Doubts and Turmoil
Starlight laid on her bed deep in thought, tears silently streaming from her eyes. She knew she was no saint but she figured her friends would give her opinion the benefit of the doubt, especially with the Elements Of Harmony at sake, but of course, she was practically ignored in favor of Starswirl the Bearded.
When she thought back, the moment Starswirl had said “once a villain, always a villain”, no one bothered to speak up against that. None of her friends bothered to prove Starswirl wrong. Not Spike, not Fluttershy, not… her.
Why did she think that she ever had a chance? If Twilight was willing to let Starswirl say those type of things when she knew that Starlight has been redeeming herself, what chance did Starlight ever have at being…
No, she won’t even think about it. It was a foolish dream anyway. She should have known better than to feel that way about her and Twilight.
Suddenly she heard a knock at the door and tried her best to wipe her tears. Whoever it was, she refused to look weak in front of them.
Starlight opened the door and saw Twilight standing before her. There was an awkward silence between them, and both were aware of how much tension there was right now.
“What do you want?” Starlight sighed in frustration.
“I just wanted to let you know that the spell’s finished and we’ll be able to use it so we can banish the Pony Of Shadows or Stygian as you pointed out.” Twilight said, nervously rubbing the back of her head.
“Pfft, figures.” Starlight rolled her eyes in annoyance.
“Look Starlight, I get your upset about what happened earlier and I understand if Starswirl can… annoy you but not everypony can be saved.” Twilight told her friend solemnly.
“Not like you’re even gonna try.” Starlight pointed out bitterly.
“I know, but I’m sure Starswirl knows be-“ Twilight began before Starlight interrupted.
“What about the Tree Of Harmony? Whenever it calls us down, it’s for a friendship problem and I have no reason to believe this is an exception. Also, I’m guessing if Starswirl knows best, maybe his mindset about lack of reformation applies to me too huh?” Starlight spoke furiously as hot tears streamed down her face, much to Twilight’s shock and horror, why would Starlight think this? She’d never do that to her?
“Starlight, you know that’s not true.” Twilight spoke pleadingly, hating to see Starlight so upset. Twilight was being entirely honest here, Starlight meant everything to her and Twilight always knew there was good in her and she just needed Starlight to remember that.
“You didn’t seem to care when Starswirl said ‘once a villain, always a villain’. You of all ponies should know that’s not true, but I guess you didn’t care to correct him at all if it meant pleasing your idol.” Starlight kept a furious glare at the alicorn before she began letting tears slip and her expression changed to one of sadness.
“Maybe I should’ve seen this coming. Even after all our time together, we’re not as close as you and the rest of your friends. Today just helped me realize what I’ve been denying, we’re just average friends, not best friends or anything. Our friendship basically formed out of a business deal, yet for some reason I thought we could be more, I fell in love with you for Celestia’s sake!” Starlight let all of her pent up sadness out and let the tears fall. She didn’t even care to acknowledge Twilight’s shocked expression, she needed to let this all out.
“Yes, for some forsaken reason I fell for you, and you know what, I still have! I love you Twilight, but you probably don’t feel that way about me, and I’m fine with that…” Starlight said softly, wiping her tears, “It’s just hard for me to let the truth sink in, y’know.”
“Starlight-“ Twilight tried to speak before Starlight interrupted.
“Twilight, you don’t have to try and convince me that I’m more than just a casual roommate to you. I know the truth now.” Starlight sighed despondently before closing the door to her room.
Twilight couldn’t believe what she just heard, Starlight was in love with her? If Twilight was honest, she was feeling strange about Starlight for a while now. She couldn’t place it but all she knew is that whenever she was with Starlight, it felt really good and there was a certain charm to the unicorn she couldn’t figure out and Twilight wasn’t quite sure what it meant but after hearing Starlight’s confession, it became clearer now.
Twilight was in love with Starlight.
Once she realized this, she immediately flung open the door to Starlight’s room.
“I’m not trying to convince you of anything Starlight, I’m being honest with you. You’re a very special pony in my life, if it weren’t for you, we’d all be Changeling stock. I can’t imagine my life without you in it. You and I share common interests and you can always be a rock for me when I need it. Starlight, what I’m trying to say is… I love you too.” Twilight found herself confessing much to Starlight’s shock.
Starlight couldn’t believe what she just heard, Twilight really was in love with her? Such a confession would normally have her as happy as Pinkie Pie in one of her parties but all she felt was looming doubt. Twilight may say she loves her but could she trust that?
“I don’t know if I can believe that Twilight, I’m sorry.” Starlight began walking off and despite Twilight wanting to follow her, she couldn’t bare to do it. She had already done enough.
Twilight silently teared up as she watched Starlight leave, she loved Starlight and Starlight loved her, but now it was too late for her to realize both of those things. What could she do now?
She broke Starlight’s heart and she doubted it would be repaired so easily.
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Pretty sure Spike nor Fluttershy ever got the chance to speak up against Starswirl though.
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If Twilight had the chance, so did they. Thoughts on this chapter?
To be fair a lot was going on so they protect didn’t even process what he said.
She’s not wrong.
That’s also true, but again it’s a gamble. If there was a way they could trap him temporarily then talking to him would be more reasonable.
In reference to your authors note. No this is good. Keep up the conflict for a bit, let it stew. Honestly I was caught off guard by Starlight's confession and I think you could've gotten away with some stun from Twilight for a lot longer.
Honestly this could go on for a bit. Building tension and whatnot.
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Perhaps Twilight’s realization of love was revealed a little too early but no matter, the tension is still high.
And people wonder why I hate that pompous jerk Star Swirl as much as I do........
Never meet your heroes, amirite?
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Thoughts on everything going on?
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You're right. Still a lot to work with here.
To be honest, the romance feels forced and weakens this story; it’s not needed. Everything else Starlight says is still pertinent and on point.
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trite
trīt
adjective
Amitrite. I like that word.
Or...
Trite pennata
I've always wanted to see Starlight give Starswirl more of a piece of her mind in that episode, like a lot.
maybe a bit of her hoof too... at high speeds...
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Tantabus.
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Sorry man, I’m trying to be realistic to Starlight’s character. Can’t make her a complete mouthpiece.
Once a Villain, allways a Villain eh? Maybe i should take your Cutiemark away.
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Now now, Starlight’s reformed now.
She can just shave his beard in his sleep instead.
I agree that Starswirl's mentality in that episode would have had dire consequences had he been there for Luna's return among others.
On the flip side, It is true that not everyone can be redeemed, nor can all problems be solved with hugs/songs. That's not to say that you can't try, and maybe have Starswirl's plan as a backup in case the Pony of Shadows couldn't be redeemed, better to hope for the best while planning for the worst than going in with the heavy guns from the get-go.
As an example, there are a couple of artists I follow on DeviantArt who wrote variations on GlimGlam, and one thing that stood out to me, that she was treated a lot more seriously, be it her villainy, her backstory, or her reformation/redemption. In this latter case, the words "I'm sorry" are often seen as a magical panacea that precludes all wrongdoing, wipes the slate clean as it were. In these AUs she had to work to prove she was sorry, or in the case of one, she got so used to her apologies fixing everything from cross words to Discordian mischief, she could do no wrong if she apologized. Well one time she did something REALLY bad and was shocked when "I'm sorry" didn't immediately bear fruit.
I know this isn't the point of this story, I just wanted to give some basis for my meandering thoughts (I like to envision my train of thought being driven by Discord on a track that would make M.C. Escher proud).
As to another point I saw a couple commenter's make is that the romance element was pushed a little quickly, sometimes for a short fluff-piece a head-over-heels love is fine, but for what appears to be the start of a longer story, it might have been better to vaguely hint at it, and gradually build to the reveal, perhaps at a comically inopportune time like while facing the pony of shadows.
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Yeah I'm not against a good ship but this isn't about that and weakens her very valid argument against statswirl going against everything harmony has been teaching. She doesn't need to be in love to feel betrayed and leveraging those emotions to tip twilight off her starswirl bandwagon feels wrong.
Also please shave his beard if he aggressively refuses to be benched
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Starlight’s points are meant to be valid, the whole love thing wasn’t meant to manipulate Twilight as she was already being convinced by the other stuff Starlight mentioned. I added that for drama purposes and for mine and hopefully everyone else’s enjoyment. I’ll elaborate more on the validity of Starlight’s argument next chapter.
interesting story so far
Ouch. Looks like Twilight has work to do to fix this one.
Thoughts on the story so far: The first chapter was good and I thought everyone acted as they should, even once the dialogue started shifting to not be the same as the canon lines.
The second chapter is somewhat of a mixed bag. Generally speaking, it's good. Both Twilight and Starlight felt like themselves, just with feelings for each other that was just revealed. I've thought that Twilight x Starlight was one of the most realistic ships, so it makes sense. But, part of it does feels somewhat forced. Not that I don't think it shouldn't be there per se, but rather I think that in a way it's, believe it or not, underutilized. Not in there should be more romance, but rather I don't think the romance factor, since it's there at all, was exploited beyond Starlight just thinking Twilight didn't care about her as much as she thought and Twi wouldn't love Starlight back.
For example, let's say Starlight thought that Twilight, as the Princess of Friendship" was a pony that was (usually) willing to extend her hoof in friendship, and this was even a reason why Starlight fall in love with her at some point. However, seeing Twilight so willing to not do it and just blindly go along with Starswirl's "let's banish Stygian/Pony of Shadows, no questions asked" without really considering Starlight might be on to something (and it turned out she was right and they should have listened to her, but still had a backup plan just in case), could have made Glim Glam wonder if maybe Twilight really isn't the pony she thought she was. Part of this could also be a fault on Starlight's part; she could have gained an idealized view of Twilight that shared her view of giving second chances because Starlight herself had it. if so, Starlight seeing one and for all (at least in Starlight's eyes) that Twilight isn't that willing to give second chances could have been Starlight doubt if she really knew Twilight, or fear that she fell in love with an idealized version of Twilight that isn't how she really is. Glim Glam also thinking of Twi didn't care about her nearly as much as she thought could have been another factor. There are other angles that could be used or added (such as Starlight wondering if Twilight would have ever considered reforming her if Twi had been able to overpower her in the season 5 finale), and what I did say is kinda raw, but I think what I brought up gives the gist of what I meant.
All that said, this story is still ongoing and looks good, so I'll stick to see how this story ends up going. I an curious to see how you will have things play out.
How interesting... grabbing my popcorn
Honestly I think Twilight needs to be rejected right at this moment. It extends the amount of time she has no choice but to think about the incident, and that's what a lot of people need when their biases are so entrenched. Otherwise she could try to sweep the whole thing under the rug....until the rug develops black mold.
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Starlight fan I imagine. Glad to see you looking out. We’ll see what happens to them.
I'm very much invested in how this is going already, can't wait to see what Starswirl gets when it's time for his comeuppance.
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Not really though.
I don't think Spike was even close enough or had enough time.
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I’m glad you said that, because I haven’t watched the show in a while and thought I remembered wrong.
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That is interesting. I wish that was just more in stories.
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Honestly, I kind of feel the same way about sunset shimmer. So I feel you.
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If you like, I could DM you some of those arts. I don't want to do it here as it would take away from the author to be sharing other's work.
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Considering the reason she thought he could be redeem was because she got his story and villain thing didn't make sense. Truthfully I don't even get where starswirl got the idea the guy was planning something bad Considering for all they knew he could have planning a big surprise.
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How’s the story so far?
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Good personally I hope that neither twilight or starswirl get off the hook that easily considering the truth comes out and twilight and everyone does their thing and not even an actual apology just an admission that he owes a lot of apologies and twilight once again fails to say 2 little words that have so much power. Considering she was too busy hero worshipping starswirl to notice that he had huge all about him ego which made rainbow ego look small in comparison.
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Sure