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rikithemonk

rikithemonk #1 · Apr 30th, 2020 · · ·

Not a bad story and its nice to see M/M getting a little attention from the Authors. Its not a bad little story. My only real nit pick with it is the cousins thing. It feels kind of tacked on. Its only mentioned once and at the very end. It comes across as a "Oh and by the way.....random awkwardness.... for reasons." just tacked on as an after thought.

Your writing is getting better and I'm looking forward to seeing more from you.

The Monk
“I mean, you just seem to walk in random directions most of the time. How do you ever get to where you're going?" "Oh, that's easy," said Candy, with a smile, ”I just make the place I end up, the place I wanted to be all along." There was an extended moment of silence. ”That... that's absolutely brilliant," -Trick Question

MangoSyrup

MangoSyrup #2 · Apr 30th, 2020 · 1 · ·

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Thank you. I truly appreciate your honesty here and agree with your point. It does feel tacked on. It wasn't supposed to of course. I had originally planned to work it in differently. I strive to improve my writing and this really encourages me.

M/M really does need more attention and more pairings being put out there.