?
~STL
2359196
Eventually.
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I eagerly await them.
~STL
Don't Mind At All!!!
So... sequel? Any idea for a release date, if you don't mind that is.
2360604
Release date; soon. Nearing 4000 words, will be released at chapter over 5000's end.
2360761
No, only the back legs.
I am glad you removed this. Makes her too un-twilight like.
Also, that last statement incites rebellion.
I am all for deleated scenes idea!
2356508 Oh, OK. So why did you recommend that I read comments similar to my own?
2366248
Because I already kind of answered it, is all.
This chapter was better then last one, at last in here Twilight shout in they face for they stupidity.
2368302 Ah. In the exact same post in which you were telling me to refer back to FourPony's comments, I notice. And now that I know what you were talking about, I can safely say that there's a considerable amount that I can think of that could be added, mostly in the way of detail, detail, and more detail. Detail about what happened. Detail about why. Detail about the reactions of the other Mane Six to their dragonification. Detail about how Twilight reacted to the same. Detail about why the effect apparently spread beyond the ponies whose destiny was being fulfilled. Detail of why dragonification was the destiny of the Mane Six. Detail, detail, and more detail. The rushed feel of the ending was partly because so much detail had been stripped out so it felt like "random happenings, boom, done, sequel time".
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I am fully aware that detail is not my strong suit until I have to specifically describe something, and if it's any consolation, I'm going to try and expand my thoughts and such in the sequel.
2370172 I appreciate both items, although it'd make a more coherent and satisfying work if you did all the expansion and explanation in close proximity to the thing needing to be expanded upon and explained. But it's nice that we'll eventually get that information in the sequel. :)
It was a very nice story, a bit rushed, but than again who am I to even say that. I liked it overall and the ending took me somewhat by surprise so kudos.
I'd give it a 7/10 Cool story bro
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I am aware, and I agree completely. I may go over them later and fill them up, but until then, I hope you enjoyed the story as a whole.
FABULOUS JUST FABULOUS . I hope you write more