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The Tale of Thunderhooves

Twilight Sparkle has invited an old teacher of hers to Ponyville to share stories of the legends of Equestria with the young colts and fillies of the small town. and Old Fizban is happy to oblige, sharing a tale not heard for decades.

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Learn for Life

Learn for Life #1 · Aug 24th, 2012 · · ·

Thumbs up from me. This was a nice read from me, although I must ask something:

The class cheered and soon they filtered out the door, Cheerliee smiling before she closed the door behind them all.

Um...wasn't there a blizzard happening outside? They willingly walked outside in a blizzard, where they could freeze to death? I'm not sure if this is worth looking at, and I am exaggerating, but it just stuck out to me.

There weren't any persistent errors I saw in terms of spelling or grammar, though there were a few here and there.

Again, this was a pleasant read. Tahnk you for sharing this.

Rune Dancer

Rune Dancer #2 · Aug 25th, 2012 · · ·

@ Not Worthy. Yea i could have been a bit more descriptive to say that the blizzard stopped. a small facehoof moment for me javascript:smilie(''); I'm glad you liked it however, and I might do a few more stories like this for free-writes. Right now i'm working on a bigger story that will be my first real fic instead of random free-writes or oneshots.