As Always leave me some comments on what you like and what I should improve on. Your feedback really helps!
I actually deleted a sex scene memory from this chapter, which didn't really fit in well (and it depicted Rarity as too slutty). I'm going to edit it to ambiguously fit the story and put it in as a bonus chapter (around 500-1000 words maybe) in a couple of days or so. I might start doing this more often, a bonus chapter will be tagged "Memory: *insert description*" and will be only clop with no real plot. The bonus I am referring to that I will be posting in a few days is the scene where Rarity got her first taste of pee from a stallion.
In other news, somebody on ponychan put this fic in as a nomination for the worst fanfic, I am proud: i.imgur.com/s7FZN.png
168940 Heh, I actually thought the post on ponychan was quite humorous, it made my day really. If my fic was controversial enough to spark that post, I think I did my job right. Yeah I think there is a few things I could improve on this fic, I think in future chapters I'll spend more time focusing on fleshing out the emotions of the characters. This is my first multi-chapter fic (I've only written about 3k words of pony clop before this), so I am learning as I go along.
It amazes me how much attention this fic has. I wrote chapter 1 as a joke to see how sick I could be with a pee fetish plot. I'm simply using this fic to prepare myself to write non-sexual fanfiction in the summer. (Though now that I think about it, I'll probably be completely discouraged by the fact that I'll never get any fic to be as popular as this.)
216293 Oh I have to say thanks a ton for all of that, I'll get right on it ^_^. And either way is fine for chapter 4. I'm always in the fimfiction.net/chat except for mondays and wednesdays.
As Always leave me some comments on what you like and what I should improve on. Your feedback really helps!
I actually deleted a sex scene memory from this chapter, which didn't really fit in well (and it depicted Rarity as too slutty). I'm going to edit it to ambiguously fit the story and put it in as a bonus chapter (around 500-1000 words maybe) in a couple of days or so. I might start doing this more often, a bonus chapter will be tagged "Memory: *insert description*" and will be only clop with no real plot. The bonus I am referring to that I will be posting in a few days is the scene where Rarity got her first taste of pee from a stallion.
In other news, somebody on ponychan put this fic in as a nomination for the worst fanfic, I am proud:
i.imgur.com/s7FZN.png
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Heh, I actually thought the post on ponychan was quite humorous, it made my day really. If my fic was controversial enough to spark that post, I think I did my job right. Yeah I think there is a few things I could improve on this fic, I think in future chapters I'll spend more time focusing on fleshing out the emotions of the characters. This is my first multi-chapter fic (I've only written about 3k words of pony clop before this), so I am learning as I go along.
It amazes me how much attention this fic has. I wrote chapter 1 as a joke to see how sick I could be with a pee fetish plot. I'm simply using this fic to prepare myself to write non-sexual fanfiction in the summer. (Though now that I think about it, I'll probably be completely discouraged by the fact that I'll never get any fic to be as popular as this.)
Another excellent chapter even if is starting to get me worried a bit.
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Please keep up the good work my good sir.
this not the worst fic
i like it
me gusta
What the fuck is Rarity doing with double fortified white wine?
Oh I get it, its a plot device so the library will have sex with Twilight while she's crying.
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The library...will have sex...with Twilight?
MOAR!!!
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Uhhhh...
Well... Uh...
AHAHAHAHAHAHAHA
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The LIBRARY?! Is it like a Transformer?
Twilight seems to go COMPLETELY BUCKING CRAZY IN 10 SECONDS FLAT!
oh wells
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Nice one!!!.......
216293 Oh I have to say thanks a ton for all of that, I'll get right on it ^_^. And either way is fine for chapter 4. I'm always in the fimfiction.net/chat except for mondays and wednesdays.
>fertilize
>fantasize [Chapter 3]
>tantalising
>prise
>sensitise
>dramatize
>recognize [Chapter 4]
>realize
>realise
that is what happens when you have two UK prereaders and aren't paying attention.
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If we still had star ratings, I'd give this 5/5 because it's making me horny e.deviantart.net/emoticons/moods/love/lust/unf.gif
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You're no fun