“Celestia!” Twilight rushed over to where Celestia fell. Her crown laid to the side and her horn was burnt. Twilight knelt down and lifted her mentor’s head.
“The Elements of Harmony, you must get to them and use their power to stop them.” Celestia then passed out in Twilight’s arms.
Standing up she looks at her friends. “You heard her girls let’s go.”
“Right” the other bearers spoke then the group took off running out of the door. Rarity hiking her skirt up with her hands.
Behind them the monster that defeated Celestia laughed. “You never escape! Mah ha ha ha.” The voice of Crystalis echoed off the grand hall.
Once outside they saw the swarm striking the barrier. “We got to hurry!” Twilight yelled just as the shield collapsed.
The swarm descended on them with such force one cracked the ground beneath it.
Rainbow Dash cracks her knuckles. “Alright girls, looks like we have to do this the hard way!”
“Right ya are RD!” Applejack chimed in punching a Changeling in the jaw.
“RAINBOW LOOK OUT!” A voice from above called, Rainbow turns to see a changeling was behind her. Just to see a magical blast hit it right in the face.
“Thanks, Twilight!” Rainbow says as she spins kicking another changeling.
Twilight blinks and looks over “That wasn’t me Rainbow.”
“If it’s wasn’t you then who?”
A seventh figure draped down dressed in red Tatzlwurm armor, and some kind of strange pair of glasses. “Gilda? What are you doing here?”
Gilda smiles and looks back “Saving your tail.” She cast another spell and sends a blast of freezing air at some of the changelings.
“But…” Rainbow blinks not sure why her former friend was now fighting with them.
“Look, I know we had a fight. I explain everything after we save your stupid city.” A sad look came to Gilda’s face “We had a fight, but friends make up, right? Can we still be friends?”
“Um... Yeah, first fight, then talk.” Rainbow turns just to face another Gilda, who punches her in the muzzle.
The Fake griffon was then punched by AppleJack. “How do we da real us from these copycats?”
“I have that taken care of Applejack” The booming voice of Doctor Doom answered her as the armored figure landed in the center of the combatants. “Duck!”
“Get down!” Gilda yelled as she yanked Rainbow Down. Just as Doom released an electrical attack at the gathering Changelings.
“Good. That would give us some time to hand out the scanners.” Doom added seeing the changelings were now knocked out with the electrical discharge.
Twilight Sparkle turns and looks at Doom. “You! What are you doing here?”
“I believe the term is Saving the day.”
“You took the sun and moon from Celestia and Luna, causing the weather to go out of control! Not to mention causing a disaster when you teleported Celestia to the middle of the city during a fight!” Twilight’s nostrils failed as she looked angrily at the first creature that defeated her mentor.
“Oh don’t get your panties in a bunch Twilight. Your Precious Celestia almost blasted a whole group of Griffons with that attack. What did you lose? Four? It would have hit 20 of us.” Gilda added her own thoughts as she handed Rainbow Dash a pair of glasses. The lenses were carved gem lenses with smaller gems set in the frames. “Put these on Rainbow.”
“Don’t do it Rainbow, it’s probably a brainwashing device!” Twilight calls out.
“Twilight, focus on one threat to your kingdom at once. I can take over your minds with a snap, I don’t need some silly device. The Scanners let you see the magical energy of the changelings no matter what disguise they have on. You can tell who or what a changeling is by the green aurora. Now stop choose Twilight Sparkle, save your nation, or fight me for your mentor’s bruised ego.”
Twilight looked down then stuck her hand out “Fine but we aren’t finished with this, but for the good of Equestria I give it up for now. We need to get to the vault!”
“Really, the idea of having valuable and powerful items, in a location separate from the castle was not very bright” Doom commented as he headed to the location of the vault. He lifted his arm and used a low-powered concussion blast to knock out a fake Rainbow Dash.
Gilda knew her role, Doom explained it very well. It was surprising that such powerful tools like the Elements of Harmony were kept far away from the Bearers. What more the ponies seemed to not even be aware of how powerful they were.
Taking a breath she spoke out “So what we getting from this Vault place? Some kind of weapon.”
“We getting the Elements of Harmony duh.” Rainbow chipped in as she flips kicked a Gilda copied Changeling.
Gilda sighed did Rainbow always had this snarky attitude? Then she remembered their past, yup snarky and egotistical.
Doom stopped walking and turned “We are retrieving the Elements of Harmony? It’s idiotic to not have the Elements with the Bearers, for emergencies just like this.”
Twilight spun and yelled at Doom “Celestia had a good reason!”
Gilda flinched, she still remembered seeing Doom’s anger. Was she about to see the death of Twilight Sparkle? What she heard was almost as frighting, Doctor Doom’s laughter. “Twilight… oh poor, poor Twilight. Your leader is a fool, and I can prove it with one question.”
“Oh, what question is that?”
“How did you get the Elements of Magic?”
Twilight blinked her mind replaying the events. “When the five elements are present a spark would cause the sixth to be revealed.”
“Yes, but Nightmare moon destroyed the five didn’t she.” Doom dramatically spun around pointing to the other bearers. “You said so yourself Twilight, the Elements are right here! Applejack, represents the spirit of Honesty, Fluttershy is kindness, Pinkie Pie is laughter, Rarity is Generosity, Rainbow Dash represents Loyalty” with another turn he points at Twilight, “And you are Magic. So tell me again why are we heading to the Vault, to get the trinkets? Just like the Element of Magic appeared when you felt the spark, so too would the magic of Harmony allow you to summon those gems whenever you need them.”
He then lowered his arm “But your Friendship been damaged hasn’t it? When you warned Celestia about the fake Cadence she dismissed you.” Then he turned to look at the bearers, “your friends still haven’t apologized for not listening either.”
He looked at Applejack, “You were so driven to prove your Sweet Apple Acres apple dishes are worthy of royalty all you thought about were the bits you could bring home. When Twilight needed you to trust her, as she trusted you on the cliff, you failed.”
“Fluttershy, your timid nature, and fear of showing aggressiveness caused you to follow the others and if you felt doubt you remained silent and didn’t support your friend. Sometimes not speaking up is crueler than saying something someone might not like.”
Gilda watched on, Doom had planned this she looked around and noticed that the majority of Changelings were now out cold. Griffon teams with magic-resistant armor, scanners, and shock batons were easily taking out the foes.
Changelings were by nature infiltrators, they operated mostly by stealth and shock. Against a force that had means of rendering the shape-changing magic useless, the Changelings were being quickly overwhelmed.
“Rarity, the idea of having one of your dresses on the bride was too tempting, you forgot that a wedding takes a month or more to plan, nevermind a wedding of a Royal Princess. That dress would have been ordered months if not a year ahead of time. You abandoned your friend for pride and desire to rise in Canterlot society.”
He then looked at Pinkie Pie “Pinkie Pie, you should have known as well that something was wrong. How many parties have you planned? How many times have you calculated the best means to make every pony happy?” Pinkie Pie’s hair went flat and hung down straight as her head lowered, all the bearers were now showing signs of similar shame and sadness.
Gilda looked to Rainbow Dash. It was her turn, Doom told her what to say. “Rainbow, the bearer of Loyalty. You heard Twilight and you ignored her, but she’s not the only friend you ignored. The day I came to Ponyville, I came to beg for your help. Every time I got you alone, Pinkie Pie showed up.”
She looked over to Pinke Pie, “I’m sorry Pinkie Pie, I made you jealous but I really was desperate. So desperate and frustrated…” Gilda then looked to Fluttershy “I couldn’t keep my cool and yelled at you Fluttershy, I’m very sorry for that.”
“Um… it’s alright…” Fluttershy fiddled with her mane.
Rainbow Dash looked at Gilda “You, were seeking my help? Griffins never ask for help.”
Gilda looked back, “Yeah, I was losing my home. I couldn’t pay the mortgage and I pawned my mother’s Equestrian Games medal, just to make due. I used my last coin to get to Ponyville I didn’t even have the funds to buy an apple.”
Doom then spoke up again “Well, seems there more than one friendship lesson to be learned today. The first step is to apologize, then we head back to the castle. If you all look around, my Griffins have taken down the majority of the swarm.”
“Twi… I feel like ah been drag through the pigpen. Ya ever forgive me?” AppleJack took her stepson hat off and held it to her chest.
“You aren’t the only one Applejack. Twilight if becoming famous means losing you as a friend, to heck with being popular.” Rarity added her own apology.
Pinkie Pie didn’t say a word instead she rashed Foreward crying tackling twilight in a hug. “I… I’m… so… SOOOORRRRYYY!”
Soon the other mane 6 join in the hug crying as Twilight forgave them all.
Then Rainbow Dash took a step back and looked at Gilda. “I guess I overdid it with those pranks huh. Gilda, I didn’t know you needed my help back then. We still pal?”
Gilda wiped her face free of tears. “If you tell anyone I was crying I punch you out got it.”
Rainbow Smiles “Sure, but I think this time we can accept that crying is cool.”
“Yeah, Yeah, sure. Now let’s get to that castle, we still have the Queen bug to swat.”
High above in the Dauntless Hans looked down at the city. “I do believe phase one is complete.”
“Oh does that mean the real fun part begins?” With a sigh, Hans turns to see Discord smiling dressed in a baseball jersey with Doom’s stylized D on the front, a green foam hand with the words Team Doom is #1 printed on it.
“DISCORD! Thank Harmony you are here get me out of this!” Luna being behind the Dracquaniqis couldn’t see the sports fan items.
That was until Discord turned with a wide smile. “Help you out? Just when is this story getting to the grand climax?” He rose up and slid his lion-claw finger under her chin. “Who do you think talked me into becoming friends with the bearers instead of causing chaos?”
“No…”
“Oh yes, dear Luna. Doctor Doom has been using Friendship against you Alicorns! He right now making friends with Twilight and company. Really how he doing it is pure Magic! Ah, get it Friendship is Magic.” Discord flys back laughing as he goes. “What wonderful chaos, and all in a way that makes you all warm and fussy inside.”
“It’s true Princess Luna, Victor von Doom is saving Equestria and the world.” Hans looks to Luna, “It’s not the Changelings who he’s saving the world from. It’s your Sister, she been manipulating everything behind the shadows for generations. Do you think it just chances all six bearers were in the same town at the same time to stop Nightmare Moon?”
“But yet she didn’t plan for my escape, nor this Changeling Invasion. See Luna, she was so focused on saving you, she lost sight of being a ruler.” Discord smiled and snapped his fingers the Element of Magic with crown appeared in his paw.
“Do you see it? A crown. Twilight is fated to rule Equestria, Harmony itself declared her the next ruler. For her to rule, Celestia and you have to step down.”
Luna’s head fell, it was there right in front of her face. Twilight’s crown, twilight the time between Day and Night, the cutie mark a perfect representation of the Element of Magic, It was true Twilight Sparkle was fated to rule Equestria.
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It is kind of sad isn't it you came back to reclaim your crown and next thing you know you got to give it up big sister of the Year everybody
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Season 9
Celestia "We are going to retire."
Luna "Wait what? What do you mean We?"
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(Robot in a dark corner wearing a black cloak saying) Good good Use the confusion inside of you.
While it might be true Harmony has hinted Twilight for the next ruler, but it doesn't necessary to be right now. Forcing the burden and role on a mere teenage is too much if you ask me. How old was the Sisters when they were forced to take the role? 100? 200?
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Maybe it just shows how much Harmony is desperate to replace Celestia because of how rotten she got
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You assuming DOOM would hand over Equestria to her right away. He setting it up for Twilight to be his student to learn proper national leadership skills, like resource management. Then she would be a regional leader where he takes over the world and rules above her. This is Doctor Doom after all, like he going to replace Celestia with someone who been "Taught" by her with no oversight.
No, he already setting himself up to be Celestia's replacement in Twilight's mind. He got her friends to apologize, he also explained they had a connection to the elements and didn't need the gems.
Remember how I had stated in my intermission that Alicorns gain extended life or immortality by being connected to a power source... Celestia's the sun, Luna's the moon. Twilight is Magic...
Excellent work Doctor Doom, using the exact thing, that ponies preach so much about. Only far, FAR more effectively. I wonder if Sunbutt might try to pull something as a"lAsT rEsOrT" if she even can? Will most likely try. But I guess we have to wait for the "next-button" first.
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An interesting approach, I'd love to see DOOM weed through those egoist Canterlot Nobles.
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That doesn't make any sense.
I get Celestia's connection to the sun, Luna's to the moon, because they were created by Discord's power.
But magic isn't his,is it ?
Also, it's everywhere and not concentrated.
Also, an alicorn or someone else should have been able to connect to the sun or moon, like Celestia and Luna did.
Well at least before Doom completely rebuild, edited the sun and moon.
Still, magic isn't centered on the planet ,like Celestia's source of power was the sun.
It's like air.
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Okay, the Elements of Harmony we see in the show first are represented be the gems, then the mane 6 get Rainbow powers, and finally they all access the Elements without the gems.
All the bearers including the Pillars and the student six, tap into the Harmony magic. This is something more powerful then normal magic a unicorn can use. Twilight by being the bearer of the Element of Magic is bound to that force.
So are the other mane 6 just in the show they weren’t Alicorns so didn’t get the extended life span.
We also know the Harmony magic is not just from the tree of Harmony thanks to the Pillars using it before the Tree grew.
The Moon wasn’t created by Discord’s power, just controlled so it wouldn’t leave the plant.
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So it's like Odinforce, in a sense, it's a different kind of magic, stronger than normal unicorn magic but not stronger than, like again Odinforce.
And of course not strong as Doom's magic 😃
Is it stronger than Discord's power?
Wait, so why it's wasn't used to power everything but Discord was?
And what are the requirements to use it?
Does it's source is it's own dimension like Discord's chaos is?
Because I remember that Discord was in his dimension and I can't remember if that dimension has that power and Discord just gets it because he is connected to it or it his own power?
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The ancient Alicorns were desperate once they found a power source strong enough for what they needed they stopped looking. After all their world was drifting away from the native star, as well as a few asteroids of crystal crashed into the planet, both events could have caused extinction of all life.
That power source was Discord. The truth is they didn’t know the power source they found was self aware.
Starswirl was the one that discovered the Harmony magic. He didn’t understand it fully but he did discover it. It’s not stronger then Discord nor is Discord stronger. They are equal but opposite forces.
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But is it Discord's own power or his connection to the chaos dimension gives him power?
I remember that in Marvel Comics and other media, there were characters who got their powers, energy from dimensions they got a connection to in some way or another, like they were born in it , struck a deal with it, got it by their x-gen ,etc
Like Cloak and Dagger, I think.
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I never thought of it that much. However I think he gets power from the dimension. When he stopped being chaotic in the cartoon he started to fade out. Even when he was there.
It like he has to be recharge his powers. That could explain why he didn’t show up all the time, he’s in his pocket universe.
In this story he was taken from a high chaotic universe. His magic was at max then and used to create the sun. This drained him nearly all the way, he did recharge over time even thought he was still being drained to control the sun and moon’s orbit.
He started to fight back first be manipulation of the Unicorns maintaining the enchanted device, then he created the Windigos, and finally broke out himself.
That at least how it happened in this universe.
Ooh, interesting!! I headcanoned that the group just apologized offscreen, not wanting to spoil the now fixed wedding with the dramatics Rarity and Pinkie were bound to cause during an apology. But this is a very good chapter!
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That what I thought of as well. Just given that the show tries to give friendship lessons, it seemed odd to not have them apologize on screen.
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Yeah
This is grating good
That was fun, may I have another? Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
This chapter's title is my favorite one out of all of them!
Doom always wins.
ONE OF THE GREAT STORIES HAS UPDATED! BE SURE TO THANK THE AUTHOR! But seriously, good chapter. I like what you did with the Mane 6 and that bit at the end with Luna, Discord, and Hans. Bravo.
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I’m glad you like it.
Truth is a greater weapon than deceit, because even after you don't accept the truth, its undoubtable that what's before you is reality.
When the Mane 6 and Celestia didn't listen to Twilight and Autumn Blaze was "exiled" by her kirin village for refusing to go Silent, at the end there were no "Sorry for the way we treated you," it was all "Well done for keeping your beliefs in the face of adversity". All well and good, but I'm not noticing any acknowledgement that what they did or said was wrong.
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As once stated/written by the author Mark Twain; "The truth is stranger than fiction because it has no need to be consistent".
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It just three chapters and it does follow the plot. I always planned on my Doom fighting another Doom and doing the marvel cartoon gimmick. I do understand what you mean that why I’m not going to do another “Displaced” story. I played in this sandbox and it time I moved on.
I’m now doing more Human transformation stories. I have Prince of Dreams, another human transformed story I’m going to start. Then I plan a Humans visits Equestria story.
This Wednesday I be posting a new chapter.
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Ah I see. Well I suppose you can never go wrong with human transformation or HiE stories. As long the writing is good and the plot and premise is interesting.
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Any time, friend. Never hurt to sit back go over what you done and make sure everything is in order. That and it never hurt to ask for trusted proofreaders too.
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Yeah, in most of my stories I want to do things with a little twist. For Doom of Griffonstone, I gave my Displaced the memories from the comics character so he actually believed he was Doctor Doom. That part of the plot ends with him fighting the other Doom and he comes to accepts he is not the true thing. I'm mostly writing Doom for fun and not as worried about errors as I am just enjoying crafting a fun story.
Prince of Dreams I'm 9 chapters in and just starting with the "transformation". That story I'm really taking seriously and got myself an Editor (EverfreePony). Thanks to Everfree that story has a more solid flow and far fewer errors slip past.
The other transformation story I'm going to play with the reincarnation gimmick and give my protagonist the worst possible reincarnation I could think of, he will be a slime (Smooze). I will also be doing it in the first person to give myself some practice in that style of writing and internal emotional concepts. I have been told I lack showing internal motivations for my characters.
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Oh I see. That last part sounds like this one isekai anime I once watched few years back. It was called "That One Time I Got Reincarnated as a Slime".
It wasn't particularly my favorite anime and the main story was mediocre at best... at least for me it was. But hearing what you describe kinda reminds me of that anime.
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I was inspired by it. However I wouldn’t be giving him the same abilities. I’m using D&D style slime rules. So no shape change, thought he will eventually be able to mimic a shape but it be like jello mold of a human or pony not a human form. I will be giving him camouflage abilities so he can change colors and mimic rocks, dirt, and general surroundings.
Both those skills he will have to learn. That the stage I am on that story I’m figuring out the rules he will have to live by. One major one is he can’t talk, nor will he understand Pony speech he will have to learn that as well. He will never verbally communicate.
Part of the story is he will be treated as a strange animal by ponies when discovered.
Like I said I want him to have the worst reincarnation roll.
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Ok, so let me get this clear this slime character won't have advanced shape shifting abilities. At least nothing like Changelings and what not. The best he could do is either slime humanoid or pony forms and basic shape of inanimate objects.
Would he be able to talk and see. Like G1 version of the Smooze or are you going with the G4 version?
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You got it right, no advance shape change. He will be able to camouflage like an octopus (eventually) still thinking about how much there.
No talking at all. Perhaps make blurp sounds.
Vision I’m thinking of how he sees. In D&D slimes have what is called blindsight, other stories I read slimes had echo location. I’m thinking my slime has a nucleus like a giant single cell lifeform and he has something like an eye at his nucleus.
Like I said I’m working on the details now.
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If you want I can message you with more details. I could use a sounding board for ideas.
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Sure. I wouldn't mind. I find it fun to come up with story ideas. I would probably like to get the load down on D&D slimes. Since I'm not too familiar with the lore.
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So something similar to Morpha from LoZ: Ocarina of Time? Only he's made of slime and not water.
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Oh Yes! I have to look up more images like that.
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Sure. Here another one.
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That is definitely similar to what I had in mind. Just he the size of a baseball and grows to the size of a basketball. So when he mimics the shape of a pony he foal size.
Again the idea is he has the worst luck being reincarnated in Equestria.
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Let take this to messages because we are now touching on Spoiler subjects.
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Sure and delete previous comment.
Deceit with lies is for amateurs. Professionals deceive with the truth.
Mindblowing. Awe inspiring. Unbelievable awesome!
Best displaced using the magic of friendship itself to rule em all
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No problem I’m writing this story mostly for fun. Due to that it has grammar and spelling errors as well as a few logic holes where I changed my mind along the way.
It’s a free story and as such it not an edited polished work.