I hope that griffon dug her own grave beforehand because no force in Equestria, or any other plane of existence, will save her from Twilight Sparkle's wraith.
considering all the buildups and hints we got about Twi being Magic with a capital M, I will be severely disappointed if she doesn't kick so many different kinds of ass next chapter
...How.... How am I supposed to wait a week (or more) for that!?!? No, no, I must be strong, I must be strong.
OK so the mercs were dumb enough to go after Cheerilee, and now Twilight is going to wipe them from existence
Well I tried to warn them, but do fictional characters ever listen? Noooooo
So yeah this was an excellent chapter, I got massive feels from Spitfire and Cheerilee's scene and the scene between Luna and Celestia, and of course Trixie's show going off without a hitch.
But for now my biggest concern is the safety of Cheerilee's foal, because it's bad enough they endangered her, but if ANYTHING happens to that baby... ... let's remember Luna was sent to the moon for a thousand years, Discord was turned to stone, Sombra was ripped from his body and put inside a glacier.....
....their punishment will probably be worse and I won't feel sorry for them.
Also people can say what they want about Shining Armor, dude is a freaking BAWSS!
1996098 I was wondering if anybody would post a comment about either that movie or the episode from Futurama (It's DOLOMITE, baby!). Looks like you won. 2022175 Yes, the fecal matter has hit the air propelling device. 2022208 I hope nobody got too attached to Ava. 2022227 Mmm... your anguish and frustration are delicious. But seriously, it lets me know I'm doing something right. Thank you. 2022325 Not forever. ... Damn, I just let a cat out of the bag, didn't I? Oh, well. At least I don't have to worry about acting on it in this story. ... D'oh! Did it again! 2022378 I had honestly forgotten about Marilyn Manson until now. Hadn't even thought about him since the last time I saw Celebrity Deathmatch. 2022397 Patience, Grasshopper. Patience. 2022515 I'm glad you liked the sads as much as the adrenalin. I wouldn't say that Trixie's show went off without a hitch, though. That ending? Totally unplanned. And yes, Twilight's wrath will shake the Heavens. Also, Shining Armor's pretty much been training his whole life for moments like that. Don't count him out, even though as Brawn can tell you, shoulder shots can be lethal.
2022208 twilight has a wraith? that's more than a bit dangerous, if you ask me. I doubt that many could keep a wraith under control, even one of the most powerful unicorns in the world.
Shining! You just left your BLIND sister unprotected! Also, you might want to get that shoulder looked at. Oh who am I kidding, he will be back in 5 minutes. And he gonna be MAD. Twilight gonna get her badass one. It gonna be awesome. She gonna get in trouble though. I am hoping for a Celestial beatdown. Either that or a scene like this: //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Spitfire_rape.png : Well gals, looks like we got here just in the nick o' time. What's that make us? : Big Damn Heroes Ma'am. : Ain't we just?
I will admit, I really hope this story will not have Twilestia involved. I was really liking the exploration of their relationship without romantic love involved.
Spitfire was stunned at this confession. You... you can really forgive her anything? Even...”
Missed quotation.
”Please. The day I can't handle a ground pounder- and a namby-pamby pony at that, is the day I hang up my spurs. You just be ready to cover our escape.”
Used the wrong quotation at the beginning.
Great chapter. Finally getting actiony. Can't wait for more.
I almost feel sorry for those fools. Twilight is gonna reduce them to naught but ashes. Even worse if they hurt Cheerilee's unborn foal. Hell hath no fury like a mother.
excellent chapter as always. as i go, have a pinkie!
That would be rather interesting. Twilight succumbs to her own version of Nightmare Moon as she does everything in her power for revenge should Cheri' and/or the unborn foal come to harm (or worse). Hmm, is that even possible? Granted, Twilight is the most powerful magic user in current pony society, but still is not a fully empower alicorn.
2023346 Thank you kindly. 2023774 No, a fun time was not had by all. 2023792 I had missed that misspelling entirely. 2024392 If you want to see Celestia in action, then you're gonna love the opening scene in the next chappie. Also, don't worry about Twiliestia. I have something very different in store for that. It's just unlikely to happen in this story. It will also present a new twist for Luna and the rest of the Elements as well. 20247812025159 Rest assured, that Twilight will be breaking out some big guns. 2025048 Thanks for catching those. I'll fix them immediately. 2025268 Ooo! A wild Pinkie for my collection! 2025554 No, she's not at alicorn level just yet, though she has her own considerable store of power, too.
Going after Twilight's marefriends as easier targets than Twilight herself is such an obvious tactic that Plain Sight must have thought of it. I'll bet there was a "plain clothes," guard-pony watching Cheerilee but since Big Mac reacted as fast as is possible for a pony to react and he was right next to her and it still wasn't enough and the guard-pony was presumably farther away...
Since this little cell was based in the "Griffon-Minotaur Alliance," the prospect of an aerial snatch must have been anticipated as well. So a Pegasus team was presumably also on standby. But I'll hand it to the crazies the double bluff was inspired. The Pegasus team probably assumed that the monster rampage was the distraction to the assassination attempt not realizing that it too was a distraction and were caught completely flat-hoofed.
Not that Plain Sight will accept those excuses. She might even attempt to resign for her "failure."
Let's all hold a minute of silences for the poor fools who has invoked the wrath of Twilight Sparkle for abducting her pregnant marefrind...if they get away unscarred or without somewhat traumatizing experience than I would be somewhat surprised...but I don't think they will get off lightly.
2025977 I'm not sure to which part you are referring, but they're relevant to my interests, too. 2027934 Believe it or not, but Celestia and Luna being in town actually helped her in that regard. When the Princesses were around one of the mane-6, they were freed up for other duties. The double-bluff also served a third purpose which will be touched upon next chappie. 2039666 Oh, come on. She's easily ten times worse than an Ursa when it comes to protecting her own. 2042449 Glad you liked it. 2048224 I'm trying to keep in line with the lighthearted tone of the show, so don't expect any gory ends for the various baddies. That's not to say that they won't get their comeuppances. Justice will be served. 2048320 To be fair, they didn't have Indy telling them which cup to use.
Why do I see the size of this herd increasing by two.... Plain Sight obviously but its a little weird on Celestia she keeps switchen from motherly love to the horny teacher every teenage boy wanted wait why did I just describe it like that....damn it I got to stop giving up man points for the freaken chicks aahhh well in the end its worth it...at least in bed....What I love cuddling get your mind outta the gutter
OH SHIT! OH SHIT! OHSHITOHSHITOHSHIT!! It's....it's a shitstorm of a magnitude I've never previously deemed imaginable... mother of god man, you really DID have everything fall apart all at once. Here's hoping Cheerilee and Shining are alright...
Oh, and I'm now rooting for Plain Sight to join the herd.
I would like to say, even before reading the chapter that this may possibly be my favorite chapter because Karn Evil 9.
Post-read edit: This was an amazing chapter and I was right to make it my favorite. However, I have a single question. Yous seem like a very well educated person, at least that's what your vocabulary shows. My question is how Trixie tied the curtain with a sheep-shank knot? Usually a sheep-shank is used to shorten a length of rope or to ensure that a weakened portion of rope doesn't make the rope, or whatever it would be holding at the end, come undone. It is also an inline knot so that both of the ends are free. I tried it kook it up with no avail. I also tried to tie it myself, but I couldn't figure out how it could be done. I'm not saying that you didn't do research into the topic (I had to look up what a good portion of the word you use myself) or are stupid, I'm just incredibly anal about knots. I'm sorry if I came off as telling you off.
Cheerilee started to run after her to administer a more thorough lesson, but was restrained by Spitfire, who had come up behind her and slipped her forelegs under the earth pony's to hold her back bodily. Cheerilee was spitting curses with such vile language at the laughing, retreating mare, that several of the carnies blushed at her. “You fornicating, log of excrement! You filthy piece of distended rectum! Return at once so I can teach the true meaning of pain, you self-involved, Celestia-forsaken, yeasty, onion-eyed, bum-bailey, ruttish, bawdy, ill-nurtured varlot! You reeky swag-bellied codpiece! You-”
An Emerson Lake and Palmer reference for the chapter title, and a Jurassic Park reference in the author's notes. Combine that with a wicked detailed chapter and a redic closer....
Was Cheerilee's story really necessary? The story was doing so well until then, without even that many typos. Why does a lesbian have to hate men and maleness in order to be sexually attracted to other females? Good thing she can't have a colt, cause I'd hate to see her attitude carry over like that.
7040546 years later but this is an entirely valid perspective if she had it, and she technically doesn’t- she only swore off males. she’s even friends w Big Mac. nearly being SAed is a completely logical reason to not want to date guys. Besides, we see SEVERAL other lesbians in the story without this perspective. She also clearly hates when mares do this type of this as well, so it’s not like she’s being hypocritical
of course! i don’t remember how to uh, reply. But a lot of the criticism i see on your story seems to come from them missing the foreshadowing and the plot you lay out from the very beginning. It’s always a pleasure to reread, (as you no doubt can guess since i am again, rereading this series) since it’s clearly done.
11740105 Aw, thanks. It always feels nice to know that people get so much enjoyment out of my stories. I suppose my stories are the kind that make a lot more sense on the second read-through.
Also, the reply button is the double arrows on the top-right hand corner of a comment.
I hope that griffon dug her own grave beforehand because no force in Equestria, or any other plane of existence, will save her from Twilight Sparkle's wraith.
Oh, and Trixie 'an Spitfire's too.
HOLY CRAP HOLY CRAP HOLY CRAP!
You cant leave it there!
Argh!
NOOOO!!!
I cant be patient for further updates, I demand them now!!
Finally all the plates hit the floor!
Also,
:Forever alone.
and thats when all hell broke lose
considering all the buildups and hints we got about Twi being Magic with a capital M, I will be severely disappointed if she doesn't kick so many different kinds of ass next chapter
.......
...How.... How am I supposed to wait a week (or more) for that!?!? No, no, I must be strong, I must be strong.
OK so the mercs were dumb enough to go after Cheerilee, and now Twilight is going to wipe them from existence
Well I tried to warn them, but do fictional characters ever listen? Noooooo
So yeah this was an excellent chapter, I got massive feels from Spitfire and Cheerilee's scene and the scene between Luna and Celestia, and of course Trixie's show going off without a hitch.
But for now my biggest concern is the safety of Cheerilee's foal, because it's bad enough they endangered her, but if ANYTHING happens to that baby...
... let's remember Luna was sent to the moon for a thousand years, Discord was turned to stone, Sombra was ripped from his body and put inside a glacier.....
....their punishment will probably be worse and I won't feel sorry for them.
Also people can say what they want about Shining Armor, dude is a freaking BAWSS!
1996098
I was wondering if anybody would post a comment about either that movie or the episode from Futurama (It's DOLOMITE, baby!). Looks like you won.
2022175
Yes, the fecal matter has hit the air propelling device.
2022208
I hope nobody got too attached to Ava.
2022227
Mmm... your anguish and frustration are delicious. But seriously, it lets me know I'm doing something right. Thank you.
2022325
Not forever.
...
Damn, I just let a cat out of the bag, didn't I? Oh, well. At least I don't have to worry about acting on it in this story.
...
D'oh! Did it again!
2022378
I had honestly forgotten about Marilyn Manson until now. Hadn't even thought about him since the last time I saw Celebrity Deathmatch.
2022397
Patience, Grasshopper. Patience.
2022515
I'm glad you liked the sads as much as the adrenalin. I wouldn't say that Trixie's show went off without a hitch, though. That ending? Totally unplanned. And yes, Twilight's wrath will shake the Heavens. Also, Shining Armor's pretty much been training his whole life for moments like that. Don't count him out, even though as Brawn can tell you, shoulder shots can be lethal.
great chapter and can't wait for the next.
till next time, fellow writer.
Commence read.
Well that doesn't seem like a fun time at a fair.
2022208 twilight has a wraith? that's more than a bit dangerous, if you ask me. I doubt that many could keep a wraith under control, even one of the most powerful unicorns in the world.
Shining! You just left your BLIND sister unprotected! Also, you might want to get that shoulder looked at.
Oh who am I kidding, he will be back in 5 minutes. And he gonna be MAD.
Twilight gonna get her badass one. It gonna be awesome. She gonna get in trouble though. I am hoping for a Celestial beatdown. Either that or a scene like this:
//dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Spitfire_rape.png : Well gals, looks like we got here just in the nick o' time. What's that make us?
: Big Damn Heroes Ma'am.
: Ain't we just?
I will admit, I really hope this story will not have Twilestia involved. I was really liking the exploration of their relationship without romantic love involved.
Hmm just finished reading Hard Reset and now with this one updated it looks like we'll have two fics with some badass Twilight action.
Cheerios!
Missed quotation.
Missed quotation.
Used the wrong quotation at the beginning.
Great chapter. Finally getting actiony. Can't wait for more.
And this is where ponies get pissed.
I almost feel sorry for those fools. Twilight is gonna reduce them to naught but ashes. Even worse if they hurt Cheerilee's unborn foal.
Hell hath no fury like a mother.
excellent chapter as always. as i go, have a pinkie!
2023792
That would be rather interesting. Twilight succumbs to her own version of Nightmare Moon as she does everything in her power for revenge should Cheri' and/or the unborn foal come to harm (or worse). Hmm, is that even possible? Granted, Twilight is the most powerful magic user in current pony society, but still is not a fully empower alicorn.
2023346
Thank you kindly.
2023774
No, a fun time was not had by all.
2023792
I had missed that misspelling entirely.
2024392
If you want to see Celestia in action, then you're gonna love the opening scene in the next chappie. Also, don't worry about Twiliestia. I have something very different in store for that. It's just unlikely to happen in this story. It will also present a new twist for Luna and the rest of the Elements as well.
2024781 2025159
Rest assured, that Twilight will be breaking out some big guns.
2025048
Thanks for catching those. I'll fix them immediately.
2025268
Ooo! A wild Pinkie for my collection!
2025554
No, she's not at alicorn level just yet, though she has her own considerable store of power, too.
2025891
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Going after Twilight's marefriends as easier targets than Twilight herself is such an obvious tactic that Plain Sight must have thought of it. I'll bet there was a "plain clothes," guard-pony watching Cheerilee but since Big Mac reacted as fast as is possible for a pony to react and he was right next to her and it still wasn't enough and the guard-pony was presumably farther away...
Since this little cell was based in the "Griffon-Minotaur Alliance," the prospect of an aerial snatch must have been anticipated as well. So a Pegasus team was presumably also on standby. But I'll hand it to the crazies the double bluff was inspired. The Pegasus team probably assumed that the monster rampage was the distraction to the assassination attempt not realizing that it too was a distraction and were caught completely flat-hoofed.
Not that Plain Sight will accept those excuses. She might even attempt to resign for her "failure."
To Ava and Brute Strength: Congrats, ya just pissed off mama ursa.
My my my, so much action, and a new love interest. This gets better and better.
Let's all hold a minute of silences for the poor fools who has invoked the wrath of Twilight Sparkle for abducting her pregnant marefrind...if they get away unscarred or without somewhat traumatizing experience than I would be somewhat surprised...but I don't think they will get off lightly.
I'm not sure I've ever felt so much pity for a group villains before. They have chosen.....poorly.
2025977
I'm not sure to which part you are referring, but they're relevant to my interests, too.
2027934
Believe it or not, but Celestia and Luna being in town actually helped her in that regard. When the Princesses were around one of the mane-6, they were freed up for other duties. The double-bluff also served a third purpose which will be touched upon next chappie.
2039666
Oh, come on. She's easily ten times worse than an Ursa when it comes to protecting her own.
2042449
Glad you liked it.
2048224
I'm trying to keep in line with the lighthearted tone of the show, so don't expect any gory ends for the various baddies. That's not to say that they won't get their comeuppances. Justice will be served.
2048320
To be fair, they didn't have Indy telling them which cup to use.
2048920 MY POINT STILL STANDS!
2048920
ALL of the parts!
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Why do I see the size of this herd increasing by two.... Plain Sight obviously but its a little weird on Celestia she keeps switchen from motherly love to the horny teacher every teenage boy wanted wait why did I just describe it like that....damn it I got to stop giving up man points for the freaken chicks aahhh well in the end its worth it...at least in bed....What I love cuddling get your mind outta the gutter
i was wondering if cheerilee was raped or not? the wording could go either way'.
Great story though
OH SHIT! OH SHIT! OHSHITOHSHITOHSHIT!! It's....it's a shitstorm of a magnitude I've never previously deemed imaginable... mother of god man, you really DID have everything fall apart all at once. Here's hoping Cheerilee and Shining are alright...
Oh, and I'm now rooting for Plain Sight to join the herd.
Oh shit, stuff's goin' down .
Kidnapped one of Twilight's marefriends? Rage button engaged!
I would like to say, even before reading the chapter that this may possibly be my favorite chapter because Karn Evil 9.
Post-read edit: This was an amazing chapter and I was right to make it my favorite. However, I have a single question. Yous seem like a very well educated person, at least that's what your vocabulary shows. My question is how Trixie tied the curtain with a sheep-shank knot? Usually a sheep-shank is used to shorten a length of rope or to ensure that a weakened portion of rope doesn't make the rope, or whatever it would be holding at the end, come undone. It is also an inline knot so that both of the ends are free. I tried it kook it up with no avail. I also tried to tie it myself, but I couldn't figure out how it could be done. I'm not saying that you didn't do research into the topic (I had to look up what a good portion of the word you use myself) or are stupid, I'm just incredibly anal about knots. I'm sorry if I came off as telling you off.
shit storm mode engaged.
go full power!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Every time I get to this chapter I get a strange urge for some proggy goodness from ELP.
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(End of story) Well. That just happened. Time to go shit some bricks.
An Emerson Lake and Palmer reference for the chapter title, and a Jurassic Park reference in the author's notes. Combine that with a wicked detailed chapter and a redic closer....
Was Cheerilee's story really necessary? The story was doing so well until then, without even that many typos. Why does a lesbian have to hate men and maleness in order to be sexually attracted to other females? Good thing she can't have a colt, cause I'd hate to see her attitude carry over like that.
"Hell has no fury like a woman scorned"
Or a Mare who's Pregnant Marefriend has been fillynapped.
Especially when it's Twilight motherbucking Sparkle.
8215488
Agreed
7040546
years later but this is an entirely valid perspective if she had it, and she technically doesn’t- she only swore off males. she’s even friends w Big Mac. nearly being SAed is a completely logical reason to not want to date guys. Besides, we see SEVERAL other lesbians in the story without this perspective. She also clearly hates when mares do this type of this as well, so it’s not like she’s being hypocritical
11610637
Thank you.
of course! i don’t remember how to uh, reply. But a lot of the criticism i see on your story seems to come from them missing the foreshadowing and the plot you lay out from the very beginning. It’s always a pleasure to reread, (as you no doubt can guess since i am again, rereading this series) since it’s clearly done.
11740105
Aw, thanks. It always feels nice to know that people get so much enjoyment out of my stories. I suppose my stories are the kind that make a lot more sense on the second read-through.
Also, the reply button is the double arrows on the top-right hand corner of a comment.