Author's note....
I am a foreigner so, please forgive me if I got my grammar wrong, and please write comments about them.
The darkness was colossal..... upon the vast night sky that was filled with darkness, he could see a relatively big silver crescent moon shining brightly. The night sky was beautiful.
He was standing on a balcony quietly and having himself a cocktail. Then he turned back to his quiet and trustworthy assistant. With the tiny bit of smile on his face, he asked,
"Is it ready to launch, JARVIS?"
Then a voice of the masculine robotic voice with slight bit of British accent spoke back.
" Yes Mr. Stark. All tests are complete and very successful. It's ready to go,sir"
Then there was a deep silence between them. Then finally, he broke the silence.
" I think it's time. Don't you think?"
Then his faithful A.I. assistance responded,
“If that is what you want sir, we can initiate the portal right now.”
Then he dressed himself a normal grey polo shirt that he used to wear, and his dark blue jean. He signed as he looked himself in the mirror. He could see his mini arc-reactor glowing blue through his polo shirt. then he murmured himself.
“Alright, then. I don’t want any mistakes this time.”
Then he saw his own life sized figure of Princess Celestia standing behind him, which was his favorite character from ‘My Little Pony Friendship is Magic’.
He had to admitted it. he seemed to be serious, but he was rather excited inside. He calm him self down, and walked to his personal elevator that is only operational when he access it. He tapped on a holographic floating blue button and the elevator started to go down in a great speed. It was going so fast that he almost felt that he was floating in a zero-gravity. In less than 10 seconds, the door opened and Jarvis said,
“Sir, I am looking forward for your great vacation. Since this is a first time you are going on vacation in to another universe.”
As he stepped out from the elevator, he was now in a huge hall,and there was a metal door on the other side. He walked to the robotic metal door, and it opened automatically, as it recognized it’s own master or creator. Inside it reviled a huge place with huge metal grey colored space shuttle appeared. Jarvis has copied his own data to the shuttle and it was complete. The shuttle was hooked up with huge thick cables and wires on a dock. And at the front side, there was a huge portal that was slowly powering up. Continuous whirling sound from the cooling fan could be heard form faraway.
Honestly to him, it was his first time to build something that big. He have built various type of portals and ships but, they were small. And because of the size of the new portal, he was concerned that something could go wrong. but, he was eager to use it, and he was to use it right away.Inside of his ship there were all of his creation placed on a wall. The suits, and his servant robots. starting from Mark 1 to Mark Infinity. Also including his emergency armor and his prototype armor.He has been using these armors for 10 years and he had no more use of them because there were no great enemy left in his universe or other universes around him. he has defeated numerous monsters and cyber-freaks for decade. Everything was too weak against to his Mark Infinity, his ultimate creation. Because there are nothing to do with them, he decided to take a big vacation for a month. he really liked to go to the space because he loved to watch astronomical objects floating in a pit black space. but this time, it was different universe that he have never been before.It could look different or matters might not exist because of power of the dark matter is too great. He didn’t care about that because his shuttle and his suits were all prepared for this.
“May I initiate the portal and the shuttle, sir?” Jarvis asked.
“Do it, Jarvis!!!” he shouted with excitements.
“Initiating the portal sequence and the anti-matter engine sequence......” said Jarvis.
He could hear engine and portal powering up slowly, gaining it’s full power. soon, the entire base was filled with whirling sound so he could barely hear himself speaking. The engines ignited. As Jarvis said, these engines were not the same engine that NASA was using. They were powered by anti-matter, by annihilating matter to anti-matter.The portal started to light up, and the space has ripped. The shuttle started to enter the portal, and suddenly, there was an alarm. it was too late to get out of there. The cooling fan started to fail, and portal’s mainframe started to burn.
“Jarvis?! what is happening?”
“Sir, I believe that one of the fan failed it’s function and the mainframe of the portal is fusing! There aren’t much thing that I can do without sending repair drones, but they will not function until the portal is destroyed!”
“What’s happening now?!”
“I’m not sure, but we could be send off to a random place!”
“Turn the shuttle back!!! Turn it !!!”
“I’m trying, sir!”
But as Jarvis operated the front engine to go back, the portal was closed, and there were send off to the random place. There was a huge ‘boom’ sound and by that, he was knocked off to the wall and hit his head. He was started to go faint and everything turned black.....
BLACK
He slowly opened his eyes and he found himself on his bed. He rubbed his head and sat up straight. then he said, “how did I ended here?”
Then a gentle British voice spoke
“sir, I ordered your servants to carry you to your bed and operate the emergency health care. I asked them to make sure you fell comfortable.”
He could feel a bandage on his head. then he moaned.Then he got out from his bed and looked outside thorough his window wall. At the first time he thought he was only seeing an illusion. He slapped on his face leaving red mark.
“I think I hit my face too hard....”
Then he looked the window, and it was same. He asked himself.
’Is this some kind of joke?’
He ran to his main control room, but it was not joking. Even Jarvis did not believe what he was seeing with his robotic eyes.Then slowly, Jarvis said,
“s...sir??”
What they were looking at was not earth, and everything seemed to be cartoonish.
Then Jarvis mumbled,
“s..sir, I..I think we are in....”
Then he snapped and said
“Don’t tell me....”
This is quite hilarious. You have a track.
tracking now
*tracks*
You have another track. As you mentioned at the start of the chapter, there are quite a few grammatical errors. I suggest a proof-reader, which I wouldn't mind being. PM me if you're interested.
very interesting just needs a bit of editing (i do understand what you mean to say though)
Tracking time
Also, your grammar is pretty good :) Looking forwards to future chaps
Like your cover image as to how you mixed 3D models with that of drawn pictures
I'm quite looking forward to our Tony's adventure Go in full force!
As for being a foriegner, you're doing great! Just at the end ya forgot a little. STILL, pretty awesome
"Don't tell me..."
LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL
Y I NO MAKE A STORY LIKE TAHT
Bar the gramatical errors (Which are understandable) your stories very humorous, can't wait to see where it goes!
162379
Sure. I would love to do that.
162714 can you make the next chapter soon?please!I AM GOING TO MAKE 2000 ACCOUNT TO FOLLOW YOU AND DO EVERYTHING FOR YOU.
I am your faithful student from now on.
although i don't know what my name will be
plus 1 loyal follower
Okay, another foreigner author, yay.
This is very good, the only problems I saw was the lack of a few spaces on the text.
Five star and tracking.
Iron Man, Robert Downey Jr, ponies and adventure = SOLD!!! 5/5 and tracking. I need moar.
I don't know why but here's a gif.
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Peace Out.
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by the nine i love this fic
by the nine i love this fic
Pretty good.Most fanfics with bad grammer i dont read.But this has better grammer than most iv read.A hint:Spiderses.I hope you make more soon.Because this is the very first Iron Man crossover iv ever come across on this site.TRACKED!!!!!Oh and btw.A simple MOAR is in order.MOOOOOOAAAAAARRRRRRRRRR
162305 OMG its teh Mobius, I've seen him pop up in plenty of human in equestria fics.... its like it has to happen at some point....
tracking. i must see what will happen next.
Oh... oh god...
I'm sorry, I know I had fair warning about grammar, but that can only allow for so much...
"The night sky was beautiful at that day."
Really? The NIGHT was beautiful that DAY? Is there a solar eclipse happening right now?
"Mark Infinity Armor"
No. Fucking no. That is stupid "five-year-olds playing with action figures" bullshit.
And really, nobody could defeat his incredible-edible-armor, ALL the multiverse is at peace, so Tony Stark is going on a vacation.
Maybe this is purely comedy, and I'm intended to laugh at all the stupid, but the gross failure at characterization tells me otherwise. I can't imagine these words being said by the voices of JARVIS or Robert Downy Junior. This is the kind of thing I'd expect to see recreated in Garrysmod and titled "Half Life, Full Life Consequences," except the spelling and grammar aren't QUITE bad enough to be that profoundly hilarious.
Lets see, we have DeadMau5, the Teen Titans, that guy from valve, and I'm pretty sure the guys from the Yogscast too. Now Tony Stark!
Damn, OUR NUMBERS RISE, AND SOON ALL THE WORLD WILL LEARN TO LOVE AND TOLERATE!
1017733 Guy from Valve?
In all honesty I don't mind if you are a foreigner so stay happy write