"Apostrophe–s" indicates possession or contraction. It does not show plurality.

Unbound: Secret's

Secrets. There are secrets. Not secret's.

i know it, they whisper, talk, laugh's, even cry

Absolutely no idea why you added the apostrophe and "s".

secret's of the mightiest of being's and the holiest of Gods

I don't get it. You know that "gods" doesn't have an apostrophe, so why did you give the other nouns one?

tell me why so i can improve

Capitalize your "i"s.

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UPDATE

YESH

For the most part, they still saw him as the same hyperactive 12 yr old baby dragon.

When you write a story, writing yr is unacceptable. You have to write year.

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i think i forgot to save the change there. Thank you for pointing it out

2233867 AN UPDATE !!
YAY!

BTW I'm lost. What's going on here ?

"The guys naturally always chose his place of residence when they got together and hung out" What does that sentence mean ?

And Who is this mare interested with Big Mac ?

Also that eye scared me a bit back there..

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Party....

Are they anthropomorphic or something? Also... is this set in equestrias version of japan, I mean, rice balls and speech patterns seem like a subbed anime.

Glad to see this finally got updated, good chapter but, now I just have more questions. From how that conversation went with Spike and Fluttershy, I got the imprecation that it they were in Anthro form. That aside I still have many question's that I hope you can answer, sooner rather than later. First, why is Spike now living alone (besides the obvious reason his growing up)? Why are the Mane 6 so distant now? When and how did he join this group he's in? And lastly, who is Peachie Pie(even though the last name gives it away, it still should said where she come from) and this Dream character?

This chapter started off with a deep incite to who Spike is now but, than it just started to get somewhat random. I'm not disliking the story in anyway just, there's some things that I feel need to be cleared up. Especially sense how mysterious you made Spike out to be in the first chapter.

Good chapter, welcome back to the story, good luck and I will be waiting for another good chapter.

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Pinkie Pie is interested with Big Mac ?

And what do you mean by Party ?

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no. it's not one of the mane six.

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So its a secret then ?

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yes, but i think it should be easy to guess who the other mare is.

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yes.

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yes they are anthro. I clearly wrote that at the description. Spike moved due to (SPOILER) and just had to get away from everything, sorry, i cant give you more detail without having to reveal part of the story. And that would just raise more questions. The mane six are not distant. you will find out in around two chapter's later. Why he joined the group will be explained later in the story. Peachie pie got nothing to do with Pinkie, they just share the same name (kinda) there will be more descriptions around the Characters later. This is one fourth of a full chapter, it got too long after my taste so i broke it up into four chapters.

As to who dreamy is, i will post a picture at the bottom. It's the pony form i originally wanted to put in.
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2237515Ok cool! I didn't take another look at the description when the update was posted.
Thanks for clearing that up for me, man, so many guestion's.
Will be waiting for the answers and more in the upcoming chapter's.

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there are three more chapters i need to edit and have proof read. and i'm a lazy person so i will do that later.

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Could you please tell me who is it ?

2237815
it's revealed in the next chapter.

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Yay ~

That little phrase in the description about Spike being able to use magic is what attracted me to this story in the first place, but up until now the story is really confusing and needs more background. If you say that more of it will be revealed in the next chapters, I'll just have to believe you.

And, is it just me, or does this story really look like an anime? The speech patterns, the dialogue, the interactions between characters, their actions, the descriptions, it all looks awfully like an anime.

Also, most of the time you forget to capitalize names (which can get confusing sometimes, as in, are you talking about Dream the pony or dream the dream?) and pronouns.

2239972 Yes. It's made like an anime, and don't worry it will become less and less confusing later on. I can't reveal anything without making some spoilers.

Well, well... That took you some time.

2256781do you really have to rub it in.

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Well, why not?
But now chapter 2 is here and that's what matters, right?

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"when he returned after his two and a half years away" What does that mean ?

This fic has feat. them as anthro ? Sounds good..

Who's this Peachie Pie ?

2235650

What do you mean by "When and how did he join this group he's in?"

2273071
it will be answered.

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BTW this fic currently have 2 chapters right ? Not 3 ? Cuz mine said there's 3 chapter hidden or something like that~

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there is, i accident pressed the publish button before editing so i withdrew it quickly before anyone could see it though.

Oh, yeah. We will stay here, man.

2512661 I'm very sorry. I haven't send it to my editor since he is on vacation. But don't worry. I will have them posted as soon as possible since I like the story too.

This has potential to become a very good story, you only need to get an editor mr. author.
because it has grammatical errors almost everywhere *especially at the second half* with the "than"s that need to be 'then"s
and the flow suddenly breaks up at some parts, and you're being too wordy at dialogue parts ehehehe

hope to read the next chapter soon, and hope for you to find a good editor :D cheers

This is a great story. Nice job my friend.

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What do you mean by "speech patterns" ?

2551872 Don't know how to describe it, just feels... 'foreign' to read it for some reason.

Wait a minute let me get this right. Spike went out with Rarity, but Rarity liked another guy so when Spike told her he loved her she brushed it aside because Dream was liking Rarity back. So she lead Spike on and broke his heart. Also Spike with snails this pie girl and scootaloo are members of a special forces type of team and Spike has been hiding it from his friends so he does not raise suspension. Am I in the ball park?

Found a error, near the XXXXXXXXX's, its suppose to be he,not him. Nice story. Also, Snips is not capitalized the first few times I see them. Same thing with Chip.

You need to get yourself a proofreader to catch all the mistakes if you haven't already got one. And if you have one i would suggest getting rid of him cause he isn't doing a very good job.