Chapter 9
~Felix’s POV~
I sat behind Scootaloo on Fluttershy’s back as we walked down the streets of Ponyville. True to Scootaloo’s tiredness, the streets were starting to clear out and not many ponies were still outside. The ones that were, were either headed home or packing up so that they could head home. I had curled up and was starting to doze off when I noticed that we weren’t headed for Fluttershy’s cottage. The apple orchard that was coming into view proved that. “Um, excuse me... Fluttershy?”
Fluttershy stopped and turned her head to look at me over Scootaloo’s sleeping form. “Oh, um... Yes Felix?”
I pointed back over to the apple trees with a claw. “Why are we headed back to Applejack’s farm? I thought we were headed to your home?”
Fluttershy’s eyes darted back and forth while she turned away. “Oh, um well.... I thought that we could stop by the Cutie mark Crusaders’ clubhouse and pick up the stuff that I gave Scootaloo to... well.... take care of you.”
I blinked a few times before facepawing. “That makes absolute sense.” Man I’m dumb today. First getting caught in a tree, then I get drugged, expose the fact I can talk and ALMOST get Scootaloo’s secret out in the- I felt my back clench in fear and turned to look at Scootaloo. OH CRAP! All of Scoot’s stuff is in the clubhouse! If Fluttershy finds it, she’s SCREWED! We passed through the gates to the orchard and I looked at the approaching farm house. “But uh, Fluttershy? Wouldn’t it make more sense to come and grab this tomorrow when Scoots is awake to help?”
Fluttershy stopped and put a hoof to her chin for a moment. “Well, you do have a point. It would be a little hard to carry both you and Scootaloo while holding anything she left there.”
I inwardly shouted in triumph while I nodded. “Exactly, so let’s head on to your house an-”
“Miss Fluttershy?” We both turned to look at the source of the voice and saw Big Mac the burger pony standing on the porch. “What are you doing here?” I quickly started to act like a normal cat and curled up next to Scootaloo. Oh for the love of- Just what were the odds!?
Fluttershy started to stammer as she looked over at Big Mac. “Oh, um... w-well, I was j-just coming over to pick up s-some of the things I gave S-S-Scootaloo from the Clubhouse.”
The large red pony smiled a little before trotting up next to us. “Would ya’ll mind if ah helped?” Fluttershy smiled a little before the two of them began moving towards the clubhouse. I noticed the large farmer eyeing me and Scootaloo before he looked at Fluttershy. “Miss Fluttershy? If ya don’t mind me askin’, why do ya have Applebloom’s friend and a cat on yer back?”
She looked back at Scoots and sighed. “Well, we and the girls were talking to her about her pet cat Felix, and we found out that her parents accidentally locked her out of her house and that she’s been staying inside her and her friends’ clubhouse. So I decided that it would be fine to let her and Felix stay with me until her parents get back.”
Big Mac raised an eyebrow and nodded. “That so?” He looked over at me. “Ah was wonderin’ what had Winonna so riled up. Guess this explains that and why some of our apples have been disappearing’ lately.” Fluttershy looked shocked and glanced back at Scootaloo as Mac kept talking. “Not that ah can be mad at her. She was just tryin’ ta feed herself.”
The rest of the walk over to the clubhouse was silent aside from a few crickets chirping. Fluttershy was either looking at the path, or back at Scootaloo. Big Mac was stoic as ever after he connected the dots on where some of his apples were being taken. It was rather intimidating, frankly. I was starting to get legitimately worried that he’d punt me into the unknown with how large he was.
That wasn’t all though. This guy was clearly smarter than he looked and acted. I’d figured out that Scootaloo had been staying inside that clubhouse for almost two years now. The whole, ‘I was locked out of my house for a while and needed something to eat’ wasn’t going to fly very well. It’s one thing if it’s just for a little bit and it stops, but it’s another thing entirely if food’s been going missing for two years.
It wasn’t long before we arrived at the clubhouse and I hopped off of Fluttershy’s back. She called out for me to wait, but I kept the normal cat routine and went inside anyways. When I got inside I could only sigh and move over to the cubby that Scootaloo hid all her stuff in. Sorry Scoots, but I could see this falling apart from a mile away. And I have a feeling that Fluttershy will lead to a better outcome than whatever form of social services is in this world finding out.
As Fluttershy and Big Mac came into the building, I jumped into her cubby and curled around the photo of her parents. I stayed there until Fluttershy and Big Mac passed where I was. They looked around a bit until Fluttershy asked Big Mac to help with the cat supplies. As he went upstairs and Fluttershy stayed in the main room, I let out a meow and drew Fluttershy’s attention. “Oh, there you are Felix. Why’d you run off like that.”
I looked over at the photo and motioned my head towards it. Fluttershy tentatively reached in and pulled out me and the photo. I took a quick glance at the stairwell and was pleased to see that Big Mac was still moving stuff around upstairs before I spoke. “It’s a picture of Scootaloo’s parents. I figured that it’d be something she’d want to keep around.”
Fluttershy blinked a few times in shock before smiling softly. “I see. I’ll just take this with us back to the cottage and give it to her when she wakes up.” As Fluttershy tucked the picture under her wing, I mentally facepalmed and hopped onto her back again. Okay..... not the outcome I thought would happen. I looked down at Scoots and sighed sadly. I know I shouldn’t betray her trust, but she’s just a kid. She needs someone to look after her who isn’t a feline that’s hardly half her size.
It wasn’t long after that Big Mac came down from the upper floor and was holding all of Scoot’s cat supplies (AKA My Stuff) on his back and nodded at Fluttershy. “Ah found all of the supplies. Ya find anything down here?”
Fluttershy stammered a little before nodding. “Y-yes, I did. Just a few of Scootaloo’s things. They’re not too heavy so I’ll be fine.” Big Mac nodded with a small smile before we all left the building. On the way out, Mac also grabbed Scootaloo’s scooter from under the clubhouse. It seemed almost impossible for him to carrying so much stuff. I mean he was holding my climbing post, food, and other stuff on his back and was still able to carry Scoot’s scooter in his mouth.
The walk back to the entrance of the farm again was silent. When we passed by the main house, Applejack was wondering why Big Mac was out and about, but took Fluttershy’s explanation on why she was here with him.
I could have sworn I saw a mischievous glint in the farmer’s eyes before she let Mac leave the farm. “Ya’ll be nice ta her now Mac!” Big Macintosh grumbled under his breath a little and Fluttershy blushed.
When they got off of the farm property and were a ways down the road, Mac spoke up. “Miss Fluttershy, have you tried explaining to her that we’re just friends? Ah’ve gotten tired of attemptin’.”
Fluttershy sighed a little at that and nodded. “Yes Big Mac. I have, and she still says that it’s nonsense and we’re perfect for each other.” Fluttershy and Big Mac didn’t say anything after that, and it was in no time at all that we were back inside Fluttershy’s cottage. Fluttershy looked back at Big Mac after he helped get everything inside. “Thank you for the help Big Mac.”
Big Macintosh nodded and turned to leave and gave her a curt nod. “Anything for a friend Miss Fluttershy.” With that, Mac left the house and I was left in the living room with Fluttershy and a sleeping Scootaloo.
I started to rub the back of my head and looked over at Scoots. “So where is she going to sleep?”
Fluttershy smiled and started up the stairs. “She’ll be in my room Felix. You can sleep in there with her if you want to.” I followed her up and hopped onto the bed as she tucked Scootaloo in.
I looked up at her and cocked my head to the side a little. “If she’s taking your bed, where are you sleeping?”
Fluttershy started to walk out of the room and gave me a soft smile. “I’ll be downstairs on the couch. Don’t worry about me Felix, I’ll be fine.” I would have argued further, but when you’re still a foot tall and covered in tricolored fur, you tend to have less sway in arguments.
I sighed and curled up next to Scootaloo, who draped a hoof over me as soon as I did. “Alright. We’ll see you in the morning Fluttershy.” Fluttershy nodded before blinking. She started giggling to herself and walking back into the room as I cocked my head to the side again. “Something funny?”
She pulled out the picture of Scootaloo’s family and placed it on the dresser. “No, I just realized I had forgotten about this.” Fluttershy leaned over and gave Scootaloo and myself both a peck on the head. “Good night you two.”
I smiled up at her and nuzzled into Scootaloo. “You too Fluttershy.” I let out a small sigh as Scootaloo hugged me a little closer and slept soundly.
I wonder why she was so calm around me. From what I’ve been told of her, she’s normally shy and timid around others, but she acted like she could talk to anyone when she interacted with me and Scootaloo. Maybe it’s cause I’m a cat. I seem to forget that sometimes.
I closed my eyes and drifted to sleep with Scoots to my back, her stomach pressed against me. Eh... I’ll think about it later.
~Angel’s POV~
I grumbled to myself as the elevator raised back into my house. “Dang cat. We were so close to catching him, and he manages to slip away just as we nabbed him.” I flopped onto my couch and rubbed my face, attempting to relieve the stress this idiot seems to be causing. “How did he even manage to bite Owlowiscious in the first place?”
I looked out the window of my house and sighed. “And the caretaker isn’t even in her bed... wait.” I got up and took a closer look. Sure enough, the bed was not occupied by the yellow pegasus, but instead- “You’re kidding me.”
Hopping out of my house, I quickly got onto my roof and saw that blasted furball sleepin with the smaller orange pegasus that took him away the first time he was here.
I hopped back down to my front door and opened it before looking back up at the bed. “Well then Felix, it seems I’ll be talking to you tomorrow. And you had better answer all my questions with what I want to hear.” I stepped into my house and quickly got to the second floor bedroom.
I flopped onto my bed and stared at the ceiling with a scowl. “Or I’m going to be one angry bunny.”
So, this updated but it did not email me that it has updated... I think something is wrong with the site.
3701315 possibly. I mean the entire layout was edited so it's possible that something else was tampered with on accident. Maybe you could notify one of the admins.
I just notified them. 3701318
It was lag.... ugh. 3701318
Awezuuuuuum!
DANG, well it wasn't reeeeally worth the wait to be honest. But it sure as hell was a goos chap!
3701408 as I have said many a time, Sorry for da wait.
You know, you keep me away from sleep with this chapter. It's two in the morning... but it was totally worth it!!! I hope the next chapter is really coming sooner^^
Ugh, I hate when that happens!
3701523 I know right? I reach for the coffee mug and blam, I have paw and a craving for hamburgers and lasagna.
3701433 It's 8:30pm over where I'm at.
MIEN GOTT! AN UPDATE! I like it.
Hee, fun story! I was worried when it started out but most of the cliche traps have been deftly sidestepped.
And finally in the next chapter Angel gets to stop worrying that Felix is gonna rat them out, and that they'll all have to get jobs and pay taxes. Because Felix seems like a total bro where the privacy of others is concerned. And he's a special extradimensional cat so nopony else would suspect normal animals are just leading them on for free food and cuddles.
Yep it'll be fine, long as Angel doesn't do something stupid like try to threaten him. ...yeah Angel's going to do just that isn't he.
it LIVES! MWUHAHAHAHA
3701906 I'm not sure what to give you. A brofist, or a brohoof..... aw screw it, HAVE BOTH!
3701986 Thank you for the complements. In all truth, when I first made this story, I had absolutely NO idea what I was doing nor did I expect such massive results from just one chapter. And just so you know, Taxes and lounging are the least of Angel and co.'s issues.
3702768 You make a valid point. Most people would think that asking for help would be the first thing you would do. BUT, when you are not thinking rationally, or in Felix's case at all, the thought of simply being diplomatic and asking for help simply doesn't come to mind.
Angry bunny... RUN!
Huh, I was looking through my favorites earlier today checking for updates since the site seems to be glitching and not showing updates on stories and thought it would be neat if this one chose to update sometime since a few that haven't in a while did. Nice to see this one is still alive or back alive.
3702882 Still alive, I'm not dying anytime soon.
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As I read this, 5 hours later, I looked at the clock, and it was 8:30 PM .
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This chapters a triumph. I'm making a note here: 'Huge Success'!
It's hard to overstate my satisfaction
And it is.. Still Alive!
Damn... I had some lyrics about fim fiction, authors and chapters that takes to long to update, but I can't make it fit properly .
Oh well ... Nice chapter, even if the wait was long
I am now addicted to this story...
Great job, and I hope Angel doesn't skin Felix alive, you never know what bunnies are up to. They are evil...
Welcome back! Good chapter... though I was a *bit* distracted by my brother playing GTA V... Worth it.
Well this can either go like this:
Or this:
Looking forward to it in either case.
.... Kick his ass, Felix.
3703353 I am with you there. My friend used to have a pet bunny but she had to sell it. I'd rather not go into details
3707182 In response to your multiple reviews of my chapters, I have something to say.
Thank you.
You have pointed out aspects of my character that were flawed and needed improvement, thus showing me what I can do to make the story better. When I was writing and watching just how much attention the story was getting, I couldn't help but feel something was off the entire time. If the feeling is lessened at all from this aspect of my character being fixed, then you have my utmost gratitude.
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First, could you respond to my comments on the same chapter if it isn't too much trouble? For some reason, I only get notification of a response if it's given on the same chapter I left the comment on. Otherwise, I never get a message about any replies (which happened here).
Anyway, I can see your point, but that only goes so far. At the beginning it doesn't really work as he thinks he's dreaming, so revealing he can talk shouldn't even be an issue for him as he shouldn't even care. After that point it still doesn't make much sense because there's pretty much no reason not to. He's seen how friendly they are, and he knows they could probably help him, but he still goes out of his way to hide himself, only to fail completely later on. Revealing, to no one's surprise, that he could have pretty much avoided all the trouble by just talking from the start.
That said, I do apologize for how harsh I might have been in my comments. You have to understand, I've seen way too many stories that do the exact same thing, with the main character pretty much being forced to act in a ridiculous way by the plot in order for the story to advance. Those stories also tend to be like this one, in that they have very interesting ideas and tend to be rather well written (and as much as I complain, you are a good writer). My main problem is that the story could just as easily advance to the same point without having to make the characters act in a nonsensical manner.
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Like I said before, as harsh as my comments likely seem, I really do want to see you make this story great. As I've told other authors, I only go out of my way to really look at a story and leave criticism when the story interests me and I feel it could be great. This story has a concept which grabbed my attention the moment I so much as saw the story image, and I knew it could be awesome. When I saw this story going down the same path as those other stories I mentioned (characters acting in ways that seemed to only be done to allow the plot to advance) I decided to point out everywhere I saw this happen to the best of my ability. Not because I want you to think you're a bad author or anything like that, but because I want you to understand that you can use multiple paths to reach the same destination. In this case, you can have the plot reach a certain point without having to force the characters to act OOC to make it happen.
For example, you obviously needed the meeting with the princesses to happen, as they're the characters who would logically be able to help him. The problem here is that Felix (along with several other characters) seemed to require an Idiot Ball in order to make the meeting happen, basically turning the entire thing into an Idiot Plot. Here, read this description of idiot plot from TVTropes:
Do you see how this pretty closely fits the plot leading to meeting the princesses? Everything up to that point required basically everyone acting in ways that don't make sense. The meeting with the princesses could have occurred without making Felix and the others act dumb, and it could have been done without losing the comedy. In fact, the way it was done in the story actually takes away some of the humor by giving some pretty terrifying implications, such as Twilight not caring that she performed tests on someone against their will, the others not calling Twilight out on not even apologizing after the discovery, and Scootaloo not saying anything to protect her friend.
How else could it have been done? Well, here's one example. When Twilight was about to take away Felix, he could have said something sarcastic at the last minute to not only mess with Twilight, but also since he knew there was pretty much no other choice. Like when they tried to force him into the carrier, he could have turned to her and said something along the lines of, "Are you trying to stuff me in a box like a common pet? What's next, a collar? I have rights to you know! Oh, and just so you know, I can talk as well." Just something like this at any point in the story. After that, he could have just talked with Twilight and told her the type of cat he was without having to suffer through humiliating tests against his will. And the catnip part (which, I will admit, was absolutely hilarious! ) could still happen. Just have Twilight get back at him for messing with her by tossing the mouse toy which he would end up biting out of instinct, only for her to find out that it had the catnip inside.
In any case, this comment is getting ridiculously long by now, so I'll stop here. Just to be clear, I don't think you're a bad writer (in case that's what you got from my comments, in which case I apologize), and I don't think this story is crap. I think it's a story with an interesting (and rather unique) concept, but is currently held back by the ways the characters are acting. The only thing left for me to say is that I hope at least one of my comments gives you at least some help with your story so that at least those comments would have been useful. With that said, I wish you luck with the rest of your story, and feel free to send me a PM if you want to toss some ideas back and forth.
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You say that now, but wait until the pony IRS decides all the cute little woodland critters owe 3 years in back taxes. Shit gonna get reeeeeal
Angel should get his little jerk tail kicked for being such an impudent little rodent. I really hate this bunny! Sorry but it's my opinion.
A fitting song:
Predator cat is predator. Angel Bunny should realize that. Maybe have a scene where Felix demonstrates who's the apex predator of the house?
talking cat talking cat does what ever a talking cat does.
3709984 everyone hates that bunny
3720336 except Fluttershy. She smothers him in love.
3720804 true.
3739600 First off. Twilight was in her basement. I stated as such.
Secondly. Grammar.
3703685 so true
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So which one do you think it will be?
3940867 I think it should be like this...
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Eigs9m_gIaA
LOL jking... But really it could go either way... I hope nether happens in the end but at the same time somesort of conflit has to happen... They will undoutedly Catnap him....
And then be like What the Buck?! I don't you not to talk to ponies!
And untill they figure out that he is from another would and all the ponies still don't know Animals can talk to ponies then they will be fine... THOUGH the way the story is set up its kinda full of holes... In the beginning Angel Bunny said to the others that "This cat can comunicate with Ponies!" And later its made out like Animals have the ability to have always talked with Ponies but just never have...
So in the end I'm a little confused by this....
3943288 I'd hope so
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I think the difference here is that Felix can talk to ponies, whereas normal animals can only talk among themselves. And they don't want the ponies learning that they are intelligent enough to communicate.
Though you'd think that Angel using sign language to communicate with Fluttershy would give the secret away, too...
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And then Angel was cat food.
And there was much rejoicing.
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The following is a terrible parody of Still Alive from the game Portal. The writer takes no responsibility for any discomfort or horror that results from the disregarding of this warning.
This was a triumph. I'm making a note here, huge success.
It's hard to overstate my satisfaction.
FimFiction, we do what we can, because we must.
For the good of our readers, except the ones who ragequit.
And there's no sense crying over every mistake, we'll just keep on writing 'til we run out of cake.
And the stories get done and you make some neat fun
For the readers who are... still around.
We're not even angry. We're being so sincere right now.
Even though you took our work and burned it.
Left red marks everywhere. It really was quite a mess.
Anyway, we love critics
Even if the truth hurts.
Now these corrected files make a beautiful chapter
And we're out of drafting, we're publishing now
So I'm glad I got burned, think of all the concern
For the readers who are... still around.
Go ahead and read it. Let me know what you think, my friends.
Maybe you'll find errors I have missed.
Hopefully not.
I'd be embarrassed, so no, fat chance.
Anyway, enjoy the plot, it's got quite the sharp twist!
Look at me still talking while there's typing to do
When I look at these words I get so many ideas
There is editing to do, there are chapters to be made
For the readers who are... still around
And when it's finished you're all... still around.
Seriously, why are you... still around.
I feel quite pressured with you... still around.
The story's over, so don't be... still around.
If I promise a sequel, will you be... still around.
Still around... Still around?
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You made my day with this, the mixed feelings of awesomeness and horribleness is a strange one, but I'd say you did a pretty good job there .
3949647 Hmm... I really don't think thats it... Though you do have some valid points. I think that in this story all the animals can comunicate with Ponies... But just hide the fact that they can... And that would be a resin that they are trying to stop him from talking to the ponies. Also why he mimed to Fluttershy in the first place instead of saying things in the beginning when he first arrived at her cottage... To me it makes sinece that way... Though we will have to see what comes from it...
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You just made my day one to remember. It had already been awesome, but this is just wow.
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To which section are you referring? To the horrible parody of Still Alive or the subtle - or maybe not so subtle - reference to a hilarious movie?
Or is it both?
3951646 Both. Definitely both. Now Sir Felix the Furred must get off his furry rump and start working on the next chapter again.
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Yes. Please do. Before I must taunt you.
And you don't even want to know what happens if you persist in not writing.
Because then I'd have to taunt you a second time.
3951760 MOAR
Moar?
*pokes with stick*