When the sun started ah went to ma comfy spot in the barn to get some sleep. Then to ma surprise Applejack trotted up to me.
"Mater, would y'all feel better if Ah sleep with ya?" She asked me.
I told her yes. So Applejack trotted next to me and lied down on the hay on the floor.
"G'night sugarcube," she said.
"G'night AJ," Ah said. after she closed her eyes and fell asleep. Ah started ta like this sugarcube name she called me, then ah soon drifted to sleep. After four hours passed Ah woke up with a start. Ah had a nightmare that the Princess had found me and assumed I was evil and chased me. then when she had me, she put her horn ta me and and it began to glow.
Ah screamed when a magic beam was heading for me. I decided a drive would make me tired, so I quietly drove out a' the barn and drove on the road leading away from the barn. Ponyville was different then radiator Springs, everything was new. Then when ah looked to the side and saw what looked a monster. Ah quickly turned and shone my headlight on it and saw it was just a broken piece of fencing and some tools. Ah was now very scared as Ah drove, then ah went into a forest. Ah was amazing at some of the things ah saw. Then ah heard something approaching me, ah got very scared now. Ah was now so scared ah started shaking so much my metal parts were shaking. Then ah tighten them up and stood still with my eyes closed and waited for what was comin'. Then to my surprise ah didn't feel anything on me. Ah opened one eye and saw a zebra standing in front of me. Ah was still scared.
Then the zebra spook, "Are you a tow truck? Because you don't look like a duck or a buck." Ah was still a little scared, this zebra look like she wasn't gonna hurt me but ah wasn't sure. But Ah was amazed that she spoke in rhyme.
But then Ah plucked up courage and said, "Yes Ah-ah-ah am a tow truck."
The Zebra spoke again and said, "You are indeed a tow truck I see. What is your name it might be? The zebra then smiled at me.
"My name is Mater," I said. "What's yours?" Ah asked.
The zebra then said, "I'm Zecora my dear. But what are you doing here?"
"Ah was just drivin' to make me feel tired and Ah drove in here." Ah answered. Zecora nodded and looked at me again.
"You speak with the country tongue, but I can see something's on your mind that weighs a ton." Zecora stated.
"Ya got me, I was drivin' because I had nightmare that the Princess found me and did away with me." Ah said.
Zecora then said, "You must face your fears Mater, or they will haunt you later." Ah thought for a bit and knew she was right. I couldn't let my fears get to me.
"Thanks for the advice, well ah better get goin'. Itt was nice meeting you, " I said then Ah turned to the way ah came and set off.
"The pleasure is mine, I hope to see you again and to dine." Zecora said to me. Ah felt better now. Ah followed the tracks ah left before and made it back to the barn. I drove quietly in and pulled up next to Applejack in ma comfy spot and flew into a peace snooze.
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I've not read this yet, and judging by the comment's I'm going to have to, but I'm upvoting this right now, just for how well you've taken all the criticism. You're a credit to the internet my new friend.
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It's no problem! I can see why people were having issues with it, but I'm not going to just rehash what Warren was saying. I just blazed through the first chapter, and to be honest, I like it. It's a bit of lighthearted fluff, nice change from most of the gloomier fics I read.
I'm guessing you're pretty young too, not holding it against you! It's good to see you kids are still reading, don't let this fic being a bust stop you though, take all that people have said and learn from it, and please, NEVER stop pumping out these saccharine fics, you'd be surprised how uplifting a good one can be.
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A comma or ? should go after Mater.
I was gonna question how he knew it was four hours, but then remembered that most cars have a clock, so nothing wrong here.
Show, don't tell. I for one would have loved to get a first-hand look at this nightmare, dream sequences are probably considered cliche, but not so in a bad way. (Then again, nightmares can be kinda hard to do right, I should know.)
Yes, and I once chose to take a ran. Wrong tense of verb usage, that should be drive, not drove.
The Zecora scene wasn't as good as it could have been, but you still did better than me. So good job there.