Rainbow Dash goes to Appleoosa for a delivery from Applejack to her cousin Braeburn, but will Dash be in for more than she expected?
Rainbow Dash goes to Appleoosa for a delivery from Applejack to her cousin Braeburn, but will Dash be in for more than she expected?
Then later...
See what happened there? He was aware Dash was a girl, and then turns around and says he likes males?
Other than that... Well, I'm not a romance buff or anything, but something felt off. Maybe the flow? Good luck, hope you can find someone better suited for romance than me.
Kind of with Mistershield on this, kind of a big 180 to want to see her then turn around and claim he is gay.... or for that matter not see that she is in fact a she, I mean the voice, slender build, delicate muzzle, is kind of a big clue.
To everyone who brought up that mistake, thank you. I hadn't noticed.
hey i told you in school i would look it up and read your story lol. it was good besides the little mistake when you wrote that he wanted to see her but i did like your story
oh ya i wanna read more keep writing. if you dont i might cry
If there is an idea anypony wants in the story, just pm me
I will use any ideas sent in if I can make them work into the story.
honestly? i think you should continue.....its not healthy to not finish a story