I hope you know I'm not exaggerating when I say this You are quite literally the reason I have an account here A friend sent me the link to your 40 oz Bounce Story, and I was shocked. It was brilliant, I didn't think people could write good fanfiction before that. Afterwards I signed up, favorited, and followed you. To this day you amaze me with the quality you put in to each chapter. Long story short, I wanted to say thank you, for everything Best of luck, and keep being awesome
Man oh man, that was the sexiest thing I've read in a very long time. The relentless descriptions of every phase of the sex were so vivid that it didn't take much to picture it. And mad props for not being afraid to use words like cunt and cock - it really accelerated my excitement. I also like how long the story is; I couldn't keep myself from climaxing before the end - my favorite kind of read.
I will say that this is one of the more "porny" clopfics I've seen, especially the dialogue during sex. The way the twins fawn over him and the way his body is glorified, it's like a self-insertion (pun not intended) clopfic. The purpose of the story seems to be a way for the reader to live out their fantasy of screwing twins who talk like porn stars while worshiping his cock.
For what it was, it was very good and I'd like to see the story continue.
I usually don't mind clop... but I don't really like it.... that is until this fic, this is really good! Damn, if this is any indication you are very likely the best at writing clop on this site.
Either way, bravo on a fantastic fic. It is very well written and descriptive, though I have noticed a couple spots where a word was either misspelled or missing from a sentence. It's not important though.
have you guys notice that rumble gets more flank than thunderlane i mean i think there are 2 other stories well he has sex with cloudchaser and flitter
No, Rumble. No it isn't. This is, actually, bizarre and I suspect that Zecora's potion resembles Love Potion No. 9 in certain properties. Well, okay, Number 8.
She wasn’t sure, but she thought she could feel Rumble’s head hitting her womb on every other thrust, and the thought made her shiver.
... No! No no no. NO NO. That means he's hitting her cervix, and that sucks for everyone. That is always, always bad.
I had to add my say to this, I thought it the beginning. I'm just not sure what I could add that hasn't been spoken by other before me. I can say from a female perspective, this is mind-blowing. Many props, or kudos whichever you take for this piece of fiction here. It's like an inside look into the burdgeoning pubescent male mind. Yes, he's a pegasus colt, I'm keeping that in mind, but holy Celestia I had a quite a few eye-bulging, slack jaw moments there. And this is...what, the second chapter? Dear me. *fans neck and face* Pray tell, does this party I've witnessed with poor young Rumble have an end? I both want it to and don't want it too. They didn't just rob the cradle...more like they pulled a train on Rumble. Flitter seemed like she would be the most responsible of the two twins, yet her reactions....she wanted it just as much as her sister. Her expression was just more timid. Good Celestia, this is some heavy clop-worthy smut! Also, from the fem perspective, I speak for myself when I say I totally relate with Flitter's reactions. Not into muscle-heads but any such highly attractive male, the staring, the lip biting, the snuggling closer, the sly touching. True, oh so true. This will make a new home in my favorites.
As if he'd known to do it all along, Rumble leaned forward and kissed her like it was the most natural thing in the world.
Yay!
"Hey, no fair! If she gets a kiss, I want a kiss too!”
Rumble: "Don't worry, there is enough me for both of you."
Even though Rumble had only just kissed her, Flitter looked like a mare in heat – her hair was dishevelled and hanging out oddly from her bow, and her eyes were half-closed alongside her blushing cheeks. She looked like a pony desperately in need of something. “You don’t have to touch me, please, I just want to touch it, and you,” Flitter said, giving several pointed strokes to Rumble’s eager erection.
She must be really needy... Thunderlane, you had one job!
Rumble grasped at the couch wordlessly as he felt in a matter of seconds what amounted to the best thing he had ever felt in his life.
Flitter smiled up at Rumble and licked the length of his shaft seductively, trying her hardest to keep composure given the fire of arousal still burning between her legs. Rumble’s cock was massive, and she wanted nothing more than to devour it completely, choking herself on the virile piece of meat waiting for her attention.
Good girl... Take an example on her, Cloudchaser!
Rumble’s stomach lurched as Flitter took the first few inches of his cock entirely in her mouth. Celestia help me.
: "Oh, I will. After those two cuties finished teaching you the arts of pleasure."
She placed both her hooves at the base of Rumble’s cock and felt him twitch again, the flared head of his dick bobbing before spraying another jet of cum into Flitter’s face. She was happy to catch it, and let out a low moan as the thick creamy load splashed across her forehead and cheek. Cum dribbled out of her mouth from the first spurt she had caught, and more than a bit of it dripped out the side of her mouth and landed on the floor where it mixed obscenely with her own juices.
Both twins bobbed their head up and down several times, once or twice meeting at the front under Rumble’s glans to exchange another sloppy kiss, trails of their saliva coming with them as they returned their attention to the full-attention erection in between them.
It seems Thunderlane trained them well.
He groaned, and felt himself twitch harder than he ever had before, the relative sensation of his cock throbbing being one he was only still getting used to. He felt his balls tingle, an identification to the intangible feeling of something somewhere needing emptying. His shaft surged and his head flared, and before he knew what was happening he was cumming again, this time spraying his load right into Flitter’s desperate wetness.
Yay!
He hoped very much that his brother wasn’t planning on coming home any time soon.
Would Thunderlane rather be jealous or proud of Rumble?
I hope you know I'm not exaggerating when I say this
You are quite literally the reason I have an account here
A friend sent me the link to your 40 oz Bounce Story, and I was shocked. It was brilliant, I didn't think people could write good fanfiction before that. Afterwards I signed up, favorited, and followed you.
To this day you amaze me with the quality you put in to each chapter.
Long story short, I wanted to say thank you, for everything
Best of luck, and keep being awesome
Man oh man, that was the sexiest thing I've read in a very long time. The relentless descriptions of every phase of the sex were so vivid that it didn't take much to picture it. And mad props for not being afraid to use words like cunt and cock - it really accelerated my excitement. I also like how long the story is; I couldn't keep myself from climaxing before the end - my favorite kind of read.
Now I need to change my sheets.
holy fucking imagery batman..
This...this is, bar none, the best clopfic I have ever read. It is so fucking descriptive...I mean..wow..
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I double that.
Damn ponies have better sex than us humans it seems like.
You know, I don't normally fave clop, but damn. This one's pretty good. Hats off to you, sir.
so this is what the Hulk would be like as a pony
"HULK SMASH!!!" (more like "HULK DOMINATION" )
This is very well written and very not.
I will say that this is one of the more "porny" clopfics I've seen, especially the dialogue during sex. The way the twins fawn over him and the way his body is glorified, it's like a self-insertion (pun not intended) clopfic. The purpose of the story seems to be a way for the reader to live out their fantasy of screwing twins who talk like porn stars while worshiping his cock.
For what it was, it was very good and I'd like to see the story continue.
Is this what growing up feels like?
No its called getting laid
The best part about growing up.
THIS. THIS IS AWESOME.
This pic pretty much sums it up.
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Okay... You are an amazing author. This is... this is wow. Just wow. I wish I could write as well as you.
I usually don't mind clop... but I don't really like it.... that is until this fic, this is really good! Damn, if this is any indication you are very likely the best at writing clop on this site.
Is it just me, or is there a lack of a sex tag?
Either way, bravo on a fantastic fic. It is very well written and descriptive, though I have noticed a couple spots where a word was either misspelled or missing from a sentence. It's not important though.
Thunderlane is gonn' be jealous.
Wouldn't some other word like 'plot' work better?
Me: Get the fuck down.
Boner: Lol no.
I came twice while reading this.
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Ooh, you have satisfied my need for CLOP, CLOP, CLOP! Hats off to you!
Even if I didn't clop, this story would be amazing.
I wish I was Rumble... Why can't this be me?!
have you guys notice that rumble gets more flank than thunderlane i mean i think there are 2 other stories well he has sex with cloudchaser and flitter
This is very, very nice
I can't tell you how I cannot contain my jealousy at Rumble getting that much flank, seriously. I am so jealous that I want you to write another one.
No, Rumble. No it isn't. This is, actually, bizarre and I suspect that Zecora's potion resembles Love Potion No. 9 in certain properties. Well, okay, Number 8.
... No! No no no. NO NO. That means he's hitting her cervix, and that sucks for everyone. That is always, always bad.
Ehr.... mah.... GERD! DISH ISH ARESHOME!
Wow, just wow. Your are undoubtedly one of the best writers on this site.
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You know what I find funny, though? Age wise, he's still a colt.
this story get's the luneth spark seal of approval
I had to add my say to this, I thought it the beginning. I'm just not sure what I could add that hasn't been spoken by other before me. I can say from a female perspective, this is mind-blowing. Many props, or kudos whichever you take for this piece of fiction here. It's like an inside look into the burdgeoning pubescent male mind. Yes, he's a pegasus colt, I'm keeping that in mind, but holy Celestia I had a quite a few eye-bulging, slack jaw moments there. And this is...what, the second chapter? Dear me. *fans neck and face* Pray tell, does this party I've witnessed with poor young Rumble have an end? I both want it to and don't want it too. They didn't just rob the cradle...more like they pulled a train on Rumble.
Flitter seemed like she would be the most responsible of the two twins, yet her reactions....she wanted it just as much as her sister. Her expression was just more timid. Good Celestia, this is some heavy clop-worthy smut! Also, from the fem perspective, I speak for myself when I say I totally relate with Flitter's reactions. Not into muscle-heads but any such highly attractive male, the staring, the lip biting, the snuggling closer, the sly touching. True, oh so true. This will make a new home in my favorites.
I just read this again, and it is still one of the sexist stories, and well written sexy stories, on here.
Awesomely done dude, you are a fantastic writer.
I wish I could write sexytimes this good, I'm decent I suppose... *cough cough*
Good job.
1434821 I have to agree with you there, that picture does sum it up.
Yay!
Rumble: "Don't worry, there is enough me for both of you."
She must be really needy... Thunderlane, you had one job!
Good girl... Take an example on her, Cloudchaser!
: "Oh, I will. After those two cuties finished teaching you the arts of pleasure."
Did I mention Flitter is an good girl?
It seems Thunderlane trained them well.
Yay!
Would Thunderlane rather be jealous or proud of Rumble?