That author's note is perfect.

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I know, right?

Big Macintosh and Sugar Belle took a break from the dancing patio.

It turns out the patio was quite the indefatigable danseuse.

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Good story. A few minor things I'd probably change, though.

He must a broke her heart -> He must of broke her heart

I've got her sacked out on some hay bails -> I've got her sacked out on some hay bales

I am. What Mac an I been doing behind her back? Taint right, an taint fair to her. -> I am. What Mac an' I been doing behind her back? T'aint right, an' t'aint fair to her.

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Fixed. Thank you!

Feels

She grabbed his hoof and looked him in the eyes.

"I wanna watch you fuck Applejack!"

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"I'mma punch that mare in the box!"

This phrases needs to be used in more stories.

I'm making the prediction now: This will end with Rainbow getting punched in the box.

Omg. That ending is just *too* perfect

This is.......... an interesting topic
(btw.... WHAT DOES KNOCKING TACOS MEAN???)

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scissoring

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He must a broke her heart -> He must of broke her heart

Please no. Sadly the confusion of "must've", "could've", "would've", etc. with the incorrect "must of", "could of", "would of" is far too common for me to point it out every time, but I cannot let someone give it out as advice to others without stepping in. I see it's actually been corrected to "must have" in the story, which is also fine. (If AJ had been speaking, she might've said "must'a," which is closest to what was originally written, but this is Rainbow's line.)

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I really do have the smartest fans.

Is it just me, or did Sugar Belle accept the fact that her soon-to-be husband was fucking her own sister, like, way too easily? Am I missing something here? I expected a lot of screaming, rage, and the like.

No really, did I miss something? I mean I know it's a story to make you horny, but...

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"I was an only foal growing up so... I find it fascinating and I'm curious to see it."

I swear, if she pukes in my bed again I'mma punch that mare in the box!

DAMMIT RAINBOW! I'mma punch that mare in the box!"

very nice bookending or whatever you want to call this repetition of almost the same line.

And I dunno how you plan on broaching the subject with him..."

Nothin´, but nuthin' beats a full frontal assault.

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In the comedy profession, we refer to that as a Callback.