The Fading Light:The Surprise Attack
Twilight stared at the colt held against the wall, realizing she recognized him.
"Wait...Time Turner?" she asked.
"Ah, so you remember me! Odd, nopony else has. Must have something to do with that ripple I came across earlier. Oh look there it is now." he said and as if on cue a wall of blue energy appeared between them.
"What...is that?" Twilight asked.
"Something that shouldn't be there. A curtain between realities. You see Twilight, I am of your realm of existance but have crossed over into this reality by mistake. A reality where Celestia lost to Nightmare Moon and her mind is warped beyond repair." He paused for a moment
"She is a dark ruler here Twilight Sparkle and I fear that the meddling of one of your friends is causing the realities to meld into one another." He explained quickly, glancing around as the sounds of keys rattling rang out throughout the dungeon.
"You need to find the source of the abnormality and make it stop." he finished, turning his gaze to the door on his side as it opened up. An Alicorn whose coat was as black as a solar eclipse entered, followed by several Lunar guards.
Twilights eyes widened as she realized the Alicorn was Princess Celestia.
"I will ask you one last time. How did you get here?" she asked Time Turner.
"You know, its actually a funny story." he laughed, giving her his best smile.
"I was walking along, minding my own business and walked straight into this curtain of time energy. Now I was certain walking through it would be the end of me but instead I wound up in your chambers, funny story right?" he chuckled, groaning as one of the guards slammed a hoof into his gut.
"ENOUGH JOKES!" Celestia yelled.
"STOP IT!" TWilight screamed. Celestia paused, turning around slowly and spotting Twilight through the curtain
"Impossible..." the alicorn mumbled in shock.
"RUN!" Time Turner yelled, grabbing something in his teeth from under his tie. The strange object whirred to life and Twilights restraints came loose. Twilight blinked and ducked as a Lunar guard launched itself towards her, the unicorn deciding to make herself scarce and ran up the stairs with two guards on her tail.
Twilight froze as Celestia appeared in front of her, the darkness attached to her coat seeming to melt away slightly as she shook on the spot.
"I don't know how you are alive Twilight...but you must run...please...I beg of you...AHHH" Celestia screamed, clutching her head.
"I could not bear to lose you again Twilight...NOW RUN!" She screamed, pushing the mare past her and throwing a bolt of magic at one of the advancing guards, the second tackling her to the ground.
Twilight bit her lip, wanting desperately to help the Princess, even if she was of another reality, she was still Princess Celestia and she still cared deeply about her. Enough to risk her own life for her.
Thats right...she does care about me...and Rainbow...How could I have been so stupid?! Twilight berated herself, gasping as one of the guards tackled her over the edge of the bridge they stood upon.
"TWILIGHT NO!" Celestia screamed as the unicorn slammed into the ground, her eyes snapping open, Pinkie Pie brushing against her and walking past her. Twilight felt dizzy, sick, confused, lost. So many words ran through her head she simply fainted.
"TWILIGHT!" Rainbow called out, rushing to her side, only to be tackled by Gilda, the Gryphon tearing out her wings. The sounds of her friends screams were enough to wake Twilight from her momentary slumber, the unicorn scrambling to her hooves.
"no...STOP IT!" Twilight yelled, unleashing as much magic as she could muster, the entire room freezing in its tracks. Twilight decided to take action this time, pinning Gilda to the ground, focusing her magic on keeping the Gryphon pinned, the rest of her magic reaching out to Rainbow and repairing her wings almost instantly.
"Twilight, you need to calm down!" Shining Armor yelled over the rush of power filling the air. She glanced around the room, seeing the worried looks of her friends, most of all, the look on Rainbows face.
Twilight let go of her magic and collapsed into her friends hooves. She reached up, placing a hoof on her friends cheek.
"Rainbow..." she managed to say before passing out.
Celestia was the first to react.
"Guards, restrain Gilda, escort our guests to their chambers." she said quickly.
"We will finish out discussion later my friends, for now I must tend to my subjects." she offered them before they could argue. Celestia quickly made her way to Twilight and Rainbow Dash.
"I feel weird...like..." Rainbow said quietly.
"This has happened before." Pinkie Pie interupted.
"But it hasn't, not exactly." she continued.
"Pinkie Pie. I trust you had something to do with this?" Luna asked softly.
"um...maybe?" the party pony said almost in a whisper.
"I remember...I killed Gilda...but Twilight stopped me...she was thrown in the dungeons...ugh...my head hurts..." Rainbow mumbled.
"What in th' hay are ya talkin 'bout?" Applejack asked.
"I apologize Applejack. Only ponies strongly intuned with the magics that be are aware of the situation. Rarity may come to realize it herself in a moment due to the power of her magic but as an earth pony it seems you are not connected to the magical spectrum. Though you Pinkie Pie, have some explaining to do." Luna said as she turned to the pink earth pony. Pinkie Pie opened her mouth to speak, quickly closing it.
"Lemme guess, a Pinkie Promise?" Applejack asked with a flat look.
"Its a promise I haven't made yet but I still can't break it." Pinkie explained quickly.
"That would explain the strange headaches I've had of late. I thought it merely a symptom of my passing..." Celestia sighed.
"Maybe Twi knows something?" Rainbow suggested, still cradling the unicorn in her hooves. Celestia smiled.
"Rainbow, why don't you take her to your chambers so she can rest? I will handle things from here." Celestia said with a smile.
"A-Are you sure?" Rainbow stammered, her cheeks flushed.
"Positive, now go. She deserves a friendly face when she awakens. I sense she has been through quite an ordeal." Celestia smiled. Rainbow blushed and hefted the unicorn onto her back.
"ok then..." Rainbow mumbled, guards surrounding her as she made her way to her chambers. Celestia watched her go, waiting until she was out of the room to turn her attention back to Pinkie Pie.
She stood, prepared to question the Earth Pony, suddenly finding herself on the ground with her sister and several ponies hovering over her.
"Sister!" Luna panicked. She remembered this. It had happened at least twice, perhaps more? It was so confusing. All she knew was that she wasn't going to lose her sister. She had more than lost Twilight to Rainbow, but that was something she was willing to sacrifice.
She had no say in that matter anyway. She called for the guards who carefully hefted the weary Princess of the sun onto a stretcher, pulling it along, Luna following after them.
"Elements of Harmony, I beg of you to get as much information from Pinkie Pie as you can. I must tend to me sister." Luna said quickly before they were gone. All eyes turned to Pinkie Pie, demanding an explanation.
"I-I wish I could tell you girls but...I Honestly don't know myself." Pinkie Pie said sadly. The light seeming to fade from the room, the girls huddling close to each other to avoid the growing darkness, a pair of glowing eyes peering at them through the darkness.
"Of course you don't. But I do."
Floating.Darkness.Cold, falling...falling...
"Rainbow!" Twilight screamed as she sat up, panting heavily.
"Hey, i'm here Twi, relax." Rainbow said softly, nuzzling her cheek. Twilight sighed softly, tossing her hooves around the alicorn.
"I...I..." Twilight sobbed. Rainbow wrapped her hooves and wings around the lost unicorn.
"Shhh, its ok Twi'. Just take a sec and tell me when your ready, 'kay?" Rainbow said soothingly, running her hoof up and down Twilights back. Twilight nodded wearily, inhaling Rainbows scent. The smell of fresh rain mixed in with Applejacks trees and something else...lilac? Twilight giggled quietly.
"Were you cuddling me?" Twilight asked, sniffling quietly.
"Shut it egghead, you freaked me out back there." Rainbow mumbled. The two sat there, practically clinging to one another.
"I'm sorry Rainbow...I just lost myself...I think I'm going insane. I've repeated this day.."
"Three times, right?" Rainbow asked. Twilight blinked.
"Wh..huh? How could you know that? I was the only one who remembered before..." Twilight groaned, putting a hoof against her head.
"I don't know Twi'. When you flipped out all these memories just popped into my head. Applejack didn't seem to remember anything. But mom and Luna did. Pinkie Pie knew something though" Rainbow explained. Twilight gasped, holding her head in her hooves.
"Time Turner..he said...there was a tear between realities. That somepony on this side was causing it." Twilight mumbled. Rainbow rested her hooves over Twilight.
"Stop playing detective for five minutes, ok? We'll figure this out together Twi'. Right now you need to relax before you blow a brain cell or somethin." Rainbow chuckled, though her worry was obvious in her voice. Twilight gave a sigh of defeat, leaning against her friend.
"I just don't know what to think anymore Dash...I feel so lost..." Twilight all but whimpered against her chest.
For the longest time she had been their strong powerful leader. Here she sat, reduced to a whimpering filly. Just what the heck did you see Twi... Rainbow thought to herself, kissing the unicorns forehead gently.
"Twilight..." she whispered, the lavender unicorn raising her head and looking into her eyes.
"Aw what a touching moment." a voice rang out. The two mares spun, finding a cloud of darkness hovering before them. Slowly it began to take shape. Slowly four shapes appeared before them, two more in front.
"no way..." Rainbow mumbled. Before them stood a pitch black Celestia and next to her stood Nightmare Moon.
"So this is where you have been hiding, my dear little Niece."
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Its been a while,
Im confused and have forgotten the whole storyline and I do not understand what has happened and now I have to read it all over again!!
well, horseapples.
Can someone kindly elaborate what happened?
3586732 Twilight was given a second chance. It ended in her tackling Rainbow which ended in her being arrested. While in the dungeons she came across Time Turner normally known as our Beloved Doctor, who warned her that someone is tampering with the fabric of reality which has begun to fall apart and now a Nightmare Moon from another reality has invaded THIS version of Equestria and has found The Mane Six.
3586740 Oh yeah, forgot about that one
Thanks for letting me now, makes things much more clear. Try updating them frequently so I wont be able to forget the story line 
3586756 I would love nothing more than to be able to constantly update, but life gets in the way. But thanks to you and everyone else this story was featured and is my very first story to be featured. So I'm gonna do my best to pour in the extra time and effort to keep it updated.
I am so sorry to hear that life is getting in the way of your writing, but I understand. Hopefully, you will be able to update soon rather than later. As for the four ponies, I'm hoping they're not the Four Horses of the Apocalypse.
Damn this is good
So... should I wait for you to complete the revisions, or are you done with them in the existing chapters?
i feel like there's something missing from the last chapter. twilight was in jail for assault on dash but did it to save Gilda then meet d hooves aka time turner . i don't believe tears in time and realities were mentioned.
3589539
This chapter starts off by trying to explain things and the explanation will continue in the next update.
Why do you think Twilight has repeated this day?
3591131 ah i'm face hoofing for missing that when im rereading the stor again now and noticiting it now thanks for showing me it though.
So. Awesome!! Nice to you again.
3598306 Do I know you? Obviously you know me. Then again, everyone in canterlot does. I am world famous DJ, coved Deadhor6 and Daft Punk, though you probably already knew that. Though the fact you went so far as to change your name to be that of my supposed si.......wait a minuit. WHAT!?!?!
Just read through the story and everything seemed quite rushed. Everyone is taking well that RD was a princess the whole time, suddenly she becomes an alicorn, then everybody seemed in danger of dieing and so on. Oh! Look! The doctor out of f***ing nowhere. ( I failed to locate a 'crossover' Tag.)
Its to much to close together in my opinion. Every topic is just scratched before the next comes up. As a reader you can't digest everything that fast. Also, with the mix of everybody dieing it looks like you just want to make the 'sad' happening by force. Trust me, that doesn't work. It more like everyone wears a red shirt, following by a wilhelm scream.
F**** need More F*** now
3611311 I love how one little turning point in a story is enough to cause you to change your entire outlook of the story. If you had managed to read past that ending you would see that its not what you think it is. I have been searching for an editor for quite some time and due to working two jobs and constant stress over whether or not i'm going to be able to keep my house I haven't had time to do much writing or editing myself. Thank you for further proving what I have already realized. Have a nice day.
3611311 You, my not so nice sir have no right to call yourself a Brony anymore. You're comment doesn't exhibit love nor tolerance and is an overall hateful comment designed to belittle others.
You are no better than Gilda when she scared Fluttershy. I hope your happy with the results.
As an after thought, if you can't stand the story because an editor is absent, offer to edit the story for the writer. That way you can get to read a more streamline story and make a friend in the process.
3598424 I found you and will hug you to death
3598424 before I changed name and appearance ( its cousin twilights fault for the appearance ) the ponyrazzi (paparazzi) were following me and Octavia all over just because we were fillyfoolers
3598424 now we can be a normal couple
WHAT THE HELL kind of clusterfuck is this chapter... Evreything happens at once then it all defuses practically BEFORE IT STARTS
if this comment don't make sense then that's how i felt after reading this... Ok now that that's out of my system we can be civilized.
First thing is the speed at which the story is progressing... you practically introduced a new story arc out of nowhere and then solved it in a matter of sentences. if you wanted too, you could have made a couple of chapters soley based on the doctor and his story.
second thing is the lack of reasoning for the part where twilight faints... i just might be misunderstanding this so correct me if i am : evil celestia comes, twilight runs,
guard tackles her off bridge, gilda comes out of nowhere and basically kills dash, twilight freaks and freezes time, everyone wakes up..... all of this happens in a couple of sentences, again you could stretch these to about 1000 words for each event.
i really do like this story and i understand you are trying but please just take a few days after writing THEN read it once its out of your mind so you can catch the plotholes and errors and stuff. You'll improve that way, we all do
3612577
I made a comment on his blog, in case you didn't see. I hope that gives you something in return for what happened here.
And on the topic of me offering to edit . . . I can't. I edit for ten people, write, go to school, and work. I can simply tell people to find editors now. I can't edit for them, and I cannot edit for everyone. I don't have the time. So . . . yeah. That's why I couldn't offer to edit for him.
3619980 I've read the comment you posted and I will accept your apology. Hopefully the damage can be fixed before too long a time passes, but bro, you need to double check what your posting so something like this can't happen again in the future.
3620371
I'm actually afraid that asking him to come back would have adverse effects. He didn't update this story for an entire year, and he said in his blog that he has been having life problems. If he can't write, then he can't write. And I wouldn't want him to feel forced to write. I just don't want him to leave writing because of me piling on more crap for him to deal with.
So, I don't know. I hope this pans out.
3620382 all we can do, I think at this point after reading everything, is to wait for a reply from him. There is as far as I can tell, nothing else that can be done, but hope he'll return sooner or later.
I don't normally comment when purging a dead story from my list, but his time I think I should. It is a shame to see this story die but not much can be done about that. (For the author: Good luck sorting your RL life out, we understand it is far more important then writing fan-fiction).
Although I disagree with where the story went with the latest chapter, I was happy to see where the story went from there. But I will be brutally honest, I think you may have accidentally mixed the idea for/from another story into the latest chapter with mixed results.
I wish you the best of luck on your future endeavourers.
3642338 i deeply appreciate how polite you were with your opinion of this and thank you for taking the time to comment. I wish others could be as polite and still get their point across.
wonderfull story ill wait for an update anytime
4206174 You seemed to have miss the war that went on over this so I'll explain it rather quickly
Hatemail, attacks across the net, and constant flaming of my inbox led to this story stopping right where the hell it is and never moving any further.
Might I suggest put up Canceled on story instead of On Hiatus.
4353007 I thought I had
Sorry about that.
4353733 Might want 2 do the same 4 other similar stories you have not to confuse readers
4353906 others are actually on hiatus and I might go back to them. I just don't have the time or energy for them right now.
4354433
Totally under stand and what Pisses me off is when people become flaming plot-holes and start flaming people hard work they wreck it for the other readers who loved or liked the story like myself. 
I had an Author on Fan Fiction who had great lichee (Lion-O & Cheetara) stories. 
But the plot-hole flamers started flaming the person stories and he pulled out all that is left is the persons faved stories and authors. Point I hate flamers. 
4569027 just noticed this comment was here. I'm sorry to say that due to tons of drama, hatemail, and tons of other bullshit over a story, this story was cancelled and won't be continued.
It was good while it lasted I would have loved to see ho this story ends.
4599317 well you are the only one. Everyone else saw that and started spamming me with hatemail and all kinds of horrible things im tired of listing for everyone that asks. Sadly this story was cancelled because the overbearing drama and stupidity shown was too much to deal with on a daily basis with everything else I currently have piled on top of me. But I'm glad someone liked it.
People were sending hatemail? About what? I've seen nothing in this story that even comes close to warranting hatemail.
I'm sad that this will never be finished but I understand your reasons.
Dude please finish this please! Ignore the hate mail it just some worthless piece of crap someone sent. People just hate things they just don't like and you can't do any thing about it but really I can tell you are almost finish with this story like two chapters away from it coming to the end man.
I really hope you'd finish, but again I understand that the degenerates that keep up with the hate mail forced your hoof.
Anyway, Try one of those suggestions for the continuation of the story. But if you could put the hate and drama aside I'd like the story from the original author
DUN DUN DUUUUUUUUUUN!!!!!!
This became a dense, confusing morass of wtf? real fast...
If you're just going to slap time travel and alternate dimensions into something that previously had nothing to do with those elements, you need to be more careful to keep it clear what is going on. This is just a disjointed mishmash of scenes that don't make sense.