Luna let out a long sad "sigh" as she tossed the damp pillow across her bedroom. It spun through the air and plopped ungracefully onto the floor somewhere near the foot of the bed, scarcely half of it's intended distance, Which wasn't very surprising once you consider the pillow's poor ballistic capabilities. Without looking, Luna felt around on the floor with her magic in A half hearted attempt to retrieve the discarded pillow, but she gave up after only a few failed attempts.
After letting out another long "sigh" Luna smiled A small smile, Ignatius had said that he might be chasing the wrong princess, maybe there was hope after all? Luna didn't want her sister to be lonely, and she was more than just A little ashamed to admit it, but she also wouldn't mind if Ignatius would just stop pursuing Celestia and knock on her door instead.
Suddenly there was A knock at the door. Luna, surprised by the sudden knocking fell out of bed with A dull "Thud" pulling the blankets along with her.
With A thin wisp of smoke wafting from the very tip of her horn, Celestia kicked the door open and rushed into the room, embracing her little sister in A tight hug.
"Lulu! I was so worried, you never came to dinner, and the guards said that you haven't even left your room all day" Celestia said, squeezing her sister A little too tightly.
"Ha ha... yeah... sorry about that... when I knocked and you didn't answer, I may have panicked just A teensy bit." Celestia bashfully replied.
Luna began crying into her sister's shoulder, "I'm so sorry sister, I know it's wrong, but I want him to want Me! Does that make me A bad pony?" Luna asked her sister as she continued to cry, her tears leaving A damp trail down her cheeks.
Some capitalizations that need to be fixed. Might be more.
"It isn't realy that late." Said Celestia stretching and stifling a yawn."He seemed like A night person anyway, I'm shure that he's still awake. We should go and see him."
Really and sure are misspelled. Overall really liking the fic. Cant wait to see how Ignatius gets out of this one.
10143295 "CRINGE".... ....OK i think I got it all fixed! Thanks for pointing out all of those capitalization errors, I really appreciate it. Capitalization is one of the areas in which I need to improve.
Hmm...shure sure and shugar sugar are two words I'm constantly misspelling I normally catch those on my own but this one seems to have slipped through the cracks.
Thanks again for pointing out those errors. I really appreciate it, I try to turn each one into a lesson so that I might improve as a writer.
Some capitalizations that need to be fixed. Might be more.
Really and sure are misspelled.
Overall really liking the fic. Cant wait to see how Ignatius gets out of this one.
Welp. He's dead. So much for that. XD
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"CRINGE"....
....OK i think I got it all fixed! Thanks for pointing out all of those capitalization errors, I really appreciate it. Capitalization is one of the areas in which I need to improve.
Hmm...
shuresure andshugarsugar are two words I'm constantly misspelling I normally catch those on my own but this one seems to have slipped through the cracks.Thanks again for pointing out those errors. I really appreciate it, I try to turn each one into a lesson so that I might improve as a writer.
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(Looks at the chapter, refreshes it a few times, then looks it over again before looking at you)
You sure about that? Looks the same as how the other guy pointed out.
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Oops, looks like i forgot to save after i made some of those corrections.
Should look alot better now.
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Yeah, gotta manually save every time you make a change. This site doesn't have auto save like other story-based sites and apps do.