I like this, do me a favor and don't be like so many authors and get one or two chapters into a great story, goin strong, then put it on hiatus till 3455, aka years, as it is just rude n annoyin to readers, not callin you out, but as of late I comment somethin like this every time I see a great story pop up, to hopefully convince the guy writin it to continue it when they feel down or whatever, either way keep the good shit comin, lol
Eh, feels a bit rushed but it's only the first chapter so I guess you can still iron out the kinks. Seriously need to give it a once over on first/second person perspective. This seems to jarringly switch between I, me, my/you, your, you're really often for such a short chapter. Still has a lot of room to grow and is pretty decent otherwise. Sadly I'm getting burned out on generic snarky sex god anon stories so I'mma pass but good luck with this.
Yes.
Well, this is not quite what I was expecting. But I like it.
I was honestly expecting an Anon story, with him having no conflict at all with any ponies and the changlings were just extremely curious about him.
But this is fine
As a Bugbutt fan I approve of this story!
Avada kedavra
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Can I bug you about updating your Ghost Rider story?
I like this, do me a favor and don't be like so many authors and get one or two chapters into a great story, goin strong, then put it on hiatus till 3455, aka years, as it is just rude n annoyin to readers, not callin you out, but as of late I comment somethin like this every time I see a great story pop up, to hopefully convince the guy writin it to continue it when they feel down or whatever, either way keep the good shit comin, lol
i mean, the human is correct Chrysalis > Celestia, its just not a contest
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Been writing in S.P too often these days, I keep lapsing back into it lol
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Well, i am working on my SlenderMare story right now.
Just so you know cereal-killer, the cover was drawn by both of them. It was a collaboration. :)
I am intrigued, hope to see more soon.
I like.
You had my attention
Now you have my erection
hehehe
I agree with your last statement
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Eh, feels a bit rushed but it's only the first chapter so I guess you can still iron out the kinks. Seriously need to give it a once over on first/second person perspective. This seems to jarringly switch between I, me, my/you, your, you're really often for such a short chapter. Still has a lot of room to grow and is pretty decent otherwise. Sadly I'm getting burned out on generic snarky sex god anon stories so I'mma pass but good luck with this.
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Gah, more of them got past me. I'm terrible at picking errors like that up.
Thanks for giving the story a chance at least. Hopefully I can turn it into a story worth picking up again.
... Navarone? Is that you?
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Who are you, nav
jake isn't cool enough to be nav, plus he's too chill. Nav wouldn't go away without a weapon of some kind.